Dark Coal of Night

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For Nette Onclaud's Vibrations From A Verso Poetry Contest/ July 25, 2025

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Incinerating us one night coal black my lover lit a match in a hot flash and things he said cannot be taken back as cinders sift into heart’s bottom ash!

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/26/2025 8:16:00 AM

Great poem Andrea, so much happened in a short time.

Yann Rolland

Date: 7/26/2025 7:36:00 AM

great metaphor, nights have sentiments expressed,k so sweet poetry

Jack Horne

Date: 7/26/2025 5:38:00 AM

oh, love this, Andrea - so much said in a few lines

Howard Kerr

Date: 7/26/2025 5:21:00 AM

Hi Andrea, the intense imagery and heartfelt narrative of this compelling work leaves an indelible mark on those who value great literature. I wish you well in the contest Howard

Rowena Velasco

Date: 7/25/2025 6:06:00 PM

Andrea, your poem "Incinerating Us" vividly captures the irreversible damage caused by harsh words in a relationship. The metaphor of a match igniting a blaze illustrates how quickly love can turn destructive. The concise and evocative language leaves a lasting impression, making this poem a compelling read for anyone reflecting on the complexities of relationships. Love this...

Bill Baker

Date: 7/25/2025 5:59:00 PM

I hear the sizzle, Andrea. I heard a quote one time, something like, "Love is like a good cigar ... the brighter it burns, the sooner it ashes.