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Daddy, Please Don'T Make Me Cry

Daddy Please Don't Make Me Cry Daddy I love you and I need a hug Daddy I fell, hurt my knee Daddy please hold me and give me some love Daddy please please love me Daddy my dolly is broken again Daddy I tried to be good Daddy I promise it wasn't my fault Daddy I misunderstood Daddy I'm hurting my knee is real sore Daddy I'm sure I will die Daddy a plaster will be quite enough Daddy please don't make me cry Daddy I don't want to do this again Daddy I really am sore Daddy my leg is a bit of a mess Daddy my heart hurts far more Daddy I just want to feel safe and loved Daddy I'm sure I will die Daddy please don't make me do it again Daddy please don't make me cry. Jane Shields 17 July 2016

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John Hamilton

Date: 12/4/2017 10:57:00 AM

Heartbreaking write Jane, sadly this is too common in today's world, I wrote a similar poem, I was just a kid, one of my first poems here on the soup. Writing does help to ease the pain!

John Gondolf

Date: 11/7/2017 5:25:00 PM

Keep writing, Jane, don't worry about the feeling of the reader. It was very tough for me to read this poem and yet it created a dialog between you and I. And sometimes that dialog helps as much as writing. I've only been on PS for about 2 months but it appears that there are many with very big hearts willing to listen and give feedback. Just keep writing Jane and we will keep reading. John

Jane Shields
Date: 11/7/2017 11:55:00 PM

Many thanks to you. I've got a lot more yet to post, and I'm writing most days so will probably have many more for people to read. I'm moving away from the disturbing stuff a bit now, but every now and then I go back to it. x

John Gondolf

Date: 11/7/2017 4:42:00 PM

I, as well, have found that writing is good for the soul. If you ever need to talk, I'm a good listener.

Jane Shields
Date: 11/7/2017 4:51:00 PM

Thank you John. That's very nice of you. I had a nervous breakdown several years ago, which eventually led to me losing my job through the PTSD brought on from stress of the breakdown. I began writing last July. Lyrics a year ago. It totally helps me to focus and release bad feelings. I know it's tough on readers, but I never go into detail with my writing, just hints. I find that since my PTSD my writing expresses all my feelings better than I can say them. So that's how my writing began. xx

John Gondolf

Date: 11/7/2017 4:31:00 PM

My heart goes out to you, Jane, and my prayers. John

Jane Shields
Date: 11/7/2017 4:33:00 PM

Thank you. It was many years ago, and I'm in a happy place now. I use writing as therapy and it helps a lot. xx

John Gondolf

Date: 11/7/2017 3:30:00 PM

Jane, this poem is so heartbreaking, I can feel the little girl's pain. I truly hope this is a fictional write... John

Jane Shields
Date: 11/7/2017 4:00:00 PM

I would not need to write fiction on a subject like this, sadly. x