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Crushed

He unexpectedly lost the other half
     of his soul. Now he's merely 
    an empty shell, crushed under
    the elephantine encumbrance
          of unimaginable grief.

    The hours are miserably long; 
      nights are infinitely longer.
  He's a thousand shards of glass;
        crushed coarse and fine
            in equal measure.

    The coarse pieces of himself
  he's picked up from the asphalt.
      The fine remnants remain 
         perpetually scattered
            every which way.

       He'll never be the same
     Crushed by grief yet he still
soldiers on with life. Slowly, a smile
  is returning to his face and eyes.
 His wife's memory, his consolation.


CRUSHED Poetry Contest (Winner: 4th Place)
Sponsored by Anthony Biaanco
Date written: 06/16/2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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A Keirns Avatar
June 26, 2020 at 3:18 PM
Very powerful and sadly beautiful.
Ibeh Avatar
June 26, 2020 at 4:35 PM
Thanks so much, Julia:-) Your kind comments and visit mean a great deal to me!
Ashley Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 8:35 PM
Your golden pen is both potent and poignant, Edward. Such a sad beauty with a great last line. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Ibeh Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 9:25 PM
Thank you so much, Susan:-) I appreciate the wondrous comments! Stay blessed. xoxo
Mcintosh Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 11:56 AM
This is a beautiful and poignant work. I enjoyed this tremendously and will fave it. I love it.... blessings and much love sent your way, my friend, Gina
Ibeh Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 2:07 PM
Thank you very much for the wonderful comments and the fav, Gina:-) God bless!
Mishra Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 5:33 AM
A heartfelt write Edward, sad yet beautiful. I love how it ends with the consolation of memories. Congratulations on your splendid win :) Blessings my friend
Ibeh Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 8:59 AM
Thank you very much for the wonderful feedback, Aditi:-)
Chutani Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 4:29 AM
Loss of a partner creates a vacuum that doesnot fill easily. Very well potrayed the aspect of a crushed life. Congrats. Mohan
Ibeh Avatar
June 18, 2020 at 9:00 AM
Thanks so much, Mohan:-) I couldn't agree with you more!
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 17, 2020 at 3:24 AM
Excellent use of metaphors to express the grief Edward. This should do great in the contest. xxoo
Ibeh Avatar
June 17, 2020 at 6:45 AM
Thank you very much, Connie:-) Most appreciated.
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