Death

As Suzanne's blood soaked the road and her life ended
death saw the little girl who was me weeping, weeping
he took my hand and whispered-   be still little one
I will take good care of your sister, sister love . . . 
and the years rolled by and death came many times
each time whispering in a murmur for me-  just me
I will take good care of your beloved sweet one
gray moss of time hangs-   and a fatal day wings
for me . . .  now life is ravaged, scarred, and weather stained
my comfort-   that in my final gasp-  death cradles me . . . 

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January 14, 2019


Poetry/Free Verse/Death
Copyright Protected, ID 19-1104-842-02
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.


Written for the contest, 10 lines, 10 words. Free Verse 1
sponsor, Lu Loo- Theme chosen - #3 death

First Place

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/6/2019 7:16:00 AM
A sad and powerful write DH...Congrats on your win..
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Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:04:00 AM
Joseph, thank you for the visit and congrats !
Date: 2/6/2019 12:45:00 AM
"...in my final gasp- death cradles me..." You expressed it well. Congratulations! . . (By the way, thanks for my placements in your two sponsored contests. I'm blessed to join...) God bless you!
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Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:04:00 AM
Beata, thanks for the compliment and congrats and you are welcome for your win in my contest ~
Date: 2/5/2019 8:35:00 AM
Awesome poem, Dear Heart, deep and very beautiful. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:05:00 AM
Eve, thanks for the awesome and beautiful and congratulations ~
Date: 1/22/2019 3:32:00 PM
this is beautifully written and so sensitive, my friend
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Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2019 3:56:00 PM
Jack, thanks for the visit and the beautiful ~
Date: 1/15/2019 5:32:00 PM
wow, connie, this is SO good!!! Such a creative way of seeing death!! FAVE
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Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:08:00 PM
Andrea, thank you for the compliment and the FAV !
Date: 1/15/2019 8:44:00 AM
Gray moss of time hangs...and a fatal day wings I really love this line in a all together beautifully written piece! Good luck in the contest
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Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:07:00 PM
Brian, thanks for the comment and compliment ~
Date: 1/14/2019 11:03:00 PM
nicely wrote write...have you answered the kafka 'door of the law' mystery : )
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Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:06:00 PM
Sand, thanks for the visit, but sorry I really do not understand your comment ~
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Sand Blown
Date: 1/14/2019 11:06:00 PM
foregive my insensitive comment...on re-reading the poem slowly see error on my part
Date: 1/14/2019 9:58:00 PM
Heart breaking, yet powerful and gripping! Great poetic pen, Constance...good luck in the contest! :)
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Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:05:00 PM
Laura, thank you for the great comment and compliment~
Date: 1/14/2019 3:43:00 PM
Sadly painful but, that depicts Death well; well done and I hope you have good luck in the contest.
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Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:04:00 PM
ML, thanks for visiting my poem and commenting, appreciate ~
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