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Dear Moments

One night, I dreamt of black tracks Yet I had no idea where they lay; to be frank Suddenly, I see a train turning into dust Vanishing into nature's crusts A spotlight brightened my dream: Desire rose to hold dear moments once more

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John Allen

Date: 1/5/2009 8:44:00 PM

Nicely done hon. Enjoyed the simplistic, yet very imaginative poem. Keep up the good work.

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/30/2008 10:41:00 AM

The assonance and alliteration in your final line is magnificent! Strong imagery and powerful language. BRAVO Sara! Love, Keith

Ali Matheny

Date: 12/30/2008 7:11:00 AM

I'm on Chat

Derrick Burton

Date: 12/25/2008 6:15:00 AM

Had to read it again and let it simmer. Any way have a great new years if i dont from hear from you, your friend derrick.

Derrick Burton

Date: 12/25/2008 5:43:00 AM

beautiful and interesting as always, your ability to give people some thing to think is what makes your poetry so enjoyable, plus i can feel your wonderful vibes, you were suprised to see i didnt comment huh? great poetry.