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Dark Coal of Night

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For Nette Onclaud's Vibrations From A Verso Poetry Contest/ July 25, 2025

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Incinerating us
one night coal black
my lover lit a match
in a hot flash
and things he said cannot
be taken back
as cinders sift into
heart’s bottom ash!

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Len Gasun

Date: 8/9/2025 11:49:00 PM

This is beautiful and creative my dear poet friend Andrea! Belated Congratulations on your well-deserved first place win! God bless you always! Happy wkend/new week ahead! Hugs

Paige Hind

Date: 7/30/2025 9:59:00 PM

This has one deep ending to it. A beautiful poem, even short :)

Trina Layne

Date: 7/28/2025 7:25:00 AM

Congrats, Andrea! I love how the poetry flows here. It's a very creative interpretation of the theme.

Krishnanand Guptar

Date: 7/27/2025 3:00:00 AM

Congratulations, dear poetess, on your top win in this contest with a lovely metaphorical poem. "as cinders sift into heart’s bottom ash!"-an imagery packed with signification. Wishing you a pleasant Sunday.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/27/2025 10:29:00 AM

Thanks so much

Valsa George

Date: 7/27/2025 2:56:00 AM

It must have been a dark experience, creating a deep dent in the heart. Beautifully written. Congratulations on your first place win, dear Andrea.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/27/2025 10:29:00 AM

Not really me, Valsa. Just imagining the situation as I often do

Dr. Vandana Sharma

Date: 7/27/2025 1:57:00 AM

One dark black night indeed! Best wishes on your win.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 7/26/2025 4:50:00 PM

Heck! This horribly sad! Scary as well! Nicely done! Best wishes, Mikki

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/26/2025 8:16:00 AM

Great poem Andrea, so much happened in a short time.

Yann Rolland

Date: 7/26/2025 7:36:00 AM

great metaphor, nights have sentiments expressed,k so sweet poetry

Jack Horne

Date: 7/26/2025 5:38:00 AM

oh, love this, Andrea - so much said in a few lines

Howard Kerr

Date: 7/26/2025 5:21:00 AM

Hi Andrea, the intense imagery and heartfelt narrative of this compelling work leaves an indelible mark on those who value great literature. I wish you well in the contest Howard

Rowena Velasco

Date: 7/25/2025 6:06:00 PM

Andrea, your poem "Incinerating Us" vividly captures the irreversible damage caused by harsh words in a relationship. The metaphor of a match igniting a blaze illustrates how quickly love can turn destructive. The concise and evocative language leaves a lasting impression, making this poem a compelling read for anyone reflecting on the complexities of relationships. Love this...

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/26/2025 11:35:00 AM

Thanks. I love Nette's challenges.

Bill Baker

Date: 7/25/2025 5:59:00 PM

I hear the sizzle, Andrea. I heard a quote one time, something like, "Love is like a good cigar ... the brighter it burns, the sooner it ashes.