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Words he formed. Shells, pebbles, sorted by color Straight grey lines Curved watery blue Rosy dots Sand dollar phrases drifting, floating, resting on the shore Gathered decorative patterns garland and seaweed Expressed feelings hand dug gully around his small world filled with salty water And he lay down safely on his island Awaiting the surf, the tide, pure white ripples of hope to wash away the pain Words he formed with his fingers folding air around simmering sun finally realizing his thoughts had meaning as nary a cloudy day could be seen since… He sent out his heart It flew for him Sent out his soul, surfing in rhythmic coastal stanzas lapping a lazy shore measuring the distance beyond a vertical eclipse where water meets air and the sky merges with his dreams With eyes closed his horizontal form sails through time closing chapters and opening pages, dog-eared memories in numerical order At the count down of 5 he lands ashore 4 drapes his sea-green garments around self 3 gathers dollars, dignity 2 opens his eyes 1 thanks his therapist for the session 0 leaves, with a sense of regret. *** June 16, 2017 Copyright © Chris Green and Darren White

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Date: 6/24/2017 3:27:00 PM
Great write you two, visually stunning, and awesome read, loved the ending brought it all together, was seemless, great collab guys!
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Darren White
Date: 7/1/2017 7:00:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment on the poem. We love this too,it has that unexpected end that indeed ties loose ends together :)
Date: 6/23/2017 1:03:00 AM
my goodness!!! too good!!!but that is expected when you two geniuses have paired.I'm envious of the concept.lol.
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:31:00 PM
Hey Miraj, good to see you :) And thanks!
Date: 6/22/2017 8:05:00 PM
Massively creative and wondrously beautiful in its entirety my friends. Bravo to you both on this awesome piece, this is a true gem and a free verse fav, that gleams brilliantly...
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:50:00 AM
Robert, thhank you so much my friend :) for your wonderful words.
Date: 6/22/2017 6:16:00 PM
I want some of that, whatever it is you guys are taking. Sounds a lot like an acid trip:) I think:) Muse on, Poets. A fun read from you and Chris. Are you holding him hostage?
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:49:00 AM
LOLOL Daniel. Is coffee good enough? Yes, I'm holding him hostage, would you let your muse roam free?
Date: 6/22/2017 5:02:00 PM
This is simply stunning; the shift in imagery between one stanza to the next is indeed outstanding - full of wealth and richness! My favourite is Stanza six! Best, Ligella
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:48:00 AM
Thank you Ligella :) Chris will be pleased with your choice for stanza 6!
Date: 6/22/2017 3:41:00 PM
Very otherworldly cool collab, Darren and Chris. Excellent prose used to connect the two planes of reality. Creative and thought provoking poetry. Splendid use of imagery as well. Love always.
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:31:00 AM
It's different, isn't it Freddy? I like this one a lot.
Date: 6/22/2017 2:51:00 PM
Very cool gents
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Darren White
Date: 6/23/2017 12:31:00 AM
Thanks Tim :)
Date: 6/22/2017 2:32:00 PM
Amazing poem. Really neat collaboration. I enjoyed reading this. Congratulations to the both of you! :)
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Darren White
Date: 6/22/2017 2:39:00 PM
Thank you Heidi, I loved it too :)
Date: 6/22/2017 1:00:00 PM
Wow. Quite a journey this write. Well done you two xomo
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Darren White
Date: 6/22/2017 1:35:00 PM
Thanks mo :) We enjoy writing together :)
Date: 6/22/2017 12:53:00 PM
OMG, this is one of the most creative of art... so beautiful guys, I like it A LOT :) this is why I haven't seen any new one from Chris because he's been collaborating ;)
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Darren White
Date: 6/22/2017 1:31:00 PM
Yeah Akkina, it took him a long time before he had folded all those pages ;) Thanks for liking our poem :)

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