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Dental Rockstar

I went to the dentist It had been awhile Yet after much drilling Followed by filling The bills heaped in a pile He said come twice a year Or try to make it three Brush three times a day And floss the right way And maybe just maybe You’ll be a dental star Which sounded bizarre But did what I was told Though received a scold From that dental czar He said come monthly please To avoid tooth disease And floss between breaths Which was not life or death Though it wasn’t a breeze But it wasn’t enough Oh, my dentist was tough And then he dared to say To come once a day! While my tooth he did stuff He seemed to be leaning For a constant cleaning Of all my dirty teeth Both above and beneath As if he was meaning To be on my payroll Funded by my poor soul But he wanted power To clean my teeth each hour Or he’d have to drill holes In more of my molars He was a steamroller Needing to do more Which sounded like war With him as a tooth gaoler Yet his chair, I was in it Every other minute Every single day For he got his way And knew how to win it Still, I did not make the grade So he tried to persuade To avoid drilling And any more filling He preferred that I stayed Well I tried to be cross Asking when do I floss When he said, I reckon We’ll clean each second With no time left to pause Thus, I reached the high bar As a famed dental star With no plaque to cleave But, with no time to leave I bid my life au revoir

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Date: 1/23/2024 9:07:00 PM
Great win, David! Amazing rhyming throughout and a fun story to boot. Storytelling seems to come easy for you, my friend. This was a fun read. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 1/20/2024 6:58:00 AM
Congratulations on your winner in this contest. Way to go. Sara K..The dentist I went to when growing up had a sign on his wall that said: brush your teeth, you dirty rat.
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Date: 1/11/2024 6:56:00 PM
Maybe you can now move on to Uranium isotope teeth, you know, the kind that last 10 to the 23rd power of a second... Great write, David.
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Date: 1/10/2024 11:21:00 AM
This is just excellent and such a poetical explanation of going to the dentist.. I hate it.. always in pain after... Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Date: 1/8/2024 8:09:00 PM
David, this comical narrative poem is a masterpiece! Janice
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Date: 1/8/2024 1:30:00 PM
I went to a dentist like this once. And once was too often. Cave people didn't have dentists and lots of them still had their teeth. Thank you for this poem. It's a great read for February, which is national dental month.
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:14:00 PM
Thanks for the kind words, and I heard that about the caveman teeth.
Date: 1/8/2024 8:59:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your fun "Dental Rockstar" write/story. I hate to go to the dentist but twice a year I will go... Have a great day writing away............
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Date: 1/8/2024 7:56:00 AM
Incredibly well crafted write a fav in my book. Deserves a favorite.! I have not seen characterization used this well ever in a poem, since I’ve been here. This is more than a poem about a dentist visit.. this is a piece of excellent work in poetry. Thanks David, Pabgue Five star review)))))*****
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Date: 1/8/2024 12:50:00 AM
Lol, He was hooked on drilling, I enjoyed this fun write
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Date: 1/7/2024 6:41:00 PM
Yes, you captured a very interesting feeling about dentists and mouth/teeth/gum issues that many of us face. It's certainly a chore. They have me coming in every three months at least for now. Hopefully, not more often. It is a bit of a nightmare, which why it's useful to have a good looking technician! LOL!!
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Date: 1/7/2024 6:04:00 PM
Oh my! That is a lot of time at the dental office! Great rhyming in this engaging poem!
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