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Creepo Mortician Who Loved the Graveyard Shift

The lighting - it was over-bright above the table where she lay, her skin dead cold but lovely white. The lighting -it was over-bright, He loved work best alone at night. With corpses he could have his way. The lighting - it was over-bright above the table where she lay. Written June 19, 2016

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Date: 7/17/2016 7:57:00 PM
Very well written, if a judge can not write poetry how do you expect them to judge one?
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Date: 7/2/2016 5:52:00 PM
oh, this is a really creepy one, my friend - hope this was a really big winner
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Date: 6/29/2016 4:15:00 AM
This should have been high on the winners list. I still congratulate you on an excellent entry.
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Julia Ward
Date: 7/17/2016 9:14:00 AM
No, the title contained slang and was far too long.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/29/2016 9:08:00 AM
Richard , in this situation, that will only happen when pigs can fly!!!
Date: 6/27/2016 2:21:00 PM
Oh my and oh my and oh how creepy. I enjoyed this triolet! I've read so many I'm starting to get a Halloween feeling. CayCay
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Date: 6/24/2016 4:28:00 PM
Creepy for sure..I read your work and well I don't know what to say..LOL..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 6/23/2016 12:49:00 PM
"With corpses he could have his way" Wow! This sounds like a Vincent Price movie. Moo, ha, ha, ha, ha, HAH! Love it. Love you too, daver
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Date: 6/23/2016 10:06:00 AM
Haha, creepy poem. Have you ever read my poem the mortician? LoL. I wrote it for a group in a piping company. But, theirs was in Spanish. I post the English version on here... Can't wait to be alone with my mortician. LoL. Awesome poem. Skat
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Date: 6/23/2016 9:26:00 AM
Amidst the solemn dead of night. We're left to trust they do what's right. For most of us can't stand the sight. Just know that God see's in that light.
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Date: 6/22/2016 8:00:00 PM
Feels like a scary campfire story that frightens the dickens out of everyone! A flashlight, "over-bright", would make everybody scatter. Outstanding triolet, Andrea! Best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 6/22/2016 4:29:00 AM
This gives one the creeps. Wonder how those people go about their 'job'!!!
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Date: 6/21/2016 9:22:00 PM
Deep beautiful write Andrea
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Date: 6/21/2016 5:27:00 PM
Oh, Wow....someday maybe I'll be able to compete with that. I wasn't able to get my second line to meld so perfectly. I think a winner, Andrea. ...Fran
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Date: 6/21/2016 2:33:00 PM
- A deep and wonderful write, Andrea - Not an easy topic to write .... as an artist describes his work - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/21/2016 8:39:00 AM
Creepy, super creepy. You would make an excellent screen writer for horror or sci-fi.
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Date: 6/21/2016 7:38:00 AM
This is indeed creepy. Which contest is this for??
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Date: 6/21/2016 5:33:00 AM
Although the subject is eerie, poetry's light sooths the senses dear, Andrea!
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Date: 6/20/2016 10:38:00 PM
Agreed that this form works very well for this write. Accentuates the imagery.
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Date: 6/20/2016 8:24:00 PM
Is this from a movie, Andrea? If I recall I started watching a movie similar and changed it try not to watch things that are going to give me nightmares. Thank you so very much for reading my poem “Pleasure You To Walk The Night.” Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/20/2016 8:21:00 PM
yes kinda creepy Andie...I have a couple of friends who are morticians. I don't know how they do it.
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Date: 6/20/2016 8:14:00 PM
i'm usually not crazy about this form of poetry, andrea, but in this case it works very well. kudos to you for a great job!
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