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Defining Sleep

Sleep: An act done by oneself. Almost seems silly to ask for assistance when it is the act of channeling ones individually unique center-stage by centering ones consciousness. To be here by myself, all alone I perceive a problem. Despite more than enough peace and quiet, I am driven to an insanely hypnopompic state by my own pleas, to no longer be tortured and pained and kept from slumber by simple separation from the only remedy I require to reach a relieving saccadic stage, found effortlessly when lying next to you. No matter what air, region, or pallet benevolence is formed upon, I swear it true that you bring with a distinguished state of slumber that can not be revamped, copied, or stolen. So I lie here redefining this “Sleep” and state that it must be preformed, if wished to be done so properly and propitiously, with you by side. Right or left matters not, I give you the choice, for both sides of the fence have been lusciously green. I leave on a note of thanks that has been jotted wholeheartedly stating that your helping-hand is greatly adored. I often find it a difficult task to ask for assistance and can not quite recall requesting your’s, slightly stunned I standby then ask pretentiously “How did you know I needed you there?”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 9/21/2010 6:59:00 PM
I will honestly admit that I had a small battle with the way I wanted that section to read, but my strongest thought was to accept it like you see..I do enjoy the grammar catch nonetheless. ;^D I wanted the passage to give more of the impression that the person under spotlight offered a universal and/or mundane solution rather than "English teacher friendly" which made me feel as if I were expressing my unique needs thus for not appealing to outside readers.
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Date: 9/21/2010 3:13:00 PM
if wished to be done so properly and propitiously, with you by my side. Did you purposely leave out My? Or was it a Type"O?
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Date: 9/18/2010 9:57:00 AM
Heidi, a very interesting poem. Keep your mind open with wonderful poems to share like this,..p.d.
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Date: 9/18/2010 9:50:00 AM
A write that desires contentment. It was nice to read you Heidi. A warm welcome to the Soup >> James
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