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Dance with Delusions

Dancing with delusions, sparks of hellfire
Course through my lugubrious quill pen.
Distorted words igniting fear,
Anxiety fills crevices,
Encircling, silencing,
Asphyxiating.
Walls closing in,
Compressing.
Hope fades,
Doom.
Dread
Runs cold.
Veins poisoned,
Sanity slips
Unmercifully.
The angels are mimicked.
Light dimming, darkness descends
As demons mingle with the dead.
Apocalyptic skies crack open
To wash away all that you held sacred.

Copyright © Sara Jama | Year Posted 2025

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April 5, 2025 at 3:48 AM

What a darkly delicious piece that you have crafted. I love the build up cadence/ ebb and flow outstanding my Onyx Rose. Well-deserved poem of the day

April 5, 2025 at 8:24 AM

Thank you so much my babygirl.

March 31, 2025 at 12:52 PM

A frightening dance! Congrats on POTD!

March 31, 2025 at 1:14 PM

Thank you very much.

March 30, 2025 at 3:36 AM

Congratulations Sara on having received poem of the day, I’ve enjoyed the read… Beryl

March 30, 2025 at 7:12 AM

Thank you very much.

March 29, 2025 at 2:49 PM

Congratulations on potd Sara!

March 29, 2025 at 4:43 PM

Thank you very much.

March 29, 2025 at 11:21 AM

I see a blackened crescent moon (etheree display) which delivers hellish horizons -well-done! Congratulations on POTD Sara!

March 29, 2025 at 11:50 AM

Thank you very much. Yes I see the moon in the poem too.

Robert James Liguori

March 29, 2025 at 8:48 AM

Congratulations on POTD. Some of the best metaphors ever in this poem!

March 29, 2025 at 10:23 AM

Thank you so much.

March 29, 2025 at 8:18 AM

Dear Sara, I adore your ingenious use of the etheree form, which, when inverted, feels like "walls closing in", like a mental implosion in the first stanza, to then expanding in the upright position the feelings of madness and torment in the second stanza. Impactful use of dark imagery, syllables and line lengths throughout! I admire your ability to harness a "dance with delusions" into the etheree framework which serves to enhance your desolate imagery to great physical and psychological effect. Congratulations for POTD honors! Worthy and well-deserving. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

March 29, 2025 at 10:32 AM

Thank you very much for the insightful feedback. I truly appreciate it.

March 29, 2025 at 6:15 AM

Hello Sara, congratulations on your POTD win. Wishing you a wonderful weekend as you celebrate your win.

March 29, 2025 at 7:18 AM

Thank you very much. Wishing you a wonderful weekend too.

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 29, 2025 at 6:08 AM

- Sara,congratulations on your p.o.t.d. :) - hugs

March 29, 2025 at 7:20 AM

Thank you very much.

March 29, 2025 at 5:40 AM

Oh look who got potd! Congrats grumpy! I know you care lol! Happy to see you featured!

March 29, 2025 at 7:21 AM

Thank you Ink.

March 29, 2025 at 4:49 AM

Congratulations Sara, on your delusional dance of death being recognised as POTD, not very often do we see a Etheree getting the honour, but it’s totally deserved here in this dark piece I can totally relate to on certain days, cheers David

March 29, 2025 at 7:22 AM

Thank you very much for the kind feedback.

March 29, 2025 at 4:46 AM

Congratulations on having this fear filled poetry recognized as potd, Sara.

March 29, 2025 at 7:23 AM

Thank you very much.

March 29, 2025 at 3:39 AM

Sara, well penned, congratulations on POTD.

March 29, 2025 at 7:23 AM

Thank you very much.

March 29, 2025 at 1:05 AM

Quite a dark verse Sara, congratulations to you on today's POTD honour. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

March 29, 2025 at 7:24 AM

Thank you very much.

March 28, 2025 at 8:04 AM

I love how youv used the alt prompt here “ dancing with delusions” and you wrote an etheree! It reminds me of how we used to do collabs , and i remember we wrote a double etheree together once and nana didnt like something dark i had written , remember? Hah! Gosh! Weve known each other for too long now grumpy! And every word in this is so so good! And wow youv used also alliterations! A fave this is for me! For sure! Nailed it! You are the queen of darkness!

March 29, 2025 at 5:43 AM

Well im still black rainbows and unicorns. Thats why nana loved me! I am barbie lololol

March 28, 2025 at 8:10 AM

Yes I remember. Nana was unicorns and rainbows. Definitely not us. Hahaha. And yes we have known each other for a long time. One day old and grey. Lol. Thank you for all the support.

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