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a double sijo acrostic

Jilted by her paramour, she languishes in the junkyard. Unloved and unwanted, she has become unhinged, poor utter wreck, Nevermore to feel her lover’s tender hand upon her wheel. Kept only for “parts,” she rusts away, dreaming of yesterday. Empty - so empty - she recalls long country drives, his voice singing. Destruction comes. The shell of her - like her soul - will soon be crushed. June 21, 2016 For Anthony Biaanco's Crushed Contest

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Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 7/2/2016 9:13:00 AM

What a great metaphor, I felt the warmth of the past, and the sadness for what remains. Such flair, as per your usual, congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/29/2016 5:42:00 AM

Well done Andrea, cong ATMs.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/29/2016 2:58:00 AM

Congratulations on a superb win, Andrea:)

Jan Allison

Date: 6/28/2016 5:13:00 PM

Great metaphor Andrea many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 6/28/2016 12:21:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement ....

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/27/2016 11:31:00 PM

Congrats on your win Andrea. ; )

Eve Roper

Date: 6/27/2016 5:53:00 PM

Andrea, congratulations you on your wonderful win! Wonderful write ! Hugs Eve

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/27/2016 2:25:00 PM

Great personalization Andrea!! And combining two forms into one poem....great job ! Congrats to you!

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/27/2016 10:27:00 AM

I love the feeling that this is more than a car, an emotion, a woman, more than an object... dreaming of yesterday... the shell of her like her soul will soon be crushed. This was a great write combining both acrostic with sijo and so many poetic flavors. Very well done!

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 6/27/2016 1:56:00 AM

I like it Andrea....Good luck for the contest

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/26/2016 3:39:00 AM

I really liked your entry Andrea. It is short but very sweet! : )

Jennifer Walker

Date: 6/24/2016 6:27:00 AM

Great metaphor sis. I know that the jaguar John is restoring is blessed not being crushed.

Daver Austin

Date: 6/23/2016 12:52:00 PM

Yes, and those feet upside down on the dashboard. She's seen her better day, but oh those fun times, eh? Love, daver

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/23/2016 9:20:00 AM

God, what a heart wrenching metaphorical tale. To think of the human equivalent is tragic. Powerful acrostic.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 6/22/2016 8:19:00 PM

An amazing acrostic/sico, Andrea! I used to have a naughty car, but felt sad when it got "junked". Cleverly fun write! Best to you! Mikki

Brian Davey

Date: 6/22/2016 4:48:00 PM

What a metaphorical piece of work this is! I love it! Hope you are well friend I just got back from a much needed vacation not that anyone here missed me! lol

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/22/2016 7:38:00 AM

I like your entry. I wonder at what moment does a car go from being loved then discarded???

Richard D Seal

Date: 6/22/2016 4:46:00 AM

Heelllloo, there's a new kid on the block, oh no! it's you Petal lol, hardly recognised you. My motors in the shop at mo getting a new clutch, was touch an go whether to repair but your poem tells of all the feelings I wish to avoid. She shall not be crushed lol. I have nothing new on so don't bother with me. Take care, Richard

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/22/2016 4:25:00 AM

Very nicely done, Andrea:) I like the way you ended it:)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 6/22/2016 2:36:00 AM

Excellent. Well said. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/21/2016 9:00:00 PM

Very lovely Andrea...love the new avatar!!