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Dancing On a Point

Dancing on the point of a needle again
Trying to forget her pain
Liquide dreams flowing through her veins
Painting pretty pictures on her brain

Trying to forget her pain
As she sways to music only she can hear
Painting pretty pictures on her brain
Her little prick of happy turns to fear

As she sways to music only she can hear
It changes to a somber note
Her little prick of happy turns to fear
She feels dark fingers around her throat

It changes to a somber note
This is now a fight for her life
She Feels dark fingers around her throat
She reaches for an imaginary knife

This is now a fight for her life
No longer knowing what is real
She reaches for an imaginary knife
An empty space is all she can feel

No longer knowing what is real
From the edge she finally steps back
An empty space is all she can feel
Her mind no longer under attack

From the edge she finally steps back
She returns to her sad reality
Her mind no longer under attack
Yet she is still in need of being set free

She returns to her sad reality
Liquide dreams flowing through her veins
Yet she is still in need of being set free
Dancing on the point of a needle again

Inspired by Cherie Thomas
Read her poem "A piece of Foil"

Modified Pantoum incorporating Rhyme

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2013

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Abdulhafeez Oyewole Date: 7/7/2013 3:39:00 AM I agreed with Andrea about your poem being deep and dark. I sure read Cherie's before stopping by your fine work. Well done Richard on your decent Modified Pantoum. AO Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/7/2013 6:50:00 AM Hi A.O, so nice to have you visit. I hope you are well.

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/7/2013 2:11:00 AM Good night, Richard...sweet dreams. Thanks for the post. I appreciate it. Hoping to read something new from you, or I'll have to resort to reading the old work again. Always a pleasure either way. Take care. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/7/2013 6:52:00 AM Sorry I didn't have a chance to drop by sooner. Late day at work and we had a pre wedding fundraiser to attend.

Colleen Bono Date: 7/7/2013 12:17:00 AM PD cant go.:( I was hoping.But understand.Take care of her while I am gone please.She has been through alot.No slacking while I am gone cause my sister has a computer I will be checking.Love Colleen Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/7/2013 6:53:00 AM Hopefully you can connect at another time, either way I hope you fully enjoy your trip.

Colleen Bono Date: 7/6/2013 7:26:00 PM working on saturday,shame on you and you didnt ask me first.See now your behind on writing.Thanks for your visits.Love Colleen Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 11:32:00 PM Your most welcome Colleen, just four more days till your trip.

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/6/2013 7:21:00 AM Good morning, Richard. Addiction has many different forms. Many of us are addicted to one thing or another... great inspirational write. Have a good day..... Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 7:29:00 AM Thanks Eileen;0)

Karen Anglesey Date: 7/5/2013 10:21:00 PM Richard, a moving poem expressing deep struggle. Sometimes solitary life gets really intense... Exceptional :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 6:10:00 AM Thanks so much Karen.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/5/2013 10:15:00 PM WOW, you are very talented. I think I told you that before!! Is it for Deb's Referential contest. Mine is going to be dark like this one too. Love this. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 6:11:00 AM No not for the contest, I think Debs is free form otherwise I might have entered it.

Harry Horsman Date: 7/5/2013 3:53:00 PM Wow, You certainly tell it as it is, and yet so unique this rendering of sadness, you truly are a special guy Richard, i feel privilege reading what you write.. just sorry i'm not around as much now a days.... Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 6:12:00 AM Your comments are so touching Harry, you just made my day.

Shadow Hamilton Date: 7/5/2013 12:21:00 PM Richard this write blew me away sensational Shadow x smiles Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 6:13:00 AM Thanks you are sweet Shadow.

Colleen Bono Date: 7/5/2013 10:33:00 AM Nice as usual.I dont know how you do it.I cant keep up with comments let alone writes everyday.Colleen Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/6/2013 6:14:00 AM Sometimes it is hard to keep up.

Nette Onclaud Date: 7/5/2013 8:34:00 AM a great breakaway from the dance of pain.. you amaze, richard... brilliantly created by your gold pen!..:) huggs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/5/2013 8:38:00 AM Thanks Nette, you always have such a nice flare with your comments. Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/5/2013 8:37:00 AM Thanks Drake. Often the places we humans seek our freedom leads us to torture chambers constructed in the bowels of unimaginable pain. We reach for imaginary bliss and are swallowed up in the process.

Poet Tacito Date: 7/5/2013 8:24:00 AM Mmm, the power of freedom. The power of even reaching that peak in the 1st place. Fantastic lines, Richard! Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 7/7/2013 7:54:00 AM So well said...so very true. Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/5/2013 8:43:00 AM See comment above

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/5/2013 8:13:00 AM Dancing with an addiction is not a pretty sight..Great expressive work telling the story.Enjoyed reading this morn..If not for the footnotes I would have thought of someone who had a mental illness..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/5/2013 8:19:00 AM Thanks for commenting, Sara.

Cherie Thomas Date: 7/5/2013 7:06:00 AM Wow!!! What a powerful gripping write, Richard i love the title, gave me chills reading it!!! sheer emotional distress screams, against that turmoil of addiction...a honest look at what so many battle with, on a daily basis. Brillant write!!!You captured this so well, dancing on a point!!! I love it...thankyou so much for sharing this amazing poem & the dedication,,,,, truly appreciate it very much....onelove:0) Cheriex Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/5/2013 8:22:00 AM This comment makes my day, your poem brought out emotions in me because I grew up in a home with addiction. Fortunately my mom was a stabilizing force within the madness created by my father.