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written for Constance La France H form contest...

I used a rhyme scheme of ; abbaccdd effgge 10 syllables per line.

“In silent seclusion, we question the haunting whispers while losing air, craving just one last second within moving minutes of healing” Quote by Poet I'm lost between dusky dews of twilight, tethered to the tomb of withered flowers, trailing souvenirs within frosted hours, as stars wane like ghosts, stealing the skylight, splattering ink across a somber maze in hues of dreams and periwinkle haze, to paint crestfallen roses with reasons~ veiled behind verses of balmy seasons. But will the wind and waves merge in stillness; unleash elixirs to heal the broken, and voice the hurt that remains unspoken? Or am I to forever sail through sins~ across woeful seas of peridot pins, like a mere outcast, silenced by sickness…

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Bill Baker

Date: 10/4/2024 9:07:00 PM

Lovely poetry, my dear friend! Congratulations on your POTD. I hope you enjoyed your special day. (a month late) Poetry Soup just unlocked my account today, so I decided to go back and read the POTD's first. It was nice to read your poetry again. I will be adjusting to reading, commenting and posting over the next few weeks. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Constance La France

Date: 10/1/2024 7:04:00 AM

Ink, congratulations on your win in my Hybronnet contest, beautifully penned, love the quote, and congrats on POTD, Constance

Deb M

Date: 9/30/2024 9:28:00 AM

Awww such an enchanting poem with such incredible imagery sweet Ink! You have taken Poetry Soup by storm clever, gifted girl!! Belated Congratulations on POTD!! Debx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/21/2024 8:27:00 AM

Back with congratulations on your winning work. I am delighted to see it on the winners' list. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/16/2024 9:12:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on another win. Hooray!!! It was great to read your magical write/quote yet again. Have a blessed day with your win..................

Valsa George

Date: 9/16/2024 6:14:00 AM

A third time, I am into your remarkable poem. Hearty Congratulations dear Empress on your first placement.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/13/2024 7:24:00 AM

Great poem. Belated congrats on your POTD.

Marugu Mo

Date: 9/10/2024 1:35:00 AM

Belated congrats on your POTD honor. This is a fine fine poem!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/9/2024 5:47:00 AM

- Always impressive to read your poems ... congratulations on your p.o.t.d. Ink :) - hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 10:51:00 PM

So good to hear from you, thank you so very much always

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/9/2024 5:22:00 AM

Dearest Empress, This is a wonderful, deep introspection. I almost felt like I was on an exploration of inner turmoil and an emotional search for healing and belonging . You have truly inked a meloncholy journey through emotional darkness , questioning whether redemption and understanding are even possible. I think these lines say it all: "Or am I to forever sail through sins~ / across woeful seas of peridot pins, / like a mere outcast, silenced by sickness…" encapsulate the core message: a deep-seated fear of eternal isolation and the inability to overcome personal struggles. You know when a poem is great when it leaves you with a sense of unresolved longing, reflecting the complex nature of emotional healing and self-acceptance. An emotional FAV and a Big Congratulations on POTD. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 10:50:00 PM

Your comment left me speechless, how thoughtful and kind dear daniel, you always read and feel what you read. Thank you for that i am truly grateful always for your support and faves! Thank you so very much

Arlo Parker

Date: 9/8/2024 9:52:00 PM

A crafted piece POTD worthy, Inky. :o))

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 2:37:00 PM

Dear arlo, thank you so very much always good to hear from you

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/8/2024 8:42:00 PM

Dearest Inky, what a remarkable song of a wounded soul, a soul struggling throughout "peridot pins" wondering if the pain will ever end. Your imagery is stunning and the picture of your lost soul deeply touches me. This poem reaches down to touch a hidden place of pain and struggle. Congratulations on your POTD! So happy for you! Sending you blessings of healing "elixirs!" Samzy ~

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 2:35:00 PM

Awwn samszy! You are a feeler of words! Thank you always for feeling my words i am truly grateful for your kindness always!!!

