Dark Clouds - a Collaboration With Liam Mc Daid

Grey clouds the innocent sky ambushing light turns dark 
stumbling over a tombstone opening up cold graves

When eyes become frozen behind scenes in hidden truth  
as a weight deadens upon the shoulders without hope 

A ghost from past experience consumes the present 
and golden sands blacken beneath your feet fallen one
  
Deep undercurrents strains awaken in the ocean 
Invisible cloaked dagger pierces without mercy

I pray waters calming find peace in this mortal frame
as the whirlpool of desires casts an ominous spell

Upon the sea of life Satanic storms enter Hell
and exudes within the malevolent clouds failure
 
Forgiveness stands at the crossroads beholden no more 
within promise of a dream transparent through the rain 

As yellow moonlight draws one pathway clearly cutting  
brings you safely home to love under a fragile roof   

Under black currents of loss when the heart returns beat 
in the last teardrop sorrow remained faithfully loved 


In collaboration with The Irish Poet Liam Mc Daid 
2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 6/2/2016 1:00:00 AM
I enjoyed giving this another rad Red, hugs Rick.
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Date: 5/30/2016 1:36:00 PM
Certainly full of highly descriptive and emotive lines. Really rather good! My best regards, Red. :) john P.s Another seven.
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Date: 5/26/2016 6:50:00 PM
Nice ending to a poem that shows the perils that a heart faces. Great collab, you two. Congrats on POTD...
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:21:00 PM
thank you so much dearest..:)
Date: 5/25/2016 10:30:00 PM
Congrats on POTD! You and Liam did a great job.
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:22:00 PM
Thank you so much Rick...I am gonna read your poems ...~Hugs~Red
Date: 5/25/2016 9:39:00 PM
A most interesting write! Congrats for this POTD!
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:22:00 PM
Thank you Walter:)
Date: 5/25/2016 5:42:00 PM
Hello Red, Congratulations to you and Liam on POTD and on a very fine piece of free verse here!! The metaphors and imagery you guy employed here are both as telling as they are exquisite. I really like the mention of the "Satanic storms" and "black currents of loss" images. This one is most certainly a "FAV" in every respect. Cheers and Best, Gary
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:23:00 PM
thanks a lot Gary :)
Date: 5/25/2016 2:08:00 PM
Hello RED, I did not see this one, A lovely collaboration. Congratulations on poem of the day. Well deserved. LINDA
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:23:00 PM
Love you Linda..:)~Hugs ~Red
Date: 5/25/2016 11:50:00 AM
Congratulations red such a deep delight to see this as poem of the day a pleasure writing this with you pal your ink sang in this beautifully dark also thank you everyone for the wonderful comments
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:23:00 PM
Cheers ~Red~
Date: 5/25/2016 6:14:00 AM
- CONGRATULATIONS :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:24:00 PM
Hugs ~Red~
Date: 5/25/2016 6:13:00 AM
Wonderful collaboration you two and congratulations for POTD honors...
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:24:00 PM
Hey Charlie ! Thank you dearest :)~Red
Date: 5/25/2016 5:24:00 AM
Dark writing, luminous poetry! A great collaboration! A seven to both: RF and Liam, Liam and RF!
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:25:00 PM
Goodmorning my friend..~Red~
Date: 5/24/2016 4:45:00 PM
thank you everyone for the heartfelt beautiful comments wishing you all a week filled with smiles
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Date: 5/24/2016 4:43:00 PM
thank you so kindly red for the pleasure of joining pens in the darker side of ink really a pleasure wishing you as blessing of a week pal
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:26:00 PM
Cheers again my friend ~Red~
Date: 5/24/2016 9:32:00 AM
I read this poem a few times, and I am still trying to work out who wrote which part/s!! A seamless collaboration...well done to both! // paul
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:27:00 PM
Paul, you are very kind and your visits are most welcomed..Hugs ~Red
Date: 5/24/2016 2:45:00 AM
- A deep and great poem, Red & Liam - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:28:00 PM
thank you Anne:)
Date: 5/23/2016 11:47:00 PM
Wonderful collaboration Red and Liam. You two come together like peaches and cream.
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Red Fiery
Date: 5/29/2016 8:27:00 PM
Thank you Tim...you write so well...I like your poems..Cheers ~Red
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