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Debbie, My love

I paced placidly along picturesque pathways, Around the vast verdant valley that led nowhere. Oh Debbie, my Debbie, disappeared in thin air! I'll search and I'll search and mutter a prayer, I texted her and called her, but alas all seemed in vain. Ah Debbie, my Debbie, I shouted her name. All echoed back at me. still, I yearn for her love. I imagined her hot lips, lingering on mine, Yet she escaped me and flew like a rock dove, But why, oh why? We fitted like a glove. The blissful breeze blew through the cottonwoods, "I'm here! I'm here!" Her voice echoed impulsively, Elated I searched among the trees near a river. I saw her there, beneath the willow, seductively. I ran and hugged her tight, with all our fecundity.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 8/24/2024 4:15:00 AM
What a romantic and sweet write. Loved the alterations. Glad it had a happy ending
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Date: 8/24/2024 4:12:00 AM
a true love to be remembered, thanks poet
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Date: 8/24/2024 12:52:00 AM
Beautiful poetry Victor!
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Date: 8/23/2024 6:56:00 PM
This is a happy poem with a good ending. I like the romantic scenery.
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Date: 8/23/2024 5:40:00 AM
Dear victor, i did not forget about you, i try commenting on as many as i can when i get on soup, migraines are a constant thing that I go through so i did not get any migraines from reading your work infact i enjoy reading your work, (responding to your soup mail) before i forget commenting so thought i will respond here to you and also to your evocative and touching poem that i didnt see earlier; youv written very well as always. And your rhymes are so sublime and captivating! I love the flow and how delicately you weave imagery especially lines such as “ The blissful breeze blew through the cottonwoods,” truly enhances and adds strength to the emotions youv depicted here in such eloquence! Heartfelt poem! Pleasure reading this, sending you light always and wish you all the best with health too . Thank you for always supporting me
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Date: 8/22/2024 2:01:00 PM
Hi Victor, anther compelling, romantic gem frim your golden pen. The imagery is awesome Hey Victor my dear friend, uou are not allowed to be sick, be well only and keep writing and and posting your wonderful poems, Hugs and blessings, JENNIFER.
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Date: 8/21/2024 9:32:00 PM
Cute romantic poem, Victor:)
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Date: 8/21/2024 4:24:00 PM
Loving and caring verse with great imagery.
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Date: 8/21/2024 2:48:00 PM
Awesome love poem Victor. Very good rhyme too. Loved it.
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Date: 8/21/2024 2:06:00 AM
- What a lovely and romantic poem, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 8/20/2024 9:06:00 PM
So very romantic expressing umpteen emotions....loss, longing, nostalgia, pain and exultation. Beautiful poem dear Victor. Sorry to hear that you were unwell. Pray for a healthier heart and better health.
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Date: 8/20/2024 3:44:00 PM
This site was an unusual one. But cute. Now what is a rock dove?
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 8/20/2024 8:46:00 PM
It is a common dove, but it is found in the wild and is not domesticated.
Date: 8/20/2024 11:53:00 AM
I enjoyed the way love seems to play hide and seek in this awesome, romantic poem. This is a fave for me.
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Date: 8/20/2024 11:16:00 AM
Loved this from even the title! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 8/20/2024 10:40:00 AM
Very sweetly romantic! Love it!
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Date: 8/20/2024 9:17:00 AM
Plenty of devices used, monorhymes, the awesome alliteration all through and through a romance with Debbie that you once knew. Hold her tight and kiss her hot lips, Victor. A lovely romantic fantasy! I'm faving for me.~Hugs
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Date: 8/20/2024 9:15:00 AM
Love "rock dove"- a beautiful poem
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Date: 8/20/2024 8:20:00 AM
Very romantic.
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Date: 8/20/2024 7:47:00 AM
I do enjoy your romantic poems Victor, yet another gem flows from your pen:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/20/2024 3:25:00 AM
Victor, I enjoyed your romantic poem and the ending.
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Date: 8/19/2024 11:23:00 PM
Tears turned to joy, nothing was going to stand in the path of true love. Tom
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Date: 8/19/2024 10:03:00 PM
Such a romantic, loved this!
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