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For the contest sponsored by constance la france

Cosmic Chaos

“Special are the ones that see beyond  veiled verses, 
   behind violet smiles, so much is spoken in silence, where cosmic chaos 
 are scattered amidst the twinkling constellation cracked into seething seas of raw madness” 

I remember how I bathed
in the brilliant hue
of your silent shadows, 
swirling in symphony 
unscathed, across 
silvery nights, as I decided 
to slowly place 
my trust again upon 
kismet shooting stars~
perfumed with sins,
ferrying the sacred key
to my moonstruck
heart from afar.
But the gleaming rays
of celestial glows,
burnt into steel and dust,
guiding where your drizzling~
sharpened knife flows,
across my bleeding canvas
like a poetic downfall,
streaming crystal
tears upon us
to carve the edges
of unread chapters
with solemn epitaphs.

If only they could 
feel the veiled truth behind 
my eyes that speak 
volumes, misunderstood
in vague dialects, echoing 
through murky skies, 
losing faith in humanity 
within a hidden retreat~
as this world has taught 
us raven phases
of lunar secrets
from somber tunes
of affection through 
torment and deceit. 

Yet time knew what 
my mind couldn’t see,
flickering faith
seizing seconds few,
my lyrical haven finding me,
where dreams stew,
setting my rhymes free,
for I’ve learnt the art
of forgiving every neon lining,
scattered along seraphic
spheres beyond reach, 
colliding cosmically 
with implicit chaos,
oblivious to the wicked
tumbleweeds
of desire in wrath. 
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Miller Avatar
April 13, 2024 at 9:19 AM
Beautiful and captivating, congratulations
La France Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 2:51 PM
Ink, congratulations on your win in my contest with this exceptional poem, I like the quote too, hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 10:56 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! Your "Veiled" is a powerful write/quote. Some cannot see/some cannot feel... Have a blessed day writing away...........
George Avatar
April 4, 2024 at 11:04 PM
"But the gleaming rays of celestial glows, burnt into steel and dust, guiding where your drizzling~ sharpened knife flows, across my bleeding canvas" Trust and betrayal are a constant theme in your poems. It is a changeless theme in the life of human beings too. You alone can paint it in such deep shades. We are caught in the maelstrom of emotions. Your chosen metaphors are so powerful that we too feel the agony of betrayal so deeply. Every poem of yours is a masterpiece. We cannot but applaud your poetic prowess, dear Empress.
George Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 4:39 PM
Times knows far too much. I loved every line. "I remember how I bathed in the brilliant hue of your silent shadows." What a beautiful imagery this has. Cheers, dear Ink for always writing so impeccably.
Kerr Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 4:23 PM
Hello Ink Empress, I am overwhelmed by the ethereal elegance of this piece. Your capacity for creating one magnum opus after another compels deep admiration. You have created a mesmerising whirlpool of deep reflection, poignant themes sensitively crafted, and rivers of heavenly imagery. Peerless perfection. Deep gratitude for your kind review of Echoes Of A Shady Past and your congratulations Much appreciated Howard
Schatz Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 11:01 PM
Again, your poem is immense Ink Express. It evocates, I'm not sure what exactly, but something deep, mysterious, and powerful. You have a hellava gift... "phases of lunar secrets from somber tunes of affection through torment and deceit"
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:34 PM
Thank you so very much robert so true somethings are sheer mystery. Grateful for your support
One Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 8:08 AM
Your poem is a captivating journey through the complexities of trust, vulnerability, and resilience. We have all been here.. haven't we? It hurts when people let us down.. The imagery is vivid and evocative, painting scenes of celestial beauty contrasted with the sharp edges of pain and betrayal. The use of celestial imagery, such as "kismet shooting stars" and "celestial glows," adds a mystical quality to the narrative, highlighting the interplay between fate and human experience. The comparison of light and darkness, trust and betrayal, is skilfully woven throughout the poem. The poem grapples with the duality of human nature, acknowledging both the capacity for love and connection, as well as the harsh realities of disappointment and loss.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:36 PM
Thank you you really did grasp the little and hidden nuances flowing within and captured the emotions in the most finest tone. Grateful for your support always
Gentile Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 7:35 AM
Intuitive gifts are indeed rare Ink Empress! You have so charismatically crafted through intensely beautiful lines the disappointment at such scarcity. Your work is always so intriguing and begs contemplation which is also a rare gift!
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:36 PM
Awwn thank you so much dear nuke: always grateful for your support
Pandit Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 6:43 AM
