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Degradation

homeless man on the edge of the park devours his gifted pizza crumbs stick to his dirt streaked face like layers of public disdain people about regard him a walking virus homeless man scents the air with squalor his torn clothes proclaim the cheapness of rags an untidy emptiness a life throttled by dysfunction as dark as a closed coffin What is the measure of degradation? What happens when direction goes missing? this man, stooped, ungainly like tall weeds, pinches bits of pizza crust thrown to birds that gather about his wounded wildness a salvage gesture to feed the birds a clarity to nourish what's unprotected to stow away grief to worry about his next meal implanted, like a field under seeded Poem Composed October 7, 2021 Contest: This or That Volume 7 Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 10/29/2021 5:29:00 PM
It reminds me of how we criminalize homelessness. People who we treat as invisible. You have humanized him. -Thomas
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/29/2021 7:36:00 PM
Thank you, Thomas, for your stop by + insights. The homeless man knew the good of spreading charity. An urban scene to give us pause, an image to ponder. Be well. Sincerely Brian
Date: 10/26/2021 4:19:00 AM
I'm catching up with my reading and echo all that's been said Brian. An excellent poem with that unflinching Sambourne touch that adds poignancy and depth to your words. Cheers - Gary
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/26/2021 6:39:00 AM
Hello Gary, your supportive words are a tonic to one's pen. Thank you sincerely for your thoughtfulness. Be well. Brian
Date: 10/16/2021 1:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win. " What happens when direction goes missing"....says it all.... Excellent. Blessings, Paulette
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/16/2021 7:17:00 PM
Thanks very much, Paulette, for your stop by + supportive comment. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 10/13/2021 8:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful yet sad story/write. True for too many. Have a blessed day with your win...............
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/13/2021 3:26:00 PM
Greetings Paula, I hope that you are well. My appreciation for your thoughtful visit to my small posting. Thank you for the congratulations. The homeless fellow demonstrated sincere humanity by realizing the birds needed feeding too. What we see as surface degradation may (in fact) drape a good heart. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 10/11/2021 4:01:00 PM
I really like your take on degradation. It's very innovative and I hope you scored high with it. Oh wow, I see you got first place. Congrats on a well deserved win
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/11/2021 4:28:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your affirmative message as you are one of most remarkable poets on poetrysoup.com. There isn't a poetic form that you haven't mastered. Wellness and happiness to you always, Brian
Date: 10/10/2021 7:52:00 AM
Brian, Your poem is so sad and beautiful, and masterfully written. Congratulations on First Place!!!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/10/2021 11:37:00 AM
Hello Ann, You are quite right - there was a deep sadness in this fellow awash in poverty, and yet he found solace in feeding the birds. It became a scene of kind reciprocity. Thank you for the visit to my page. There are other poems of uplifting scenes to discover that offset melancholy.. Be well. Brian
Date: 10/10/2021 2:28:00 AM
Subject matter on a far too common sight today, Brian, The visual aspect is superb, but love the poetic bits, like, 'layers of public disdain' ungainly weeds. I see its a winner, i'm not surprised.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/10/2021 6:00:00 AM
Greetings Harry. Your supportive words are encouraging indeed. Hope that your health is fine + that you continue to pen fine postings. Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 10:06:00 PM
"What is the measure of degradation? What happens when direction goes missing?" Very thought-provoking questions. Great Work. Congratulations!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/10/2021 5:58:00 AM
Thank you Christuraj. Very thoughtful of you to leave a congratulatory comment. Be well. Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 1:22:00 PM
Glad to be engrossed in your powerful vocabulary, Brian. BIG congrats on your splendid win at the TOP of #1.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 1:47:00 PM
Hello Vijay. So good of you to read my entry + post such declarative support. Thank you immensely. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 10:05:00 AM
Brian, you have done an excellent job and deserve to be congratulated on your contest victory with your inspiring poem. Best wishes
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 12:01:00 PM
Greetings, Lasaad. Praise from such a fine poet as yourself is a grand gift indeed. Take care. I look forward to your next posting. Sincerest regards, Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 9:13:00 AM
Those who are truly kind are the ones who put the needs of others before themselves, and that includes birds. Well done and congratulations on your contest win with this inspirational poem, Brian.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 12:06:00 PM
Very insightful words, Jenna. Your observations spark a poet's pen. Thank you for your read of my poem + the supportive remarks. Take care + best wishes as you continue to write. Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 9:02:00 AM
Congrats on this amazing write. Wonderful - God bless you dear friend. Love, Gina
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 12:02:00 PM
Hello Gina. Your thoughtfulness has no limits. Thank you heartily for your drop by + gracious comments. You are much valued on Poetrysoup.com. Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 8:46:00 AM
Brian, congratulations on your win. This poem is filled with stunning imagery that gives your words a real wallop - a gut punch. But, there is a tenderness in the picture of the man feeding the birds from his poverty. Wonderfully done. A fav for me. All the best.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 12:11:00 PM
Greetings Sam. Thank you for the affirming assessment of my piece. As always, your insights have weight + truth. There was, indeed, compassion, humanity within this homeless fellow. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 8:38:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this stunning gem, Brian:-)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 12:04:00 PM
My sincerest appreciation for the recognition you've given my entry. One never knows what startling urban images our multicultural city will provide. Thank you again. Brian
Date: 10/9/2021 6:48:00 AM
Reads like a very good contender to me. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this emotive and descriptive work. I don't live where this is really visible but we used to go to a larger city quite often and there was a homeless man who would stand by the interstate at a off ramp. I think he was begging but he would have a grocery store cart with things in it. One day we stopped by a McDonalds on the way home and he was in there getting out of the cold I guess. The store manager gave him coffee and food.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/9/2021 8:20:00 AM
Thank you, Sara, for your detailed descriptive response to my small submission. Your shared experience is a poem in itself. I tend to look for urban scenes to stir my pen, though I am fortunate to have a small cabin in the forest too. Hence the link to nature. The fallen in our cities truly stir the heart. Poverty, depravation are a world wide scourge. Fortunately there are small acts of charity. Take care of yourself dear lady. Cheers, Brian
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/9/2021 6:51:00 AM
Then we noticed after that when we stopped by that McDonald's they would give him some food and drink all the time. It was very evident that he had schizophrenia. It wasn't too long after the last time we saw him. He was hit by a 18 wheeler. His a sad story that he fell throw the cracks of getting help. Sara
Date: 10/8/2021 10:11:00 AM
An exquisitely written poem, Brian; your emotional tale is rich in the beautiful metaphors you've used as well as the issues raised - and the last stanza is just breathtaking: What is the measure of degradation? What happens when direction goes missing?
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/8/2021 10:21:00 AM
Thank you, Lasaad. I much admire your posted work, hence your supportive comments certainly bring light to this autumn day. Be well. With appreciation, Brian
Date: 10/7/2021 9:33:00 PM
Love the similes and metaphors you’ve used here as well as the questions posed - the ending stanza is awesome:)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 10/8/2021 6:01:00 AM
Thanks very much, Susan. The write is based on my observation of a homeless man struggling in a downtown park. Appreciate your feedback immensely. Best wishes, Brian

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