Newton Ranaweera Poet Quatrain

Decay Through Mirror

A critical friend - my mirror - stands in front
And yearns me to see what I can’t visibly see;
From the few gray hairs that faintly adorn my head,
I see a displaced gray hair fluttering to flee.

Beneath the coat of icing, buried wrinkles squeak;
My teeth at misleading mirror - hotly clatter,
While an uprooted tooth on lower jaw – bewails.
I swear, this corroded mirror, I will batter.


Rhyming scheme: ABCB
12 syllables in each line (Ref. howmanysyllables)


*A 2nd Place* in the following contest (judged on Sept. 29, 2020)
  
Sept. 26, 2020
Writing Challenge – Decay – Poetry Contest
Constance La France

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Anne-Lise Andresen October 2, 2020 at 6:15 AM - Congratulations on your win, Newton :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Newton Ranaweera October 2, 2020 at 9:59 AM Thank you so much, Anne-Lise!!

Eve Roper September 29, 2020 at 9:32 PM Great imagery, Newton, doesn't want you to say mirror, mirror on the wall. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve Newton Ranaweera September 30, 2020 at 3:59 AM Thank you so much, Eve, for this immensely lovely comment!!

Sigrid Ermine September 29, 2020 at 4:33 PM - You're just gorgeous, Newton. A precious poem. - A message we all feel (at least I certainly do)! So cute, you are lovely as you are, indeed to be a fine writer is more valuable than being picture perfect!! Congratulations on your Top Win, dear. Newton Ranaweera September 29, 2020 at 6:10 PM Thank you so much, Sigrid, for this immensely great comment and the complement!!

Constance La France September 29, 2020 at 1:51 PM Newton, congratulations on your win in my Decay Writing Challenge with this wonderful poem _Constance Newton Ranaweera September 29, 2020 at 2:37 PM Thank you so much, Lance, for this great comment and your consideration of giving a placement for this piece!!

Anne-Lise Andresen September 28, 2020 at 12:02 PM - ... there must be something wrong with the mirror, Newton :))) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Newton Ranaweera September 28, 2020 at 12:20 PM Sure, the mirror is corroded. :) Thank you so much for the lovely comment, Anne-Lise!!

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2020 at 10:33 AM Love your dry humor in this one. You took the theme like I did but yours is more "tongue in cheek" or "tongue near teeth" Newton Ranaweera September 27, 2020 at 1:06 PM Thank you so much, Andrea, for this immensely lovely comment!!

Gershon Wolf September 26, 2020 at 8:10 PM Sounds like a plan! lol... At least you have to do something to crack your mirror up; Me --- I just look at it and it breaks. lol. Enjoyed, Newton. Thank you, Gershon Newton Ranaweera September 26, 2020 at 8:30 PM Thank you so much, Gershon, for this immensely suggestive, handsome comment!!