Dandilion

With Youth..... Watch this girl... she has her eyes on a rising dandelion sprouted in high grass, a pensive girl, weaving her way through the fields, looking past weeds to her future, making her way through a maze of thistle solitude, on Saturday afternoons, down hallways and classes on Tuesday, teacher and stranger and parent expectation, she approaches a destination beyond home, clutching the flower to her budding breasts With Age.... Keep your eyes on her... she is residue of the mute child, now entrusted with a knowing mind and well worn shoes, still clutching the flower to her breast... She peers through pages of old photos, scratching through scraps of half-heard conversation, seeking some color and clarity with a dim vision of the girl that held a prickly spine of a spent dandelion with compromise and resignation With Wisdom Unable to mouth a sound, I wish to warn each teacher, each mentor, each censor of the flame... I want to shout: "Watch this girl... who held a weightless flame of windswept dream in her eyes, making her way, mediating between her reality and every longing she ever had... Look back to this girl who has always maintained an unblinking gaze on the white star of dandelion in her hand" _____________________________________________ Submitted to PD's Contest : 101 In A Row #7

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 11/9/2015 1:41:00 AM
Hi Carrie. What a dear and creative poem. Thanks for the sharing, and I'm delighted for your much deserved win. GBU.
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Date: 11/8/2015 9:54:00 PM
Congrats on ur awesome first place win with this superb write Carrie!
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Date: 11/8/2015 8:00:00 AM
Carrie, wonderful write.
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Date: 11/8/2015 7:26:00 AM
Well done, Carrie. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/8/2015 4:32:00 AM
For expectation of good future requires that we handle thes3 blooming flowers with gentleness
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Date: 11/7/2015 4:20:00 PM
Congratulations in your placement on the contest.
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Date: 11/7/2015 3:30:00 PM
Beautiful win. SKAT
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Date: 11/7/2015 3:21:00 PM
Carrie, this is a well written piece. I enjoyed going on the journey of the different stages of your life. You expressed your lessons learned very well. This piece was very worthy of top spot. Congratulations on your 1st place win and thanks for participating:-) Alexis
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Date: 12/24/2013 6:30:00 AM
Congrats way to go..Merry, Merry Christmas to you and your family..Sara
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Date: 12/21/2013 6:01:00 PM
Once again, you have written a VERY sad, meloncholy poem with your own unique style and grace...Congrats my friend and Merry Christmas! - Tim
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Date: 12/20/2013 7:32:00 PM
Just wonderful Carrie. Congrad's on Your win. Light & Love
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Date: 12/20/2013 11:34:00 AM
super take Carrie congrats on a very fine win season's greeting to you Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 12/20/2013 3:56:00 AM
Enjoyed the write on the selected quote and congrats on the fine win, Carrie
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Date: 12/19/2013 8:49:00 PM
Wonderful win Carrie... always Linda
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Date: 12/19/2013 8:32:00 PM
Deep message. Perfectly fitting for the quote. Congrats, Carrie!
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Date: 12/19/2013 2:30:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie
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Date: 12/19/2013 11:45:00 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem Carrie in: Relate your poem to one of these quotes, Contest - Sponsored by: Giorgio V. - Nice to participate - and enjoyable to read ALL winning poems! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/19/2013 10:09:00 AM
Congrats Carrie!
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Date: 7/11/2013 10:37:00 PM
an excellent "talking to yourself" winning poem.... Congratulations, always & forever ~ Linda
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Date: 7/11/2013 8:43:00 AM
An enjoyable write! Congrats on your well deserved win. AO
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Date: 7/9/2013 10:40:00 AM
Wow, Carrie this is fantastic. Congrats on your fabulous win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/9/2013 10:35:00 AM
Absolutely stunning, Carrie! Big congrats on your well-deserved win!
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Date: 7/9/2013 7:43:00 AM
Carrie, congratulations on your big win with this beautifully crafted poem, Constance
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Date: 7/8/2013 11:52:00 PM
life stages so beautifully expressed, carrie... special congrats on your fine win!...:) huggs
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Date: 6/26/2013 11:33:00 AM
This is truly reflective of your beautiful personage. Such an interesting symbol in the dandelion flower that ties the three stages together. A very inspiring and I would say, a wining poem. Hugs, SuZ
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