Vijay Pandit Poet Rhyme

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December 31, 2023
Placed 1st: This or That, Vol 22 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Desperate Hope

While gelid breezes of winter, quiver emotions of decaying rays,
And arc of horizon cedes to dusk, evoking grimace of malaise,
Casting shadows tenebrous, shrouding glimmer of a slowing day,
Desperate hope lingers still, in resplendence of autumn’s decay;

Gawking in yonder, where gamboge-orange woodlands fade,
Reminiscing in seasons harkening, realms of love now evade,
Mindful of the broken vows, when grievous calls destiny made,
When forever promises receded, and pledges eternal strayed.

Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye?
Was it the last tear of hapless eyes; a bawl of love gone awry?
A silent protest, concealing mindfully, anguish of a forlorn sigh?
Was it the clamor of jilted desires, love enamored chose to decry?

Springs of past summon hope, having risen from wintry throe,
Nights of nightmare cede to dreams in halo of daybreaks aglow,
As candle of love revives hearts, fueled by inspirations of soul,
When whispers of sensuous hints, aspirations of romance cajole.

Desperate hope expounds repentance, vying healing through time,
Unsure if, pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime;
Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone,
If dreams forsaken will blossom, in womb of tomorrow’s dawn.

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Paghunda Zahid January 17, 2024 at 6:34 AM That's a beautiful poem vijay and congratulations on your placement man

Edward Ibeh January 11, 2024 at 6:27 AM Another masterpiece from your golden pen, Vijay:-) You're A poet's poet. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!

Christuraj Alex January 10, 2024 at 9:59 PM "gelid breezes", "arc of horizon", "mulls~ if kiss of passion" - Grand writing. Congratulations!

Karen Jones January 10, 2024 at 11:07 AM Beautiful and melodic! Congratulations on your first place win Vijay!

Bj Legros Kelley January 5, 2024 at 11:40 PM Beautifully written with tears for ink, and the hope of love rekindled. Love can bloom anew, ashes may indeed nourish the roots, sprouting up sprouts in a new dawn <3

Sara Kendrick January 5, 2024 at 3:37 AM Yes, dreams can blossom in a tomorrow because tomorrow/s offer a new day. Thanks for sharing your descriptive and expressive work with us. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara K

Evelyn Judy Buehler January 4, 2024 at 4:35 PM So sad when love dies. This tale of a deep desire to rekindle the flame, is interesting and brilliantly written, my friend.

Charles Messina January 4, 2024 at 2:33 AM As usually, your wonderful pen glows again, Vijay. Masterful and brilliant! Happy New Year, my friend. Wishing you all the best... Charlie

Christina Bowring January 4, 2024 at 12:01 AM Outstanding, deep, masterful, intelligent poetry dear Vijay as noted by all these richly deserved comments. An incredible piece of writing from your highly skilled pen. So many lines to marvel at here with such wonderful flow, rhymes, as you took us on a journey. Amazing! Loved it. Happy New Year to you :):)

Hilda Greenhough January 3, 2024 at 6:51 PM This is a special poem highlighting the joy of love, the loss and the hopes rebirth. It read smoothly. Thank you.

Deb M January 3, 2024 at 1:32 PM Amazing imagery in true Vijay style! Incredibly beautiful…..Debx

Hiya Sharma January 3, 2024 at 9:39 AM This is such a sublime take for the contest! There's a uniquely profound depth, breathing in the cores of these lines, which you've stunningly carved whilst painting a tapestry using colours as well.."Desperate hope lingers still, in resplendence of autumn’s decay;","Gawking in yonder, where gamboge-orange woodlands fade"These lines give me quite a rich fantasy/fairytale vibe where melancholy lurks yet hope lingers in the shadows..How beautifully you've made this poem flow with exquisite rhymes Hiya Sharma January 3, 2024 at 9:40 AM It's really spellbinding and majestic.. Absolutely enjoyed reading this.. A FAV indeed ~ :)

Joseph P. DiMino January 3, 2024 at 8:13 AM "Mindful of the broken vows, when grievous calls destiny made, When forever promises receded, and pledges eternal strayed." -- "pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone, If dreams forsaken will blossom, in womb of tomorrow’s dawn." WOW! A poetic masterpiece. Happy New Year my friend!

