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Crumbling Pedestal

You rise above me on your lofty pedestal Cracking your razored whip Ordering my possibilities Leaving your intricate patterns on my back Red lace adorns your masterpiece I chip at the base of your column Choosing for your mighty to fall You are unaware of your teetering Cracks adorn your insignificance Your monument betrays you True power lays waste to your beliefs The bottom always determines what stays on top Look into these eyes See past your own disaster My power resides within my compassion I do not wish to rule your castle Freedom lives beyond your gates I was not born to be your enemy Hate does not flow through these veins Justice shall not be served by my blade You instead scurry to the top of your rubble Impale yourself with rusted sword Fleeing your own salvation You answer your ghosts Delivered by you own injustice No one left to mourn your passing You believed you could go no lower Unaware Hell would embrace you in serpent arms After all you descended from your father A fallen angel has no where else to fall Verlena S. Walker's Slam Round 2 contest.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/10/2014 3:40:00 PM

Richard, CONGRATULATIONS.... You sure slammed the slam.... Hugs... LINDA

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/9/2014 8:19:00 PM

Congratulations on your win and thanks for supporting my slamming contest… Verlena

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 6/2/2014 6:47:00 PM

Thanks Richard, I guess it's my blindness that prevents me from seeing. LoL

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 5/29/2014 8:55:00 AM

Tweet's away

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/29/2014 9:54:00 AM

Thanks Scott.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 5/27/2014 6:07:00 AM

Best of luck in the competition, though I think you've got a great poem here. I've got more twitter followers now, I'd like to show them this if that's ok. Cheers Scott.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/27/2014 7:52:00 AM

Hi Scott, I would be honored. I'm pleased you like it.

Sarai Virden

Date: 5/27/2014 1:55:00 AM

Your poem takes me back to a time long ago in my life, truly a rich work of art. Your writing inspires! Hugs dear friend. <3

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/27/2014 7:54:00 AM

Thanks Sarai, hugs back.

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 5/25/2014 11:31:00 AM

This is profound Richard. I hope you do well in the said contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/26/2014 7:43:00 AM

Thanks Mustapha.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/25/2014 7:47:00 AM

very powerful Rick gl in contest it should do very well hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/25/2014 8:01:00 AM

Thanks Shadow, I hope she likes it.

Jan Allison

Date: 5/24/2014 2:02:00 AM

Very strong slam Richard I hope it does well. hugs Jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/24/2014 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Jan, hugs Rick

Joseph May

Date: 5/23/2014 9:27:00 PM

Very well penned ...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/24/2014 1:27:00 AM

Thanks Joseph

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 5/23/2014 7:20:00 PM

Richard, I would rate this a 7 if I new how, I never got a set of instruction on the Soup. help me

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/23/2014 7:26:00 PM

Just above where you typed in your message there is a rating box, click on the arrow and you can choose a rating. You have to add a comment to be able to rate a poem. once you have done both fill in the captcha and hit validate. Voila that is all there is to it. I'm glad you like my poem Jerry. Thanks

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/22/2014 4:40:00 PM

Most excellent Rich! And nice to know the man you are! Light 7 love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 7:16:00 PM

You are making me blush, thanks Debbie I appreciate your thoughtful comment.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 5/22/2014 6:37:00 AM

Another insightful write from you, my friend. "The bottom always determines what stays on top" This is so true, You have to make sure the foundation is rock solid or you start swaying, slowly crumbling.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 7:55:00 AM

Thanks Monterey.

Lena Emp

Date: 5/22/2014 3:33:00 AM

a words of hate, anger, and misery is flawlessly written. Indeed, words is like a double edges swords. You clearly express how you feel deeply and seeking for justice. You really express it well.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 7:56:00 AM

Thanks for visiting and commenting on my poem.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2014 4:10:00 PM

First, I want to thank you for your thoughtful comments on my recent posts, and now to read this poem!! wow, this is a deep one, and very wise too. I don't really see it as slam but the way her contest is set up, it's hard to do slam in a natural way. I just see this as a very intelligently written poem!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2014 5:51:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, what a nice compliment. I'm glag you like it.

Ken Carroll

Date: 5/21/2014 10:43:00 AM

Strong passionate write Richard..Best of luck my friend..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2014 5:52:00 PM

Thanks Ken.

Deborah Shiells

Date: 5/21/2014 9:58:00 AM

Best to you in the contest too Richard~

Deborah Shiells

Date: 5/21/2014 9:57:00 AM

Hi Richard, This my friend stopped me in my tracks and I couldn't move. It is one of the best writes I have laid my eyes on, in a long time. WOW.... Great poem. Thanks for sharing this powerful force of wording;~) Thanks for visiting me and leaving your kindness as always. Love and Peace, Deborah

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2014 6:04:00 PM

Wow, what a comment, you have made my day.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/21/2014 8:16:00 AM

THAT LAST LINE IS SO CLEVERLY WRITTEN! Oh..that last line really got to me! Very interesting slam poetry, Richard. You have reached into areas of your mind that I didn't know existed! Fantastic work. Good luck on the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2014 8:37:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, I was wondering if it was any good, over 100 reads and only six comments.