Richard Lamoureux Poet Free verse

Crumbling Pedestal

You rise above me on your lofty pedestal
Cracking your razored whip
Ordering my possibilities
Leaving your intricate patterns on my back
Red lace adorns your masterpiece

I chip at the base of your column
Choosing for your mighty to fall
You are unaware of your teetering 
Cracks adorn your insignificance
Your monument betrays you
True power lays waste to your beliefs
The bottom always determines what stays on top

Look into these eyes
See past your own disaster
My power resides within my compassion
I do not wish to rule your castle
Freedom lives beyond your gates

I was not born to be your enemy
Hate does not flow through these veins
Justice shall not be served by my blade
You instead scurry to the top of your rubble
Impale yourself with rusted sword
Fleeing your own salvation
You answer your ghosts
Delivered by you own injustice
No one left to mourn your passing
You believed you could go no lower
Unaware Hell would embrace you in serpent arms
After all you descended from your father
A fallen angel has no where else to fall


Verlena S. Walker's Slam Round 2 contest.

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Poet Destroyer A June 10, 2014 at 3:40 PM Richard, CONGRATULATIONS.... You sure slammed the slam.... Hugs... LINDA

Verlena S. Walker June 9, 2014 at 8:19 PM Congratulations on your win and thanks for supporting my slamming contest… Verlena

Jerry T Curtis June 2, 2014 at 6:47 PM Thanks Richard, I guess it's my blindness that prevents me from seeing. LoL

Scott Thirtyseven May 29, 2014 at 8:55 AM Tweet's away Richard Lamoureux May 29, 2014 at 9:54 AM Thanks Scott.

Scott Thirtyseven May 27, 2014 at 6:07 AM Best of luck in the competition, though I think you've got a great poem here. I've got more twitter followers now, I'd like to show them this if that's ok. Cheers Scott. Richard Lamoureux May 27, 2014 at 7:52 AM Hi Scott, I would be honored. I'm pleased you like it.

Sarai Virden May 27, 2014 at 1:55 AM Your poem takes me back to a time long ago in my life, truly a rich work of art. Your writing inspires! Hugs dear friend. <3 Richard Lamoureux May 27, 2014 at 7:54 AM Thanks Sarai, hugs back.

Mustapha Mohammed May 25, 2014 at 11:31 AM This is profound Richard. I hope you do well in the said contest. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2014 at 7:43 AM Thanks Mustapha.

Shadow Hamilton May 25, 2014 at 7:47 AM very powerful Rick gl in contest it should do very well hugs Richard Lamoureux May 25, 2014 at 8:01 AM Thanks Shadow, I hope she likes it.

Jan Allison May 24, 2014 at 2:02 AM Very strong slam Richard I hope it does well. hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux May 24, 2014 at 7:17 AM Thanks Jan, hugs Rick

Joseph May May 23, 2014 at 9:27 PM Very well penned ... Richard Lamoureux May 24, 2014 at 1:27 AM Thanks Joseph

Jerry T Curtis May 23, 2014 at 7:20 PM Richard, I would rate this a 7 if I new how, I never got a set of instruction on the Soup. help me Richard Lamoureux May 23, 2014 at 7:26 PM Just above where you typed in your message there is a rating box, click on the arrow and you can choose a rating. You have to add a comment to be able to rate a poem. once you have done both fill in the captcha and hit validate. Voila that is all there is to it. I'm glad you like my poem Jerry. Thanks

Debbie Guzzi May 22, 2014 at 4:40 PM Most excellent Rich! And nice to know the man you are! Light 7 love Richard Lamoureux May 22, 2014 at 7:16 PM You are making me blush, thanks Debbie I appreciate your thoughtful comment.

Monterey Sirak May 22, 2014 at 6:37 AM Another insightful write from you, my friend. "The bottom always determines what stays on top" This is so true, You have to make sure the foundation is rock solid or you start swaying, slowly crumbling. Richard Lamoureux May 22, 2014 at 7:55 AM Thanks Monterey.

Lena Emp May 22, 2014 at 3:33 AM a words of hate, anger, and misery is flawlessly written. Indeed, words is like a double edges swords. You clearly express how you feel deeply and seeking for justice. You really express it well. Richard Lamoureux May 22, 2014 at 7:56 AM Thanks for visiting and commenting on my poem.

Andrea Dietrich May 21, 2014 at 4:10 PM First, I want to thank you for your thoughtful comments on my recent posts, and now to read this poem!! wow, this is a deep one, and very wise too. I don't really see it as slam but the way her contest is set up, it's hard to do slam in a natural way. I just see this as a very intelligently written poem!! Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2014 at 5:51 PM Thanks Andrea, what a nice compliment. I'm glag you like it.

Ken Carroll May 21, 2014 at 10:43 AM Strong passionate write Richard..Best of luck my friend.. Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2014 at 5:52 PM Thanks Ken.

Deborah Shiells May 21, 2014 at 9:58 AM Best to you in the contest too Richard~

Deborah Shiells May 21, 2014 at 9:57 AM Hi Richard, This my friend stopped me in my tracks and I couldn't move. It is one of the best writes I have laid my eyes on, in a long time. WOW.... Great poem. Thanks for sharing this powerful force of wording;~) Thanks for visiting me and leaving your kindness as always. Love and Peace, Deborah Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2014 at 6:04 PM Wow, what a comment, you have made my day.

Eileen Manassian May 21, 2014 at 8:16 AM THAT LAST LINE IS SO CLEVERLY WRITTEN! Oh..that last line really got to me! Very interesting slam poetry, Richard. You have reached into areas of your mind that I didn't know existed! Fantastic work. Good luck on the contest. Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2014 at 8:37 AM Thanks Eileen, I was wondering if it was any good, over 100 reads and only six comments.

Matthew Anish May 20, 2014 at 11:09 PM Interesting fantasy work here! There is a song by the rock band King Crimson called "Fallen Angel". Peace & Love Matthew Anish Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2014 at 7:49 AM Good morning and thanks Matthew.

Sarai Virden May 20, 2014 at 10:06 AM A powerful piece Richard... Good luck! Richard Lamoureux May 20, 2014 at 10:20 AM Good morning and thanks Sarai.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 20, 2014 at 5:10 AM - A touching and beautiful written poem, Richard - Luck in contest !!! - Have a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux May 20, 2014 at 10:21 AM Thanks Anne Lise.