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December 31, 2023
Placed 1st: This or That, Vol 22 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh


 

While gelid breezes of winter, quiver emotions of decaying rays, And arc of horizon cedes to dusk, evoking grimace of malaise, Casting shadows tenebrous, shrouding glimmer of a slowing day, Desperate hope lingers still, in resplendence of autumn’s decay; Gawking in yonder, where gamboge-orange woodlands fade, Reminiscing in seasons harkening, realms of love now evade, Mindful of the broken vows, when grievous calls destiny made, When forever promises receded, and pledges eternal strayed. Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye? Was it the last tear of hapless eyes; a bawl of love gone awry? A silent protest, concealing mindfully, anguish of a forlorn sigh? Was it the clamor of jilted desires, love enamored chose to decry? Springs of past summon hope, having risen from wintry throe, Nights of nightmare cede to dreams in halo of daybreaks aglow, As candle of love revives hearts, fueled by inspirations of soul, When whispers of sensuous hints, aspirations of romance cajole. Desperate hope expounds repentance, vying healing through time, Unsure if, pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone, If dreams forsaken will blossom, in womb of tomorrow’s dawn.

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Date: 1/17/2024 6:34:00 AM
That's a beautiful poem vijay and congratulations on your placement man
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Date: 1/11/2024 6:27:00 AM
Another masterpiece from your golden pen, Vijay:-) You're A poet's poet. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 1/10/2024 9:59:00 PM
"gelid breezes", "arc of horizon", "mulls~ if kiss of passion" - Grand writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/10/2024 11:07:00 AM
Beautiful and melodic! Congratulations on your first place win Vijay!
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Date: 1/5/2024 11:40:00 PM
Beautifully written with tears for ink, and the hope of love rekindled. Love can bloom anew, ashes may indeed nourish the roots, sprouting up sprouts in a new dawn <3
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Date: 1/5/2024 3:37:00 AM
Yes, dreams can blossom in a tomorrow because tomorrow/s offer a new day. Thanks for sharing your descriptive and expressive work with us. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara K
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Date: 1/4/2024 4:35:00 PM
So sad when love dies. This tale of a deep desire to rekindle the flame, is interesting and brilliantly written, my friend.
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Date: 1/4/2024 2:33:00 AM
As usually, your wonderful pen glows again, Vijay. Masterful and brilliant! Happy New Year, my friend. Wishing you all the best... Charlie
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Date: 1/4/2024 12:01:00 AM
Outstanding, deep, masterful, intelligent poetry dear Vijay as noted by all these richly deserved comments. An incredible piece of writing from your highly skilled pen. So many lines to marvel at here with such wonderful flow, rhymes, as you took us on a journey. Amazing! Loved it. Happy New Year to you :):)
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Date: 1/3/2024 6:51:00 PM
This is a special poem highlighting the joy of love, the loss and the hopes rebirth. It read smoothly. Thank you.
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Date: 1/3/2024 1:32:00 PM
Amazing imagery in true Vijay style! Incredibly beautiful…..Debx
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Date: 1/3/2024 9:39:00 AM
This is such a sublime take for the contest! There's a uniquely profound depth, breathing in the cores of these lines, which you've stunningly carved whilst painting a tapestry using colours as well.."Desperate hope lingers still, in resplendence of autumn’s decay;","Gawking in yonder, where gamboge-orange woodlands fade"These lines give me quite a rich fantasy/fairytale vibe where melancholy lurks yet hope lingers in the shadows..How beautifully you've made this poem flow with exquisite rhymes
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Date: 1/3/2024 9:40:00 AM
It's really spellbinding and majestic.. Absolutely enjoyed reading this.. A FAV indeed ~ :)
Date: 1/3/2024 8:13:00 AM
"Mindful of the broken vows, when grievous calls destiny made, When forever promises receded, and pledges eternal strayed." -- "pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone, If dreams forsaken will blossom, in womb of tomorrow’s dawn." WOW! A poetic masterpiece. Happy New Year my friend!
