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As Suzanne's blood soaked the road and her life ended death saw the little girl who was me weeping, weeping he took my hand and whispered- be still little one I will take good care of your sister, sister love . . . and the years rolled by and death came many times each time whispering in a murmur for me- just me I will take good care of your beloved sweet one gray moss of time hangs- and a fatal day wings for me . . . now life is ravaged, scarred, and weather stained my comfort- that in my final gasp- death cradles me . . . ________________________ January 14, 2019 Poetry/Free Verse/Death Copyright Protected, ID 19-1104-842-02 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. Written for the contest, 10 lines, 10 words. Free Verse 1 sponsor, Lu Loo- Theme chosen - #3 death First Place

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Joseph May

Date: 2/6/2019 7:16:00 AM

A sad and powerful write DH...Congrats on your win..

Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:04:00 AM

Joseph, thank you for the visit and congrats !

Beata Agustin

Date: 2/6/2019 12:45:00 AM

"...in my final gasp- death cradles me..." You expressed it well. Congratulations! . . (By the way, thanks for my placements in your two sponsored contests. I'm blessed to join...) God bless you!

Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:04:00 AM

Beata, thanks for the compliment and congrats and you are welcome for your win in my contest ~

Eve Roper

Date: 2/5/2019 8:35:00 AM

Awesome poem, Dear Heart, deep and very beautiful. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Constance La France
Date: 2/8/2019 8:05:00 AM

Eve, thanks for the awesome and beautiful and congratulations ~

Jack Horne

Date: 1/22/2019 3:32:00 PM

this is beautifully written and so sensitive, my friend

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2019 3:56:00 PM

Jack, thanks for the visit and the beautiful ~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/15/2019 5:32:00 PM

wow, connie, this is SO good!!! Such a creative way of seeing death!! FAVE

Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:08:00 PM

Andrea, thank you for the compliment and the FAV !

Brian Davey

Date: 1/15/2019 8:44:00 AM

Gray moss of time hangs...and a fatal day wings I really love this line in a all together beautifully written piece! Good luck in the contest

Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:07:00 PM

Brian, thanks for the comment and compliment ~

Sand Blown

Date: 1/14/2019 11:03:00 PM

nicely wrote write...have you answered the kafka 'door of the law' mystery : )

Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:06:00 PM

Sand, thanks for the visit, but sorry I really do not understand your comment ~

Sand Blown
Date: 1/14/2019 11:06:00 PM

foregive my insensitive comment...on re-reading the poem slowly see error on my part

Laura Leiser

Date: 1/14/2019 9:58:00 PM

Heart breaking, yet powerful and gripping! Great poetic pen, Constance...good luck in the contest! :)

Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:05:00 PM

Laura, thank you for the great comment and compliment~

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/14/2019 3:43:00 PM

Sadly painful but, that depicts Death well; well done and I hope you have good luck in the contest.

Constance La France
Date: 1/15/2019 11:04:00 PM

ML, thanks for visiting my poem and commenting, appreciate ~