Eve Roper

Date: 9/8/2024 7:03:00 PM

Beautiful poem, Ink, like always excellent work. Congratulations on POTD.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 2:20:00 PM

Thank you dear talented soul I appreciate your kindness truly

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 9/8/2024 5:53:00 PM

Dear Empress, Huge congratulations on your well-deserved POTD! Love the Hybronnet poetic form - you have used it beautifully matching your theme. Metaphors and Alliteration are amazing! I feel a surge of inspiration when I read your captivating poems. Love ~ Mala

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 2:10:00 PM

Dear mala its always so good to hear from you talented soul! Thank you so very much for your kind and generous comment. Im honored to receive your support

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/8/2024 4:47:00 PM

Dear Ink, there's so many emotions tangling within. Thoughts through the ' wind ' can heal the broken. You paint such vivid images with your words. This is tender and emotional, all at the same time. Congratulations my sweet friend, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 2:07:00 PM

Dear brandy, beautiful soul, you felt my words and im grateful for that truly thank you for leaving such a sincere comment im grateful

Paige Hind

Date: 9/8/2024 2:10:00 PM

Congrats on POTD! Well-deserved, dear Ink!

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:59:00 PM

Awwn thank you sweet paige you are so kind

Lise Clendening

Date: 9/8/2024 1:57:00 PM

Yikes! I’m playing out of my league. Congratulations!

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:55:00 PM

Dear Lise, nice to meet you, thank you for your visit and for your kind feedback truly appreciate it

Benjamin Bartley

Date: 9/8/2024 12:32:00 PM

Congrats on your POTD. I read the other comments by more qualified poets. I concur with them. Thanks for sharing.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:49:00 PM

Thank you for your visit and for your comment dear benjamin, i appreciate your support truly

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/8/2024 11:28:00 AM

congratulations on the win of your POD. enjoy your special day. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/9/2024 3:41:00 PM

Hello Ink Express, I like the last verse of your poem. You are welcome. I love your poetry. Hugs. Sending you the light. /Darlene/

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:46:00 PM

Thank you dear darlene I appreciate your visit and comment truly

Silent One

Date: 9/8/2024 11:08:00 AM

Your sonnet creates a vivid, but somber atmosphere through its imagery. Words like “dusky dews of twilight,” “withered flowers,” and “frosted hours” evoke a sense of decay and lost time. The imagery of “stars wane like ghosts” and “splattering ink” adds to the melancholic tone, suggesting a world where beauty and light are fading. Yo write angst and sorrow so well, this is a poem that many will relate to... It also has a lovely flow to it and I do like the different rhyme pattern you have used.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:44:00 PM

Thank you silent one for reading and for pointing out those lines and for leaving such an indepth analysis of my poem, truly you understand poetry and have been an influence poetically for me, in so many ways, thank you for inspiring me and shaping me in the realm of art, always! Grateful also for your constant support

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 11:10:00 AM

Congrats on POTD..

Jim Slaughter

Date: 9/8/2024 11:00:00 AM

Kudos, I E! This piece is pure poetry and an excellent selection for POTD.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:39:00 PM

Thats such a massive compliment dear jim, thank you for saying that as rhymes take time for me to do. I appreciate your kindness truly

Len Gasun

Date: 9/8/2024 9:12:00 AM

Extremely gorgeous my dearest poet friend Ink. Another masterpiece that blew me away. Big Congrats on this exquisite write and your well-deserved POTD! Thanks for sharing your exceptional talent with us always. God bless you abundantly and your writings. Hugs.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:32:00 PM

Dear len you are such a kind and generous soul, truly your comments made my day! Thank you so very much for reading two of my poems and for commenting so sincerely! Im truly grateful

John Lawless

Date: 9/8/2024 8:17:00 AM

...or am I to forever sail through sins...All aboard.....Beautiful write Ink ..that particular line had me mumbling..."DAMN RIGHT".....

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:27:00 PM

Gosh now i feel like i did something right. Thank you dear john, it means alot truly always whenever you leave your comments grateful

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/8/2024 8:03:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. What a magical write/quote. Have a wonderful day with your win........................

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:20:00 PM

Awwn thank you dear sweet paula I appreciate your constant support always

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/8/2024 7:43:00 AM

Dear Ink, soulful poet, your rhyme scheme provides a beautiful frame upon which you've built a deep, rich, thought-provoking poem. Such exquisite imagery like "as stars wane like ghosts, stealing the skylight" and "But will the wind and waves merge in stillness" leave me in awe of your expressive talent. Congratulations for POTD honors. Well-deserved! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ink Empress
Date: 9/9/2024 1:13:00 PM

Dear Susan Ashley, thank you, for being so kind and generous with your comments and i appreciate your thoughts and feedback wholeheartedly! Such a beautiful and uplifting comment. Sending you light always.