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Departs Autumn

Lost leaves repeat their yearly teardrop curtain fall

                in blended rhythms cry ~
  departing hues of autumns call

                and tolls the sound of death 
  on sodden grounding groove

when next the blanket worn is white 
                like satin laying smooth



8-30-2020
Rithimus Divisa 5 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Gregory R Barden 
From Between Now and Next Spring

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John Hamilton

Date: 9/21/2020 7:49:00 AM

Congrats Jeanne on an excellent write and win!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/23/2020 6:19:00 AM

Hi John...thank you so much for that.

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/21/2020 2:00:00 AM

Sweet melancholy expressed perfectly. 'yearly teadrop curtain fall' sounds so good, conjures so strongly. The whole verse reads like a song. Sits together like brickwork. Jeanne, Congratulations on your marvellous poem and Win!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/23/2020 6:18:00 AM

Thank you for such kind and glowing words, Sigrid. You lifted my spirits today. :D

Elaine George

Date: 9/20/2020 4:21:00 PM

How Beautiful! Number one in my opinion. A Fav of me, Jeanne.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/20/2020 7:27:00 PM

Elaine, that is so kind. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Jeanne

Newton Ranaweera

Date: 9/20/2020 12:36:00 PM

A great piece on autumn's smooth flow!! Congratulations on your great win, Jeanne!!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/20/2020 7:28:00 PM

Hi Newton, Thanks so much. :D

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/20/2020 9:28:00 AM

Jeanne, you have seamlessly taken us from one season to the next with your beautiful, visceral images. Love your action oriented verbs - "toll." Congratulations on your winning placement.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/20/2020 7:28:00 PM

ding, dong, ding....thank you Sam, :D

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2020 3:12:00 PM

gorgeous. I often write about the ending of summer or fall and how blends into winter. Such a "natural" thing to write about with beautiful imagery like this.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/4/2020 9:03:00 PM

I have now returned to the south and Mexico is hot and steamy still...hurricanes are on the horizon so I'm sure my writing is about to shift again, lol, I can't wait to read some of your upcoming fall/winter poetry.

Elaine George

Date: 9/2/2020 1:40:00 AM

Awesome write. Sure to be on the winners list, dear Jeanne.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 9/4/2020 9:01:00 PM

that is very kind of you Elaine. thank you so much!