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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ In shadows deep where whispers dwell, Where death's embrace casts its spell, Among and out, of night's dark shroud, The journey starts, both long and loud. Through veils of mist, where clouds enfold, A story of life and tales untold, In every wisp, a mystery unsung, Where souls entwine, and destinies hung. Yet from the ashes, new life does rise, Beneath the bleak and stormy skies, In cycles spun, in cycles twirled, Rebirth emerges, a wondrous world. But tread with care, for 'neath it all, Lies realms of fire, where demons call, In hell's domain, the lost ones roam, Caught in echoes of their own bemoan. So heed the call of life's sweet breath, Embrace the dance of life and death, For through the clouds, beyond the night, Awaits the dawn of eternal light....

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Date: 4/12/2024 10:59:00 PM
This is probably one of your best poems I have read , which flows and is woven together so beautifully , I especially love the line "So heed the call of Life's sweet breath . Such a beautiful message and creation . Danny
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/13/2024 5:19:00 AM
thank you, Danny. Your accolades for this poem humble me. Grateful you saw the message therein :-) have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 4/12/2024 1:05:00 PM
Beautiful, flow throughout your poem, and what a powerful message to receive from this ,: )
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/12/2024 5:29:00 PM
thanks so much for your visit, Stephan. I'm grateful you appreciated the power and flow of my words. Have a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 4/12/2024 5:45:00 AM
Much enjoyed the tone and flow of your poem, Sara. Wonderfully descriptive lines, like: Yet from the ashes, new life does rise, Beneath the bleak and stormy skies, In cycles spun, in cycles twirled, Rebirth emerges, a wondrous world---Excellent! A FAVE!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/12/2024 6:22:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay, for your enthusiastic and positive comments. I believe we all ascend from ashes throughout our lifetimes...life is a cyclical thing, isn't it. Thanks for sharing your through; I'm also humbly grateful for the fave...receiving it means a great deal to me. Have a great day, Sara
Date: 4/12/2024 1:16:00 AM
You steal my heart with your lovely poems, unique rhymes and content. "From the ashes, new life does rise". So true for ashes we were and ashes we will return. Brilliant.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/12/2024 4:43:00 AM
awww, thank you Victor. Your comments just made my day. Seriously. Grateful for you and your kind words. Have a splendid day, Sara
Date: 4/12/2024 12:45:00 AM
Dear sara, i see your rhyme alot now, nice rhythm to your well crafted lines, and flow too, very lyrical, I especially loved “ Through veils of mist, where clouds enfold, A story of life and tales untold, In every wisp, a mystery unsung, Where souls entwine, and destinies hung.” how captivating! And unique! And your rhymes would make any go wow! Wonder how long it took you for you to write this poem? Rhymes look like it comes easy for you Brilliant! Pleasure reading this!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/12/2024 4:46:00 AM
appreciate your observations, Ink. I've been focusing on rhyme more lately; it's uncomfortable for my free spirit :-) and don't come easily. Don't recall how long I took to write this poem. I wrote it over several days (back in March) and finished it after watching the solar eclipse.Thanks for stopping by...wishing you a wonderful day, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/11/2024 8:30:00 PM
So wonderfuuly awesome a pen. Tpp mant across this p,anet think our life’s glory is here? So we dont pen about life to come. We think life’s reward, for example, is to be at the top of whatever we do. Well, you know that type of happiness is so short lived.. Worse, the idea of hell in so incomvemient! Pangie xx
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/12/2024 4:47:00 AM
I appreciate your insightful and wise comments, dear Pangie. I agree. Life's glory isn't here...it's in that place beyond where our bodies and egos dwell. Thanks for visiting. Wishing you a pleasant day, hugs, Sara

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