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Daniel the Conqueror

In a land far away was a family with two boys The oldest loved sports the youngest only toys. You should be like your big brother the father would always say It’s time for you to toughen up and leave this childish play. Yes Quinton was a fighter, loved games of every sort, But nothing did he want to do more than play a sport. Daniel he was meek and mild a softie like his mother He hated when his dad would say, “Be more like your brother.” Hurt and down he took a walk up on a rocky hill Throwing stones hard at the water, he let his anger spill. Why doesn’t my dad love me? Into the air he cried, Kicking rocks with fists curled, tight against his side. Meanwhile on an island far across the sea A leader spoke to the animals, almost like a plea. Legends say a leader from mainland shall appear A strong and faithful warrior, a boy that has no fear. How shall we find this man child? Asked the animals out loud, We’ve never seen a human said a yearling really proud. The Albatross said strong and brave, I will bring him here I know he isn’t very far, I feel his presence near. The bird flew out across the sea searching high and low Wondering where he’d find him, the boy they needed so. There; high up on a hill side a warrior stood so tall, He knew it was the chosen one, for he could hear him call. Now in a flash he swooped down, grabbed Daniel real fast The albatross was thinking, I’ve found the boy at last. Daniel he was screaming as he dangled by one leg Flying over water yelling let me go I beg. As they neared the island, the animals all gathered round Watching as the big white bird, let their hero down. Welcome said a racoon, we’ve waited here so long Today we’ll have a party, let’s fill the woods with song. They sat all night telling horrible tales of an enemy they feared And all felt a little safer now that Daniel had appeared. I’m not the hero you think I am, there’s been a bad mistake And a little bunny looked at him, you must be for my sake. Daniel fell in love that night with all his new friends here None of them made him feel bad, they made him feel so dear. For their sakes I must beat this foe, an enemy, a disgrace Making sure he never comes back to this peaceful place. For days they planned together, what everyone would do And when the varmint showed up they stood up to him too. Instead of running and hiding, they stood together tight The badger lost the battle and ran home fast that night. The wise old owl thanked Daniel for ridding the beast at last Conquering their worst enemy, who now is in the past. On wings of love the hero left his friends on the islands strand When Daniel went back home that day, he had become a man. The moral of my story? With a little love and trust, Everyone can be a hero, we are more than clay and dust. Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 10.18.2014 Carol Eastman’s Contest: Fable to the Rescue 1st

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Date: 11/20/2014 12:53:00 PM
Wow CONGRATS for a motivating aweinspiring poem with a fantastic story in great flow! Begins lwith abel n cain type attitude but ends on a great positive note
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Date: 11/19/2014 6:17:00 PM
Hi Brenda, stopping by again to congratulate you for your 1st Place win for your great fable. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/19/2014 12:42:00 AM
A great tale and moral. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/18/2014 8:16:00 PM
Hi Brenda, Wow! Epic write. Nice rhythmic flow and tale. Congratulations on your excellent win. Earl
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Date: 11/18/2014 6:44:00 PM
I am so pleased to see this one received top honors, fantastic Job Brenda!
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Date: 11/18/2014 4:39:00 PM
Wow.. well penned ...a heartwarming story Brenda...Big congrats on the win
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Date: 11/18/2014 12:48:00 PM
Loved this fable the first time I read it and I love it now. Congratulations on your first place win.
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Date: 11/18/2014 11:51:00 AM
dropping back with my congrats Brenda:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/18/2014 11:36:00 AM
Congrats on the win Brenda...huggs
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Date: 10/31/2014 6:07:00 AM
beautiful Brenda.. :) flow and imagery and the message is just as well true.. :)! mmmn haven't yet tried this one.. :D
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/31/2014 8:40:00 AM
Thanks Olive.
Date: 10/21/2014 4:26:00 PM
Hi Brenda, what a great narrative poem! I really enjoyed the story and the way it rhymed and flowed so well. What a great imagination you have! Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/21/2014 5:09:00 PM
Thank you Sandra. I'm happy you like it.
Date: 10/21/2014 8:56:00 AM
Hey, where is the new little poem you showed me? I came to see it and it's not here! Hope you post it!
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/21/2014 5:08:00 PM
It's here now.
Date: 10/20/2014 10:22:00 PM
What a wonderful story, you are so gifted with your thoughts and your words. :) eve
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/20/2014 11:23:00 PM
Thanks for your kind words Eve.
Date: 10/20/2014 5:10:00 PM
splendid, detailed storyline well told with flowing, vivid lines.. another fine animal verse from you, Brenda.. huggs
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/20/2014 6:17:00 PM
Thanks so much Nette
Date: 10/20/2014 3:11:00 PM
Opps I meant to write oh thank you so much not no thank you my hubby was getting ready for work, and always at the last minute he couldn't find his clean socks, sometimes I don't know about men lol cheri
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Date: 10/20/2014 1:56:00 PM
No thank you so much your message got through I don't know what happened, but thank you so very much for doing this for me, I appreciate it alot, thank you my friend, cheri
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Date: 10/20/2014 8:26:00 AM
Hey Brienda, Hey this is cheri I'm trouble with my system can you send me a comment so I can see if it goes through, thank you cheri
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Date: 10/19/2014 6:43:00 PM
wow, you took the challenge and ran with it. This is a very nice fable using animals and the little boy to create a loving message. I just know this will do well in the contest.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 8:42:00 PM
Thanks so much Andrea.
Date: 10/19/2014 4:05:00 PM
Excellent story, Brenda. I enjoyed every little bit of it. You could turn this into a proper children's book with some added imagination. Good moral to sum it all up. // paul
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 8:40:00 PM
That was actually my original idea with this story, then I decided to write it as a poem. I am so happy you enjoyed it Paul.
Date: 10/19/2014 1:02:00 PM
Fabulous and captivating story that makes the reader thirsty for more! Beautifully done! Good luck , dear Brenda!
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 8:38:00 PM
Thanks Demetrios, this means a lot to me.
Date: 10/19/2014 12:14:00 PM
Excellent fable Brenda. It is sad how a parent can demoralize a special child.
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 12:45:00 PM
Thanks Maurice. Sometimes we say and do things unintentionally not really thinking about what damage we are inflicting. I am glad to see people are realizing this more and more.
Date: 10/19/2014 3:49:00 AM
Wow Brenda that's wonderful n tremendous! Gl in contest!
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 12:42:00 PM
Thank You Dr. Sharma.
Date: 10/18/2014 9:26:00 PM
Hello Brenda, Best of Luck in Carol Eastman's contest. You have an extraordinary write here and it looks like a number one entry to me. I enjoy narrative writes like this very much. Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 12:41:00 PM
Thanks so much Gary. I am happy you enjoyed reading this.
Date: 10/18/2014 7:11:00 PM
consider adding "everyone can be a hero, we are more than clay and dust." I absolutely love the story but somehow it didn't feel like it ended. this also provides an end rhyme and fits in with the mystical feel of your poem. I expect this piece will do very well in the contest Brenda!
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/19/2014 12:32:00 PM
Thank you Richard. I had done something else that sounded horrible then just left it like that but your tip saved the day. Thanks for the advice and complement.
Date: 10/18/2014 1:31:00 PM
Wow Brenda you told an incredible story with a fantastic moral. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xxx
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Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/18/2014 1:39:00 PM
Thanks so much Jan.
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