Deep and Dark

Haunting reflections cast in an ebony mirror,
implacable opaque surface did hypnotize.
Cool and aloof demeanour enriched allure:
I knew not whether death or madness awaited
but, for you, I was willing to take that chance.

Wrenched from obscurity and raised above all others,
I bathed in your glory, subservient to your whims.
Symbiotic relationship did flourish 'til
betrayal's brutal blade struck mortal blow.

Grievous crimson gash gouged straight through my heart;
this wound so far beyond suture to ever mend.
Mournful melodies replaced euphoric harmonies
as once-exquisite veneer cracked and peeled away.

With your true nature now finally exposed,
our lustrous spark has been forever extinguished
and this wicked masquerade has come to an end.

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(C) 3rd June 2017

For the "Write me Something Deep and Dark Contest" by Laura Loo.
(10th Place)

Incorporating the following words:
ebony, obscurity, masquerade, aloof, death,
hypnotize, suture, veneer, crimson, opaque.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 11/24/2017 9:44:00 PM
John, this is a captivating write of deep and dark content indeed. You managed to smoothly sew all the required words in your artful tempestuous tapestry of your beloved's betrayal seamlessly and effortlessly. A well deserved belated congratulations on your win with this excellent write!
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 9:03:00 AM
Thanks so much for your continued kind and supportive comments, Susan. Am so pleased you're enjoying my work! All the best, John.
Date: 7/1/2017 10:35:00 PM
The deepest cut of all is the pain derived from being betrayed by the beloved one. What an ingenuous application of the 10 words in this deep and dark piece! Congratulations on yet another well-deserved win, John! Hugs. Pandita
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Date: 7/2/2017 5:50:00 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Pandita, You're so right: the greatest pain comes from those who we've allowed to get close :( Regards, John.
Date: 6/14/2017 7:17:00 PM
Giving a chance is alway nice it helped me, John, congratulations on your win.
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John Michaels
Date: 7/2/2017 5:54:00 AM
Thank you for your comments, Eve. All the best, John.
Date: 6/14/2017 6:46:00 AM
A very morose and sad poem, written with your inimitable style John. Congratulations on your win! : )
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John Michaels
Date: 6/14/2017 1:24:00 PM
I can think of no greater compliment to receive than somebody recognising / acknowledging my style in one of my poems. Thank you for your very kind comments. Best regards, John.
Date: 6/6/2017 9:25:00 PM
"for you I was willing to take the chance..." Loved this poem John. Sooo deep and beautifully dark. Exactly what I was hoping for in this contest. be blessed. thank you and congrats :)
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John Michaels
Date: 6/7/2017 4:02:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments, for running the contest and for my placement! Kind regards, John!
Date: 6/6/2017 12:03:00 PM
Hello John. Good Afternoon. Wow. This entry is one that should be read out loud slowly yet with emphasis and strength. This is dark and deep. The ending is sad yet its always scary to take that chance. Well done in its entirety. Best of luck with the contest. Enjoy the afternoon.
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Date: 6/7/2017 4:01:00 PM
Wow! That's some very generous feedback, Lisa. I'm always appreciative of your kind comments! Glad you liked it! Regards, John.
Date: 6/5/2017 8:49:00 AM
- We must always dare to take chances - A deep and beautiful poem, good luck in the contest John - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/5/2017 2:05:00 PM
No reward without risk! :) Thanks for the kind comments, Anne-Lise. All the best, John.
Date: 6/4/2017 5:53:00 PM
Dark and deep indeed, John, AND beautiful!
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John Michaels
Date: 6/5/2017 1:38:00 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Andrea - much appreciated. Regards, John.
Date: 6/4/2017 2:47:00 PM
You capably speak of a dark, subservient relationship, John, finally falling victim to betrayal. You incorporated all ten words without drawing my attention to them...they fitted in inconspicuously...no easy feat! Regards // paul
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Date: 6/5/2017 1:40:00 AM
Thank you as ever for your kind and insightful comments, Paul. Yes, weaving the key words is always the challenge and am pleased you thought I tackled this ably. All the best, John.
Date: 6/4/2017 11:38:00 AM
My friend, this is already a winner in my books! You artfully and flawlessly incorporated the ten words and captured me with your imagery and striking alliterations! Bravo! Best wishes. Pandita
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Date: 6/4/2017 12:14:00 PM
Thank you for your kind and supportive words. Still finding my feet in the world of Free Verse, so hopefully the multiple meanings come across okay. All the best, John.
Date: 6/3/2017 8:20:00 AM
A deep one well written for the contest. Good luck !
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Date: 6/3/2017 9:21:00 AM
Thanks for your kind comments, Heidi. Regards, John.
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