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Covetous

Is it a crime To pry apart rhyme Stitch lines, unhitched From native consequence To warily marry Unmetered time By forced remorse Unrehearsed In patchwork verse In my malaise My daydreams ablaze I long for eloquence... to drip, untripped From my lips The devil rides my prideful hide Chastise with whip and spur Damning the span Between who I am And who I wish I were. 3/6/20

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Line Gauthier

Date: 5/23/2020 9:58:00 PM

Awesome poem. Love it~ A FAVE for me.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/23/2020 7:26:00 PM

Creative use of words with multiple layers of thoughts! Congratulations on your win Michelle :)

John Hamilton

Date: 5/23/2020 1:28:00 PM

Loved this Michelle, very interesting your wordplay and use of rhyme, I think I made another mistake this should have ranked higher, sorry!

John Watt

Date: 5/19/2020 1:36:00 AM

Love your wordplay in this: "to warily marry", "untripped from my lips", "rides my prideful hide". As always, your excellent grasp of the nuances of language, and careful selection and placement of words make this a work of art. Is it ironic to be covetous of your poem "Covetous"? Another great ending, Michelle. Honestly, you hold your own with the best. You have every right to be proud of this, and all your poetry. Love this.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/13/2020 9:05:00 PM

I remember this one. Do be proud! xomo (not because I remember it, though that is a feet LOL)

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/2/2020 10:20:00 PM

I love the tempo and rolling phraseology in this one, not to mention the message and word use ... I'm not the biggest fan of the "battle rap" style of free verse and mixed form, but you have married the contexts and styles seamlessly here, and I love this! Going into my faves - thank you for steering me! :o) <3

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/5/2020 7:12:00 PM

This is a new kind of poetry for me, I am very grateful for your feedback!

Charlie Knowlton

Date: 3/30/2020 9:55:00 AM

Wish I could write this well…Very well penned free verse and rhyme.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/30/2020 4:06:00 PM

That is very flattering, thank you, Charlie!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/18/2020 1:05:00 PM

I love mixing styles of poetry, as long as my ending works out well - you have penned an absolute gem by doing this and your poem is quite unique and wonderfully eloquent. Blessings my friend, Jennifer.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/18/2020 10:40:00 PM

I am so appreciative of your kind words, thank you so much, Jennifer.

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/11/2020 9:04:00 PM

Wow! Your potent pen spills profound thoughts in the most creative way upon the page, Michelle. I love this, the dramatic feeling, the rhymes, the no rhymes and the theme. Eloquence has arrived as well as artistic beauty. Another Fav! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/11/2020 11:49:00 PM

Your effusive words warm my soul, I am touched you made this a Fave - thank you so much!

David Mchattie

Date: 3/10/2020 8:10:00 PM

Wise words indeed. You really had your creative hat on for this one. Have a great day.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/10/2020 11:47:00 PM

Thanks for commenting, David, appreciate it-

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2020 6:53:00 PM

a wonderful mixture of both free AND rhyme I spy in this one!! Fantastic.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/10/2020 1:39:00 PM

Appreciate your comment, Andrea, thank you very much-

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/9/2020 1:58:00 AM

Wow, a poetic gem, the theme and sentiment, your wealth here is an opulence of words, love your muse.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/10/2020 1:37:00 PM

Thank you so much, Harry!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/9/2020 1:43:00 AM

Very well written poem. I did not anticipate that ending, but I've shared those sentiments. My plans for who I want to be seem to be thwarted as well. Thanks for your visits.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/10/2020 1:37:00 PM

So glad for your visit and comment, Eileen-

John Watt

Date: 3/8/2020 10:52:00 PM

Some very rich free verse here, Michelle, with great internal rhymes providing a measure of cadence and focus. The struggle with the devil in the last 3 lines is bordering on Faustian. Outstanding write, a fav for me ~ John

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/9/2020 12:40:00 AM

I am so touched by your generous comment and the fave, it is very flattering!

Sandra Adams

Date: 3/8/2020 7:36:00 PM

love your train of thought and internal rhyme in this piece... that ending is powerful...great write Michelle :) hugs

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/9/2020 12:38:00 AM

Thanks, and hugs too :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/8/2020 9:14:00 AM

My pleasure to drop by. I appreciate your visit this morning. Hugs Rick. I enjoyed giving this one another read.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 6:54:00 PM

Double thanks for the double visit!

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 3/8/2020 7:53:00 AM

Back for more & to fave <3

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 6:52:00 PM

Seconds always welcome, especially from you - xo!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/7/2020 9:28:00 PM

Your rhyme is to die for. Superb, Michelle! A FAVE! Thanks, Gershon

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 12:28:00 AM

Your encouraging words always lift my spirits, thank you, gw!

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 3/7/2020 9:21:00 PM

I love this. Chewing on it.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 12:25:00 AM

I am glad to hear it, thank you!

Rico Leffanta

Date: 3/7/2020 1:22:00 PM

I do admire the thinking process shadowing your words! Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 12:27:00 AM

That is such a kind compliment, thank you! (Also hope you enjoy not having to change your clocks tomorrow!)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/7/2020 12:04:00 PM

This made me smile Michelle. I feel I have so much yet to learn about poetry. It keeps my interest and challenges me daily. I enjoyed this Michelle. xxoo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 12:22:00 AM

My poetry has grown so much since joining this website, I guess I'm greedy - thank you for commenting, Connie.

Jan Allison

Date: 3/7/2020 11:25:00 AM

thought provoking piece Michelle! I wish I was a better poet that's for sure but I have learned so much and am still learning:-) hugs jan xx

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/8/2020 12:20:00 AM

I was reading some poetry by Dorothy Parker recently and wished I could write like that, which led to this-

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/6/2020 11:35:00 PM

Enjoyed your poem, Michelle.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/7/2020 10:49:00 AM

Thank you, Line.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/6/2020 5:58:00 PM

Sometimes I wonder if we would like the person we wish to become. I like your thought provoking piece.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 3/6/2020 10:53:00 PM

That is an interesting question, isn't it? Thanks for stopping by!