Darren White Poet Free verse

Dark Loss

He tried to fly
flapped his wings

High above him
a dark duvet
drizzled sadness

Only yesterday,
or was it last week
his wings and feet
carried him

little raven
didn't remember

Carry me
carry me
he squeaked
to his sorrowful parents

We have to go
they said
hipping hither
and thither

He hid his head
under his useless wings
and waited
and wailed

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September 17, 2017
7th place in contest: In The Dark
sponsor: Russell Sivey

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Constance La France September 22, 2017 at 10:26 AM Darren, CONGRATULATIONS on your win!.. this poem really touched my soul Darren White September 27, 2017 at 7:02 AM Thank you so very much Constance, I hope your health is improving now?

Eve Roper September 22, 2017 at 10:18 AM Congratulations,Darren , wonderful write. Hugs Eve ~`* Darren White September 27, 2017 at 7:01 AM Thank you Eve :)

Lin Lane September 22, 2017 at 7:28 AM What a sense of vulnerability you display in this one, Darren. I'm glad it made the winning list... Hugs. Darren White September 27, 2017 at 7:01 AM Thank you so much, Lin :)

Winged Warrior September 22, 2017 at 7:12 AM Congrats!!! my friend on your placement...nicely penned Darren...god bless...^WW^ Darren White September 27, 2017 at 7:01 AM Thank you so much WW

White Wolf September 19, 2017 at 1:27 AM I do hope the sponsor sees the brilliance of this poem, Duir! Darren White September 19, 2017 at 1:37 AM Whatever happens, I love the poem, with or without contest. So good to see you my friend.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart September 18, 2017 at 10:19 PM You are a raven Darren, most intelligent and wise of birds, it may not be on air you fly but you soar just the same. I like this write, your interpretation for this contest, and not just cuz I'm a crazy bird lady :) xomo! Darren White September 19, 2017 at 1:36 AM :) I love the dark metaphors, packaging emotions and real life happenings in them. Hugs ma mo <3

Agnes Krampe September 18, 2017 at 6:02 PM This is dark and sad indeed, Darren, but very beautiful. Darren White September 19, 2017 at 1:35 AM Thank you, it had to be sad, Agnes :)

Robert Lindley September 18, 2017 at 10:04 AM Great imagery, creativity and depth. Fallen birds meet the reality of life.. A fav my friend... Darren White September 19, 2017 at 1:34 AM Robert my friend, thank you for the fav.

Patricia Cresswell September 17, 2017 at 4:21 PM Did you save him Darren? Oh how I hate to see things die. Darren White September 17, 2017 at 11:50 PM It's a metaphor, Patricia, it's not really about a bird :)

Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 6:54 AM I especially like the imagery in the second stanza:-) you are flying free with your pof trying and have earned your wings:-) hugs Jan xx Darren White September 17, 2017 at 11:49 PM Flying in a different way now :)

Tim Smith September 17, 2017 at 4:32 AM They will flap again.... beautiful melancholy feel Darren White September 17, 2017 at 11:48 PM Thanks Tim, one day...