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Darkness of One Spring Dawn

Your suitcase was home where you left it We had left in a hurry A clock on the sterile wall was ticking away dwindling moments And was the only sound to break the morning silence Outside a pale May sun, was laboring to start the day And was the only thing that held our years together I had stayed by your bedside if they allowed me to, If they didn't, I walked and paced and waited until the dawn I knew every crack on the hospital sidewalk Bombarded by memories I could not remember to forget Losing your battle, there was hardly a chance to say goodbye…. They handed me your slippers, and night things in a bag I tucked them under my arm....for the trip home... Later if people asked …..those same old questions they always ask I wanted to say simply…."Why? Does it matter?…..All that mattered... was gone…" ________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 6/12/2011 1:54:00 PM
Touching write and a more unique personal take than most should have been higher ;) [a fan] Light & Love
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Date: 5/4/2011 2:13:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on another great write and win!!! love Michael
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Date: 5/3/2011 12:28:00 PM
Congrats Carrie, nice work :o)
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Date: 5/3/2011 8:57:00 AM
Congrats on your HM, Carrie. Excellent piece. Nice going. xxxRalph
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Date: 5/3/2011 4:42:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your HM in Paula's contest with this fantastic write ... let us enjoy our HM's together for excellence .. great honor..luv..
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Date: 5/3/2011 4:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win Carrie in Paula's "When" contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/2/2011 11:27:00 PM
oh shucks, Carrie-- this moved me so much-- I read it twice in a row, and both times I got the chills, even stronger the second time around! Wow! I just felt this poem, brought me back to my own experience with this, this is just amazing! & thank you for dropping by my poems-yes me thinks our mouse can run off and we can have a party, heehee-- btw sending you soupmail after...
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Date: 5/2/2011 9:54:00 PM
A splendid title for a reflection of a very sad time, Carrie. marvelous writing as always. Congratulations to you!
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Date: 5/2/2011 8:26:00 PM
. Many warm congrats for this win Carrie.
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Date: 4/29/2011 1:16:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today Carrie. The best to you in the contest. Wishing you a wonderful weekend filled with inspiration. I hope the sun shines down upon you and brings joy into your heart. Love, Carol
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