Maria Williams January 2, 2024 at 11:06 PM I absolutely love the way your lines flow dear Vijay, so filled with imagery and deep-seated sorrow. Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye? Was it the last tear of hapless eyes; a bawl of love gone awry? I love these lines . Happy New Year to you and yours ...Hugs

Tom Cunningham January 2, 2024 at 8:01 AM Even when the odds seem overwhelmingly against us, we long for even the slightest glimmer of hope, we should never give up on it. Superb writing Vijay, happy new year to you and best of luck in the contest. Tom

Victor Buhagiar January 2, 2024 at 2:26 AM A great poem, the contrast is so clear. Sorry I missed some poems but I was too sick. Wishing you a Happy New Year.

Bill Baker January 1, 2024 at 10:35 PM A FAV for my list, Vijay, and an excellent entry for the contest, my friend. It should place well. Your rhyming is impeccable and depth of this love delima is expressed with such eloquent thoughts. You guide the reader step by step through the struggle and the hope. Thanks for sharing your poetic gift with us. good luck, and Happy New Year! Bill

Ink Empress January 1, 2024 at 10:07 PM Dear Vijay, sorry for the late response to your brilliant poem. Happy new year and i hope this year brings you all that you desire. And as for the poem, where do i start praising such intelligent, and clever poetry that depicts profound truths of lif Desperate hope you’ve taken to a whole different strong level that i truly am in awe of! Your poetic skills always amaze me, this one left me speechless for the depth.especially “ Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye?” Ink Empress January 1, 2024 at 10:08 PM Wow! How deep and poetic is that! I really love every line in this. “ Unsure if, pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone,” this resonates even more and hits home and i think many can resonate with that too! This definitely is a top winner for that contest. And a new fave for my list! Pleasure always reading your work

Brandy Nicole January 1, 2024 at 6:28 PM In this world, darkness (evil deeds and thoughts) have taken over. It's beyond frightening, many have lost ' hope '. We must continue to follow the light, which is (God.) So many are striving to do what's right. With that being said, my heart rejoices. Your thoughts are deep and emotional. My best to you, Vijay. Happy New Year ! Hugs, Brandy

Joseph May January 1, 2024 at 12:21 PM "Springs of past summon hope, having risen from wintry throe", Well penned Vijay, best wishes for the New Year

Sotto Poet January 1, 2024 at 9:27 AM Your Genius Poetry qualities are undeniable, my friend. Your writing is graceful and eloquent. Remorse and desperate longing seek refuge in time. Pleas for forgiveness raises questions about whether they can restore a glorious future. Will old desires ever inspire love? Will forgotten dreams thrive in tomorrow's first light? Your poetry and contest interpretation are great.

Judy Ball December 31, 2023 at 6:03 PM Ah my friend you are indeed a Master Poet. Beautifully worded and eloquently expressed. Loved it. God Bless and Happy New Year to you and yours. JB Vijay Pandit January 1, 2024 at 8:28 AM Thank you my friend for your kind remarks. Blessings and Happy New Year to you, Judy.

Heidi Sands December 31, 2023 at 1:08 PM I agree, the last beautiful stanza wraps this up! I wish you a positive New Year with love and peace! :) Vijay Pandit January 1, 2024 at 8:25 AM Thank you my friend--appreciate your support, Heidi. Happy New Year to you as well.

Silent One December 31, 2023 at 11:47 AM Great last stanza to sum this up my friend.. Desperate hope expounds repentance, vying healing through time, Unsure if, pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone, If dreams forsaken will blossom, in womb of tomorrow’s dawn... Nice rhymes and an excellent take on the contest.. Best of luck and I wish you a prosperous 2024.. Vijay Pandit January 1, 2024 at 8:24 AM Thank you, SO. Always an honor to hear from you my friend.

William Kelii Kekaula December 31, 2023 at 11:31 AM Needless to say, yours will be on Edward's list as 1st, if I may be allowed to lean boldly, Vijay. I will further my presumptions, by the addition of this to my Fave list, should the end be ... what I dare not say, my friend. Cheers, 2024. Aloha, William Vijay Pandit January 1, 2024 at 8:24 AM Thank you my friend. Always appreciate your visit and kind remarks. Many thanks, William. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.