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Departing Soul

The sweet, sweet smell of a departing soul. Your face blurring with my tears, as your warm hand grows cold. The sound of children weeping breaks the heart, with tears flowing down their cheeks, salty kisses to part. For the "Senses" contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 1/17/2012 9:25:00 AM
Great entry for the contest Christopher, good luck, Elizabeth
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/17/2012 11:18:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 1/16/2012 2:18:00 PM
Powerful write - many congrats to you too : )
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/16/2012 7:41:00 PM
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Date: 1/16/2012 6:34:00 AM
Lovely poem Christopher....and touching,but I like it alot.Good luck in the "Senses" contest,hope you win again. - oxox hugs Anne-Lise
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/16/2012 7:41:00 PM
Thank You!!
Date: 1/13/2012 4:05:00 PM
Christopher, this is a nicely written double kimo.
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/14/2012 6:17:00 AM
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Date: 1/12/2012 9:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Come to Your Senses" contest Christopher. Love, Carol
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 3:36:00 PM
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Date: 1/12/2012 5:53:00 AM
Congratulations Christopher, very nice well done. x
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 3:37:00 PM
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Date: 1/11/2012 10:44:00 PM
Nicely done Christopher. Congratulations
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 5:47:00 AM
Thank you!!!
Date: 1/11/2012 9:57:00 PM
CONGRATS CHRISTOPHER ON HM WITH THIS EXCELLENT ENTRY LUV...
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 5:47:00 AM
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Date: 1/11/2012 9:41:00 PM
Well, it certainly touched my senses. "The sweet smell of a departing soul" - I love that line! And, I also like the next one - "your face blurring with my tears" - that is a very creative way to make me see you crying while looking into the face of a dying loved one. Nicely done.
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 5:47:00 AM
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Date: 1/11/2012 7:41:00 PM
Congratulations, Christopher on your HM. Sweet heart-felt poem!
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/12/2012 5:47:00 AM
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Date: 1/11/2012 6:13:00 PM
sweet but sad, Christopher. Congratulations on your win with this little gem.
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Christopher Bunton
Date: 1/11/2012 7:35:00 PM
Thank You! Congrats on yours as well. :)

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