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Crazy Love Under A Blue Moon

How is it possible, to be "awful" and "amazing" at the same time?
Please don't find me "annoying" as I ponder your "grim" and "gruesome".
There is something quite "delightful" about seeing you so "frightened"!
It is "fortunate" that we crossed paths, "finding" you is most certainly a sign.

For you I have erected a "monolith" here under the blue moon.
At its very centre I will look upon your pure white "oval" face.
I will know pleasure as I gaze into your stunning "opaque" eyes.
It is so very wonderful to see how you are "opening" up to me!

I will not "patronize" you for you will be the "pride" of my garden.
This is merely a simple "prelude" to our very precious time together.
I know removing your face will seem "vicious", but know l will be gentle.
If I'm kind you won't be "vindictive"! Instead you'll love me and I'll be "Victorious"!

For Shadow's "Make a Poem *2Contest."

I used quotes for the words because my iPad doesn't allow me to bold words on Poetry Soup. 

I wrote this piece from a serial killers perspective, I guess I've watched to many episodes of "Criminal Minds".

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 8/5/2016 7:30:00 AM
Hi Richard, an excellent write. This is a little different for you and it just goes to show your writing skill. I do love the content. You took us into the mind of your character and i was engrosed in the write from the beginning. Your dark side comes out well Richard. I love the way your character seems to talk so easily and the visions your words display are more chilling because of this. Ince again an excellent write Richard. Wishing you well in the contest....Mike. A seven for this gem.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/5/2016 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Mike, I thought I had done okay with this piece but it didn't cut the mustard as they say when it came time to judge it. I'm still pleased I got an interesting piece out of the contest inspiration.
Date: 7/22/2016 11:35:00 AM
Really dark, and it gives one the shivers, Richard. Very clever how you managed to insert the given words; I was going to have a go at it, but soon gave up! Regards // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2016 7:31:00 AM
Good morning and thanks for the visit Paul.
Date: 7/22/2016 9:24:00 AM
chilling under the moon, it brings out a disturbing darkness that is quite... alluring.. nicely done x
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/22/2016 10:40:00 AM
Thanks Casarah.;0)
Date: 7/19/2016 11:49:00 PM
....with a nice Chianti....fff fff fff fff...... Right, that's the sinister stuff out the way, Richard, get back to writing things that won't give me nightmares when I've had cheese. Well written, sir. Regards, Viv
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Date: 7/20/2016 9:00:00 AM
Thanks Viv, "Silence of The Lambs" is one of Anthony Hopkin's best movies. Mind you the second in the series was horrible. The series was redeemed with the "Red Dragon" offering, Kevin Norton was excellent. Thanks for visiting and commenting Viv.
Date: 7/19/2016 4:55:00 PM
Take off your face got me....Good write, Richard. Good luck in the contest. It is interesting to see the dark side coming through....at least in writing. ;) Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/20/2016 9:02:00 AM
It's good to mix things up from time to time. It's good to see you back. Hugs Rick.
Date: 7/19/2016 8:20:00 AM
wow you had to use all those words in your poem? That is no easy feat. I love the dark take on this, very creative ;) Great job, Rick. Thanks for popping in today, it's always nice to hear from you.
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Date: 7/19/2016 8:57:00 AM
My pleasure Becca!;0)
Date: 7/19/2016 4:55:00 AM
Fascinating writing that attracts attention in many ways dear, Richard!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2016 7:46:00 AM
Thanks Demetrios.
Date: 7/19/2016 4:38:00 AM
A very well written, dark poem, Richard. Best wishes for the contest. T.J
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Date: 7/19/2016 7:46:00 AM
Thanks Teppo.;0)
Date: 7/18/2016 9:06:00 PM
enjoyed this read xoxo peace and love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2016 7:46:00 AM
Thanks Aurore.
Date: 7/18/2016 3:31:00 PM
oh my goodness. Here I was thinking it was all symbolic. He literally TOOK the face!! YIKES> Very good job of it.
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Date: 7/19/2016 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 7/18/2016 12:46:00 PM
- A little different writing from you Richard, impressive and powerful - Very well done - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/19/2016 7:48:00 AM
Thanks and a big hug back Andrea.
Date: 7/17/2016 3:59:00 PM
Creative write, now I have an answer to the very first line! I am "awfully amazing!!!" ops or was that I am "amazingly awful" well I am sure its one of them!!! Cheers!
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Date: 7/19/2016 7:49:00 AM
Let's just go with straight amazing!
Date: 7/17/2016 1:19:00 PM
You certainly can get dark thoughts Well done and you get a 7 from me Hope you win the contest. Love Mom
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Date: 7/19/2016 7:50:00 AM
Thanks mom, love ya.