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Decay Through Mirror

A critical friend - my mirror - stands in front And yearns me to see what I can’t visibly see; From the few gray hairs that faintly adorn my head, I see a displaced gray hair fluttering to flee. Beneath the coat of icing, buried wrinkles squeak; My teeth at misleading mirror - hotly clatter, While an uprooted tooth on lower jaw – bewails. I swear, this corroded mirror, I will batter. Rhyming scheme: ABCB 12 syllables in each line (Ref. howmanysyllables) *A 2nd Place* in the following contest (judged on Sept. 29, 2020) Sept. 26, 2020 Writing Challenge – Decay – Poetry Contest Constance La France

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/2/2020 6:15:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win, Newton :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/2/2020 9:59:00 AM

Thank you so much, Anne-Lise!!

Eve Roper

Date: 9/29/2020 9:32:00 PM

Great imagery, Newton, doesn't want you to say mirror, mirror on the wall. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/30/2020 3:59:00 AM

Thank you so much, Eve, for this immensely lovely comment!!

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/29/2020 4:33:00 PM

- You're just gorgeous, Newton. A precious poem. - A message we all feel (at least I certainly do)! So cute, you are lovely as you are, indeed to be a fine writer is more valuable than being picture perfect!! Congratulations on your Top Win, dear.

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/29/2020 6:10:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sigrid, for this immensely great comment and the complement!!

Constance La France

Date: 9/29/2020 1:51:00 PM

Newton, congratulations on your win in my Decay Writing Challenge with this wonderful poem _Constance

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/29/2020 2:37:00 PM

Thank you so much, Lance, for this great comment and your consideration of giving a placement for this piece!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/28/2020 12:02:00 PM

- ... there must be something wrong with the mirror, Newton :))) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/28/2020 12:20:00 PM

Sure, the mirror is corroded. :) Thank you so much for the lovely comment, Anne-Lise!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2020 10:33:00 AM

Love your dry humor in this one. You took the theme like I did but yours is more "tongue in cheek" or "tongue near teeth"

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/27/2020 1:06:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea, for this immensely lovely comment!!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/26/2020 8:10:00 PM

Sounds like a plan! lol... At least you have to do something to crack your mirror up; Me --- I just look at it and it breaks. lol. Enjoyed, Newton. Thank you, Gershon

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 9/26/2020 8:30:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gershon, for this immensely suggestive, handsome comment!!