Your quote at the top spells the essence of this poem, my friend. Powerfully expressive and introspective thoughts take the reader on a journey through aches and joys of hearts and minds. --But the gleaming rays of celestial glows, burnt into steel and dust, guiding where your drizzling~ sharpened knife flows, across my bleeding canvas---you always reach the depth, Ink.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:40 PM
Thank you so very much dear vijay, you always feel my poems and are so sincere with your comments, im forever grateful for that
Beaufort Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 3:27 AM
IE, I think communication can be difficult and those of us who are sensitive and perhaps even shy can suffer a lot of hurt. Those who are blunt can cause a lot of hurt too. I'm thinking you are saying this poetically with such beauty and images that take me to the heavens and back. I don't know how you come up with these images (which are wonderful) and which take me to a different place than I usually can go. The emotions of hurt are so difficult to deal with. I am actually learning a lot by reading on this site how some of us deal with this successfully.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:41 PM
Ah you are always so thoughtful with how you leave feedback, can tell you read and feel the words before leaving your comment: thank you so much for always being so supportive
Buhagiar Avatar
April 1, 2024 at 2:50 AM
Considering the subject, it is very deep, involving repentance and forgiveness. So many need that attitude. I love your powerful message that should begin with myself and flow to others. May the earth receive such light.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:48 PM
Thank you so much dear victor so true and well said
Herrick Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 9:27 PM
The chaotic shades that strobe of a deathly way of living leads to a product of turmoil and must be cured between faith and forgiveness for one learning to love themselves again but in a murderius and adulterous world of neon packaging and misapprooriated effect ions. Wisdom must surface in the dusty machinery of re awakened hope to dream again. In the serenity of letting those distracting tumbleweeds pass you by. Tempirary temotations of learning to fly in this desert casino of the by and by.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:53 PM
What a profound comment this is dear jude. Im so very gratEful for your sincere and kind support. Thank you so very much always
Greenhough Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 9:05 PM
Your poem has great flow and dynamic rhetoric . The message of forgiveness quickens the pulse.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:57 PM
Awn thank you dear hilda always
Hind Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 6:25 PM
Powerful- so much depth it makes me question myself, beautiful writing, dear Ink
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:57 PM
wwn thank you sweet paige
Dietrich Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 1:47 PM
Your message in inked in profundity and beautiful imagery. I especially loved the last stanza, how you tied it all together, Ink.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:33 PM
Awn thank you always sweet andrea you are so kind im grateful
Poet Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 12:24 PM
Dear Ink! The intricacies of relationships and the quest for faith in an uncertain world are reflected in your poem's exploration of trust, destiny, forgiveness, and self-discovery. The use of metaphor and strong imagery effectively portrays the path toward self-acceptance and inner serenity. Beautiful and mysterious, your choice of words like "brilliant hue," "moonstruck heart," and "veiled truth" evokes these feelings. "Streaming crystal tears" and "flickering faith" are two examples of the alliteration that gives the poem its melodic tone. Enjambment makes the sentences flow smoothly, while personification, symbolism, and imagery all add to a vivid and moving story.
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:28 PM
Awn this is such a heartfelt and sincere comment thank you so very much dr sotto
DiMino Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 12:01 PM
"If only they could feel the veiled truth behind my eyes that speak volumes, misunderstood in vague dialects" -- Beautiful, very spiritual poetry. Magnificent poetry in fact! Only God knows us as we truly are...as we continually deny self and relationship. Blaming the universe for our unfaithfulness. Unfaithfulness to the innate poetry of our being. We are lyrics striving to be fully heard...rhythms of unseen values and times infinite yet to be expressed. No accident that much of the bible reads like poetry~ Poetry, the voice of spirit. You get a FAV!
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:24 PM
Wow what a deep and soulful comment, i am truly grateful for your indepth analaysis as well as the fave: thank you so very much
Parker Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 8:30 AM
To feel again, to trust again to understand that life is a series of choices, to feel free from the emotional burdens of life again is to be reborn...such is life
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:21 PM
What a deep comment dear Frederick, thank you so very much
Rhymes Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 8:29 AM
So much emotions … love it .
Empress Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 12:21 PM
Awn thank u dahlin
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