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This free verse narrative that I wrote on "Death of a Knight" actually goes back to a time in the past when I had studied close-in combat in the times of medieval warfare.  This particular subject is fascinating and this poem presents a view of the slow, but inevitable transition that the dying knight experiences as leaves the world of the living and moves on to death and everlasting eternity.  (Gary Bateman - September 9, 2014) 

Blood surges through the deep gash in his armor while the brave knight writhes in pain and cries in anguish. The battle is over now and the knight drops hard to the ground knowing that his life force is ebbing and his strength is waning. With the battle finished the knight begins his final fight with Death in his inevitable glory and result. The knight’s blood now slows to a quiet trickle like blood tears while key moments in his life flash before him lightening quick. The knight finds his comfort in love of family and country; this is a moment of solace as his body tightens in Death’s grip. His blood now seeps into the ground itself and his breathing grows shallow, and twilight moves to darkness in the knight’s final conscious thought. The knight murmurs: fighting, war, and duty to my king have been my life, but now I must take leave of this mortal coil. With that Death takes the Knight’s mortal body and the hand of God carries his heavenly soul to everlasting eternity. Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved (September 9, 2014) (Distich or Unrhymed Couplet)

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Date: 8/7/2015 1:06:00 AM
Another stunning poem, Gary. I am blown away! Stanza 4 and 7 are intense...always excellent work from you~Laura
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Gary Bateman
Date: 8/7/2015 6:14:00 PM
Thanks Laura!! This was one of my earlier writes. I do like the medieval themes too. And I want to do more of these as I can get to them. The Couplet is a great vehicle for a theme like this!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/3/2014 10:41:00 AM
touching deeply superbly beautifully panned piece dear pal
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/3/2014 11:43:00 AM
Liam . . . Thanks so much Mate!! Cheers, Gary
Date: 10/11/2014 2:18:00 PM
Very sad but I really liked your poem a lot Gary. I just love history so much and anything to do with kings castles and Knights;) love peace and light! xxxxx D.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 10/12/2014 9:24:00 AM
D, Thanks for the read (again). Yes, this one is a sad one. I noticed that you read this one before. I also find this part of medieval history dealing with the knights to be quite interesting. All the best to you!! Cheers, Gary
Date: 9/13/2014 1:45:00 AM
Sad poem, but I enjoyed it. Love & prayers, Gina
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/13/2014 5:09:00 PM
It truly is a sad poem Gina. Glad you liked it. All the Best . . . Gary
Date: 9/11/2014 4:51:00 PM
Your poem is wonderful, so well written and I was captivated with the story from the first word, well done ~~
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/12/2014 7:57:00 AM
Broken Wings . . . Thank you very much for your observation of my work and for your very kind words. I will check out your poems as well. I will have more poems on the way soon and probably plan to enter another contest. We all have a message to share with our respective works. Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 9/10/2014 5:04:00 PM
Nice poem, with haunting images and lucid expression!!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/10/2014 5:08:00 PM
Mr. Nair . . . Thank you so much for your time in reading my work here. I really appreciate your comment!! I will check out your works too. Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 9/10/2014 4:16:00 PM
Very nice poem Gary! And about a subject I like well enough myself. Really loved it! Be back to read more of your work in the future. Keep the good work! xxxxx D.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/10/2014 4:58:00 PM
Thanks so much for your read here Dorian. Glad you liked it. I will be a reader of your works as well. Best Wishes to on all of your future poems!! Cheers, Gary
Date: 9/10/2014 4:16:00 PM
Very nice poem Gary! And about a subject I like well enough myself. Really loved it! Be back to read more of your work in the future. Keep the good work! xxxxx D.
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Date: 9/10/2014 7:37:00 AM
Your poem, dear Gary, incarnates so vividly the battles of the Knight, with the enemy and with the death in a truly remarkable way. One feels the worry, the agony and finally the resignation of the knight to his destiny! Excellent!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/10/2014 10:14:00 AM
Demetrios, Thank you so much for your reply and for your wonderful comments and keen observation of this poem. You indeed captured the central essence of this poem. I've got more works on the way and will follow your works too. I've got to get into another contest too soon. Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 9/9/2014 9:10:00 PM
Hello Gary, I really enjoy historical pieces and especially when you provide some background, makes the poem all the more fun to read, great write!!!!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 9/10/2014 3:56:00 AM
Thanks Arthur!! . . . I also have "Author's Notes" included in all of my works as posted. I have a big epic narrative poem on the way which will posted in several sections. More history, but this one is a black one -- on Witchcraft. I will check out your poems too. Best Wishes and Cheer, Gary
Date: 9/9/2014 9:04:00 PM
Nicely done! Your poems have the intellectual stimulation that keeps me interested, there is so many subjects and perspectives out there, you sure know your stuff when you write, it is a pleasure to read. :)
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Date: 9/10/2014 10:17:00 AM
Cas, Thank you very much. God you keep writing that kind of praise for me, I might start getting "Big Headed" or something. I'm glad you liked the poem. Each of us has somewhat different writing styles, but this is to be expected. Regardless, having fun and communicating is most important!! Cheers, Gary