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Date: 1/2/2024 11:06:00 PM
I absolutely love the way your lines flow dear Vijay, so filled with imagery and deep-seated sorrow. Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye? Was it the last tear of hapless eyes; a bawl of love gone awry? I love these lines . Happy New Year to you and yours ...Hugs
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Date: 1/2/2024 8:01:00 AM
Even when the odds seem overwhelmingly against us, we long for even the slightest glimmer of hope, we should never give up on it. Superb writing Vijay, happy new year to you and best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 1/2/2024 2:26:00 AM
A great poem, the contrast is so clear. Sorry I missed some poems but I was too sick. Wishing you a Happy New Year.
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:35:00 PM
A FAV for my list, Vijay, and an excellent entry for the contest, my friend. It should place well. Your rhyming is impeccable and depth of this love delima is expressed with such eloquent thoughts. You guide the reader step by step through the struggle and the hope. Thanks for sharing your poetic gift with us. good luck, and Happy New Year! Bill
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:07:00 PM
Dear Vijay, sorry for the late response to your brilliant poem. Happy new year and i hope this year brings you all that you desire. And as for the poem, where do i start praising such intelligent, and clever poetry that depicts profound truths of lif Desperate hope you’ve taken to a whole different strong level that i truly am in awe of! Your poetic skills always amaze me, this one left me speechless for the depth.especially “ Love now mulls~ if kiss of passion was a subtext of final goodbye?”
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:08:00 PM
Wow! How deep and poetic is that! I really love every line in this. “ Unsure if, pleadings in atonement, will redeem future sublime; Whether love saplings will ever sprout, from ashes of passions bygone,” this resonates even more and hits home and i think many can resonate with that too! This definitely is a top winner for that contest. And a new fave for my list! Pleasure always reading your work
Date: 1/1/2024 6:28:00 PM
In this world, darkness (evil deeds and thoughts) have taken over. It's beyond frightening, many have lost ' hope '. We must continue to follow the light, which is (God.) So many are striving to do what's right. With that being said, my heart rejoices. Your thoughts are deep and emotional. My best to you, Vijay. Happy New Year ! Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 1/1/2024 12:21:00 PM
"Springs of past summon hope, having risen from wintry throe", Well penned Vijay, best wishes for the New Year
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Date: 1/1/2024 9:27:00 AM
Your Genius Poetry qualities are undeniable, my friend. Your writing is graceful and eloquent. Remorse and desperate longing seek refuge in time. Pleas for forgiveness raises questions about whether they can restore a glorious future. Will old desires ever inspire love? Will forgotten dreams thrive in tomorrow's first light? Your poetry and contest interpretation are great.
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Date: 12/31/2023 9:51:00 PM
powerful and bold
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/1/2024 8:29:00 AM
So nice to hear from you Mat. Much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 12/31/2023 6:03:00 PM
Ah my friend you are indeed a Master Poet. Beautifully worded and eloquently expressed. Loved it. God Bless and Happy New Year to you and yours. JB
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/1/2024 8:28:00 AM
Thank you my friend for your kind remarks. Blessings and Happy New Year to you, Judy.
Date: 12/31/2023 5:01:00 PM
the last verse took my breath away, especially 'in womb of tomorrow's dawn.' Your word choice and rhyme scheme were both powerful throughout your poem. So many outstanding lines to choose from. I also liked 'nights of nightmare cede to dreams in halo of daybreaks aglow." Happy New year, Vijay! Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/1/2024 8:27:00 AM
Thank you for your valued presence on my page, Sara. Much appreciate your insights, as always.
Date: 12/31/2023 2:58:00 PM
Tomorrow's dawn... A new world is coming Veej. Jesus is king of the earth. Restoration is sure. Hope to see you there my friend
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/1/2024 8:26:00 AM
Thank you Tom--I like your upbeat outlook.
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