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FICTIONAL WRITE

Premiere Contest WinnerDAY SCAR DRAMA

Soundly you sleep, your insides at ease.  Beside 
you, I surge an uncharted storm of fearsome break for 
it thunder-threatens my own sun’s velocity melt.  Your 
breathing is even and bears no concern, no fear or 
resentment squeaks to rust your dream’s churn.  All my 
wishes wish it would; I want it to rob you, break your peace 
to pieces, rough up all your pleases and scatter your calm.

Yesterday morn, the same ever alarm was greeted by our dual
yawns.  I poured your coffee, you jellied my toast, we teased 
about who loved the most versus who knotted our bed covers 
tossed.  I heard the garage jerk and bolt, the squeal of reverse 
being forced and grinned that life so ordinary was actually a 
fulfilling choice.

Later I chanced upon blemish, a day scar drama erasers can’t 
touch, time can’t discard or blow into bits a kind wind might 
take far.  Even hours gone, with eyes closed, I cannot look away.
My insides toss green, then turn blue-black.  My heart is cramped 
and crumpled uneven, and my doubt is sure love-innocent trust 
will never come back.

Our longtime love is not mere try or habit or lie, I know you want 
me at your side, so why not a plan more focused to better secret  
your sordid?  Why carelessly litter dramatic change that my feet 
must step around or in?  You sleep unaware of my awake seeped 
with betrayal:

Passionately you kissed another, gifted eye smiles on the street 
to each other, while I was framed in the window of our 
local and favorite grocer.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Winter Avatar
June 23, 2026 at 7:53 AM
Dearest CayCay, I can feel the pain of betrayal through every line. Your writing is stunning here. You have given pain a voice. Brilliantly written poem! This poem's a winner! Love, Anne
Godwin Avatar
June 23, 2026 at 8:22 AM
You read it! I'm thrilled that you felt the emotion because that is why I wanted you to read it. It's fiction, by the way, I mean btw. Love, CayCay
De Beaulieu Avatar
May 22, 2020 at 2:12 PM
Hello Cay-Cay, I find this poem so romantic. Enjoy your day my friend.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:00 PM
Way to go! A deserving winner.
Kereopa Avatar
October 21, 2019 at 7:20 AM
Congratulations, awesome write and win.
Mcgee Avatar
October 19, 2019 at 8:17 AM
Secret and betrayal...so well penned and full of emotions...congrats on a deserving win!
Agustin Avatar
October 18, 2019 at 1:31 AM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 8:57 AM
Another Wow! Congratulations on your fine shiny trophy win! Hugs CayCay, xomo!
Wolf Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 5:08 PM
Wow, CayCay! ~ Wowed in Chicago
Hamilton Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 11:19 AM
Another emotional roller coaster write that creates an impact when the motive or cause for the feeling is revealed near the end. Sadly many can relate to these feelings, congrats on a premium contest trophy win, now this poem will get the exposure it deserves, (and you of course!)
Mcintosh Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 5:13 AM
Wow. So awesome and amazing... a wonderful poem, so trophy worthy. God bless you with many more wonderous writes - with love in Christ, Gina
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 4:26 AM
Wow, a trophy win! It is so deserving CayCay! Congratulations! xxoo
Y. Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 12:39 AM
Hi CayCay, Congratulations on a well deserved trophy win:-)Alexis
La France Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 9:24 PM
CayCay congratulations on your Trophy win with this emotional and deserving of the honor write, well done !
Roper Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 8:12 PM
Congratulations CayCay.. Hugs
Warrior Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 5:25 PM
Superbly written Cay Cay...Congrats on your solo effort & win my friend...keep them coming...^WW^ :o)
Dietrich Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 2:31 PM
Looking down at my comment a long time ago,I see I wowed this one! I think it is so relatable also because you are putting parts of yourself (from past experiences) into it. Thank goodness your current relationship is not unfaithful. Big congrats to you, Caycay.You must be so happy for the trophy win. You chose well!
Kitchin Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 11:38 AM
CayCay, congratulations on your trophy win. I was captivated by your excellently written poem from the beginning, I like how it portrays a story about the pain of betrayal and how horrible that experience can be!
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 3, 2019 at 8:51 PM
I remember how much I enjoyed the stanza in Greg's contest CayCay. Congratulations on having this wonderful poem recognized and in First Place! xxoo
Proxenos Avatar
June 1, 2019 at 9:16 AM
Hi CayCay dear friend, I'm so very very happy that we have picked and back on track with our past sparse communication as I missed your cheerful, charming character! You must have won a contest or POTD for this beauty, as unhappy as it may be, such an excellent write portraying the pain of dread and betrayal - if this was true and he is still around, I'll hire mafia to come and find him! Love and hugs, Jennifer. betrayal
Inman Avatar
April 23, 2017 at 10:23 AM
The deepness of your write has left my head spinning CayCay. This is so filled with emotion. Your words are beautifully written and I can feel the pain.
Lindley Avatar
April 17, 2017 at 9:06 PM
THE DARK THAT HIDES IN THE BETRAYAL EVER SEEKS LIGHT IN ORDER TO AMPLIFY ITS EVIL. DESTRUCTION OF LOVE IS AND ALWAYS WILL BE ONE OF EVIL'S MOST CHERISHED GOALS.. FANTASTIC POEM MY FRIEND. Loved the special language used!A7
Babcock Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 11:09 AM
A awesome write on a unhappy subject. Very creative and powerful write. love phyl
Breedt Avatar
March 29, 2017 at 12:52 PM
Wow again. You take us on an unexpected journey from purity and chastity to the blow in the gut betrayal. Powerful and craftily written here. (I gather the move is now behind us and things are all peachy?) Love Jannie
Onclaud Avatar
March 20, 2017 at 1:50 PM
helllo, cay... looking forward to your new work of art!... huggs
Williams Avatar
March 19, 2017 at 6:53 AM
My God , you are such a talented creative writer, you almost had me ready to break his peace to pieces. In one word " Awesome"
Godwin Avatar
March 22, 2017 at 10:24 PM
I'm three days late thanking you, but thanking you I must because your comment makes every writing effort worthwhile and I treasure your sweet, encouraging words. Thank you so much, Maria! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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