Deja Vu

Deja Vu See the red light in the hall. Feel the bleakness over all. Steel lamp at the nurses’ station Darkened wards with moaning patients On a metal chair, you sit, the whole surrounds, dimly lit. Oh, she’s just a little child, who must wait here for a while. How bravely you did wait, in this after-midnight fate. Soon a mother comes in view, a hand extended to free you. By the cement wall you walk, with silence broken by a talk. Mother had tears in her eyes. "Tonight, your father nearly died." 3/4/17

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/12/2017 1:46:00 PM

Sad topic, but beautifully expressed from a child's POV (point-of-view), Janis. Mature theme distilled in an innocent poetic vessel. A poem most everyone can relate to, having gone thru that experience before. Splendid poetry. Love and smiles.

Andrew Battaglino

Date: 4/11/2017 7:11:00 PM

Congratulations. I really enjoyed your poem.

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/14/2017 10:09:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by.

Eve Roper

Date: 4/10/2017 8:33:00 PM

Love the imagery , congratulations on your win :-)

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/14/2017 10:09:00 AM

Thanks, Eve.

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 4/10/2017 6:43:00 PM

Wow powerful! Kids innately tend to take adult topics pretty well.... until later in life.... if ignored (but then they're adults). :) Very well written.. Congrats on your placement.

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/10/2017 7:38:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by. Blessings, Janis

Darren White

Date: 4/10/2017 2:08:00 PM

Oh, Janis... That last stanza is so moving... How hard that must have been. Congratulations on your placement.

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/10/2017 7:38:00 PM

Thanks Darren. It's healing to deal with a memory.

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/10/2017 12:37:00 PM

Little people can be pretty brave, nice work Janis and congratulations...

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/10/2017 7:37:00 PM

The memory of that experience stayed. Thanks for the congrats.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/10/2017 9:55:00 AM

I liked how you started with the details the child sees and then broadened the view as the mother entered the poem. Great write - congrats on your win.

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/10/2017 7:35:00 PM

Thanks Agnes. Blessings, Janis.

Lu Loo

Date: 4/10/2017 7:56:00 AM

oh so sadly beautiful! the last line really got to me and wrapped up the entire poem nicely. thank you and congrats :)-luloo

Janis Thompson
Date: 4/10/2017 7:34:00 PM

Thanks to you luloo for your appreciation of the poem. You are coming up with some great contests lately.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/7/2017 12:28:00 AM

That was rapid emotional fire written so extremely well! A great poem ... CayCay

Janis Thompson
Date: 3/7/2017 4:03:00 PM

Thanks CayCay. It was a haunting memory and I still didn't get it right.