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Young buck steals truck Drives fast Flies past Beeps horn To warn Road rage Rampage Cuts in Too thin Fender Bender Crashed car Poor Pa!* Huge mess … confess In cell It’s hell In clink Can think British way of saying 'pa' which sounds like 'par'* 6th June 2015 a more serious set of footles

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James Fraser

Date: 6/10/2015 3:29:00 PM

This should go up in all the Police Stations, just hopefully word of mouth will suffice, and less shall be. Nice message Jan, hugs, James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2015 3:35:00 PM

Thanks James it does send out a strong message but in a fun form:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/8/2015 10:59:00 AM

These are fun Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2015 11:42:00 AM

Thanks Richard - there is a humourous side to them but also a more serious lesson. Hope you will join my footles contest if you have time. Have had 2 mails from mama bear - wow she is amazing just like her son! my thoughts are with you all:-) Hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/7/2015 9:27:00 AM

The words are easy to relate to and the story is all too familiar. Good work! Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 9:30:00 AM

Footles are meant to be humourous - this is a little serious - I do hope you will join my footles contest Emile if you read 'spoilt brat' footles you will see the type of thing i am hoping to see:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jack Ellison

Date: 6/7/2015 6:48:00 AM

Very unique approach... very effective too! Enjoyed it muchly as I do with all your stuff! Hugs, Jack xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 6:52:00 AM

Thanks Jack. I hope you will join in the fun and enter my footles contest - If you have a look at 'spoilt brat footles you will get more of an idea what I am after - need more humour than this particular poem which is actually quite serious but the footle form suited it too:-)hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/7/2015 2:18:00 AM

These are great Jan...I was able to put together some between baseball games : ) ....if you get a chance read Charma and my collaboration under Cupid's Arrow.... Warning you might cry....its about friendship and loss

Jan Allison
Date: 6/7/2015 2:20:00 AM

oh thanks I will do Tim :-) Guess I will be able to relate to it in so many ways:-) Hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 6/6/2015 6:01:00 PM

Jan, I agree you are so creative with these footles , a 7 and thanks for visiting my queen poem

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2015 6:09:00 PM

Thanks Broken Wings - this is a little sad for a footle which is meant to be humourous but I do have fun penning these little gems of a poem:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/6/2015 4:27:00 PM

You are so good at footles AND you're funny, too! You are the perfect person to put on the Footle Contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2015 4:36:00 PM

Thanks Laura - i do hope you will join in the footles fun - this is a little serious for footles but the form fits the words so well - i just want those who enter to have fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2015 1:48:00 PM

this is really great, Jan. Your style of footles so different from mine. I like to do both syllables rhymed and make the jokes in the titles. But the way you do yours like a story shows us a really cool and fun way to do them differently. Love these.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2015 2:07:00 PM

I was so proud to see Brian Strand has commented on my blog - he invented the form and I hope my interpretation of it does them justice - i know they are designed to be funny but I think this string shows how effective they can be at getting a message across:-) hugs Jan xx My 'spoilt brat' footles i think are more fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/6/2015 12:24:00 PM

Beautiful but dangerous footle indeed. In cell, it's hell. So, better not to use while driving. Good advice too. Enjoyed a lot, my lovely friend. 7 i feel. Loved always,bl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2015 12:51:00 PM

thanks so much BL:-) Hugs Jan xx