Dazzled

Catkins and cowslips, primroses too- celandine stars..yellow my view

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Charlene Bird

Date: 4/17/2009 10:14:00 PM

you paint such a beautiful picture with just a few words, love the talent friend!

Robin L. Gass

Date: 4/9/2009 11:59:00 AM

It is a beautful view, Brian. We have had a lot of cold and rain and snow this week but the sun shines today. This is a lovely Cinqku. Love, Robin

Denis Joe

Date: 4/9/2009 2:34:00 AM

I like this a lot. The theme has a way of being illuminated with the simplest of narrative and the reader can see the whole poem as a metaphor. For me this is an ideal example of how this form should be approached and you certainly are a master of the sucinct. The rhyme is a great touch; especially in what it does by leading the reader from the descriptive to the action. This is much more succinct that Haiku, for example, and is difficult to pull off. You do this so well!

Lena Townsend

Date: 4/9/2009 1:11:00 AM

Beautiful view I am thinking!!! Great write! Smiles from Lolita~ thank you for your comments. :)

Sean Kelly

Date: 4/8/2009 11:12:00 AM

Mother Nature can provide her own razzle-dazzle , on her own ..... Great Cinqku , Brian .

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 4/8/2009 10:29:00 AM

Cowslips, buttercups, and sewing machines, remind me of my maternal grandmother. Maybe that is why I love wildflowers so much. I enjoyed this cinqku. Thank you for your comments, as well.

Sharon Winter

Date: 4/8/2009 6:38:00 AM

Yes, perfect title and I am dazzled by your words. What a glorious vision. Love, Shar