Crash

I  pace. Tension etching lines upon my face
How much longer must I wait?  
The clock ticks glumly in the hall
Time passes slowly, no quickly
Oh I don't know
My world moves in slow motion
Waiting for a call

The silence is oppressive
Shadows cast their pall upon the room
I sit, I stand, only to pace again
My heart beats with a quickened cadence
Why hasn't she called?
Why hasn't someone called?

Wait!   Was that the phone?
Yes. yes, I hear it
I rush to silence the urgent ring
Hello! Hello!
Yes, this is he
Yes, she is my daughter. 
Where is she?
Is she ok?  Please, is she ok?

Oh thank God, I've been so worried
I saw it on the news
I hoped, no prayed that she was not there
I didn't know what to do
I was afraid to leave
Are you sure she's ok?

Yes, of course
I'm on my way right now
Thank you, thank you for letting me know
She's not alone is she, is someone with her?
Good, that's good

I'm sorry, I forgot to ask your name
Are you a doctor, yes I thought you were
Will you be going back in to see her?
Would you tell her her dad loves her very much

I shrug my coat around a hollow body
Choke back tears of relief
My little girl is hurt, I need to hold her
A piece of me almost died tonight

 I don't have a daughter.  I wanted to write about an emotional situation
that I had not actually experienced to see if I could make the reader feel
the rush of emotions exhibited in the poem. Have no idea
if I succeeded.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 10/1/2011 8:19:00 PM
yes, you suceeded! Thanks so much for stopping by my writes. Light & Love
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Bob Quigley
Date: 10/2/2011 12:09:00 AM
Thank you Debbie
Date: 9/27/2011 11:31:00 PM
Bob, I'm here to give all my old contest winners a late congratulations. Sorry, I forgot to leave everyone a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read every entry more than 3 times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem.. Honestly I don't like my contest winners with out a quick congrats,.. thank you,..p.d. the late bloomer
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Date: 9/24/2011 6:03:00 PM
Congrats Bob on an outstanding win with this dazzling delight of twisted poetry luv.. oh good.
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Bob Quigley
Date: 9/25/2011 9:50:00 AM
Thank you Linda-Marie
Date: 9/24/2011 5:38:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with your twisted poetry Bob. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/25/2011 9:51:00 AM
Appreciate your stopping by Carol
Date: 9/24/2011 1:11:00 PM
A great job Bob. This happens to all of us sooner or later. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/24/2011 3:06:00 PM
Thank you Joyce
Date: 9/24/2011 4:31:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of P.D., Bob
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Bob Quigley
Date: 9/24/2011 10:32:00 AM
Thank you Dr Ram
Date: 9/13/2011 1:31:00 AM
i can imagine the racy feeling, bob... heart-stopping offering! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 9/13/2011 4:48:00 PM
Thank you nette
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