Andrea Dietrich Poet Acrostic

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a double sijo acrostic

Crushed

Jilted by her paramour, she languishes in the junkyard.

Unloved and unwanted, she has become unhinged, poor utter wreck,

Nevermore to feel her lover’s tender hand upon her wheel.

Kept only for “parts,” she rusts away, dreaming of yesterday.

Empty - so empty - she recalls long country drives, his voice singing.

Destruction comes. The shell of her - like her soul - will soon be crushed.


June 21, 2016 
For Anthony Biaanco's Crushed Contest

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Dineen Williams Gault July 2, 2016 at 9:13 AM What a great metaphor, I felt the warmth of the past, and the sadness for what remains. Such flair, as per your usual, congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2016 at 5:42 AM Well done Andrea, cong ATMs.

Joanna Daniel June 29, 2016 at 2:58 AM Congratulations on a superb win, Andrea:)

Jan Allison June 28, 2016 at 5:13 PM Great metaphor Andrea many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi June 28, 2016 at 12:21 AM Congratulations on your placement ....

Connie Marcum Wong June 27, 2016 at 11:31 PM Congrats on your win Andrea. ; )

Eve Roper June 27, 2016 at 5:53 PM Andrea, congratulations you on your wonderful win! Wonderful write ! Hugs Eve

Carrie Richards June 27, 2016 at 2:25 PM Great personalization Andrea!! And combining two forms into one poem....great job ! Congrats to you!

Casarah Nance June 27, 2016 at 10:27 AM I love the feeling that this is more than a car, an emotion, a woman, more than an object... dreaming of yesterday... the shell of her like her soul will soon be crushed. This was a great write combining both acrostic with sijo and so many poetic flavors. Very well done!

Janis Medders Tobechi June 27, 2016 at 1:56 AM I like it Andrea....Good luck for the contest

Connie Marcum Wong June 26, 2016 at 3:39 AM I really liked your entry Andrea. It is short but very sweet! : )

Jennifer Walker June 24, 2016 at 6:27 AM Great metaphor sis. I know that the jaguar John is restoring is blessed not being crushed.

Daver Austin June 23, 2016 at 12:52 PM Yes, and those feet upside down on the dashboard. She's seen her better day, but oh those fun times, eh? Love, daver

Robert Johnson June 23, 2016 at 9:20 AM God, what a heart wrenching metaphorical tale. To think of the human equivalent is tragic. Powerful acrostic.

Michelle Mac Donald June 22, 2016 at 8:19 PM An amazing acrostic/sico, Andrea! I used to have a naughty car, but felt sad when it got "junked". Cleverly fun write! Best to you! Mikki

Brian Davey June 22, 2016 at 4:48 PM What a metaphorical piece of work this is! I love it! Hope you are well friend I just got back from a much needed vacation not that anyone here missed me! lol

Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2016 at 7:38 AM I like your entry. I wonder at what moment does a car go from being loved then discarded???

Richard D Seal June 22, 2016 at 4:46 AM Heelllloo, there's a new kid on the block, oh no! it's you Petal lol, hardly recognised you. My motors in the shop at mo getting a new clutch, was touch an go whether to repair but your poem tells of all the feelings I wish to avoid. She shall not be crushed lol. I have nothing new on so don't bother with me. Take care, Richard

Joanna Daniel June 22, 2016 at 4:25 AM Very nicely done, Andrea:) I like the way you ended it:)

Ravi Sathasivam June 22, 2016 at 2:36 AM Excellent. Well said. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Tim Smith June 21, 2016 at 9:00 PM Very lovely Andrea...love the new avatar!!