Sotto Poet Poet Other

Conventional Framework

the mirror split
within the look
of sight
the aptest
share was near
snags come from
              prognosticated 

I see it strew
like ice melting
yet it was vivid
& heart 
was sobbing 
from my 
caught 
             metacarpus

where I drove
the staring
fragment i
turned it to
attempt & stop
the red
             drippings

1st place contest winner 

Written: May 10, 2022

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE without grammatical symbols the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and respond thus making the form a two way interplay and often a unique interpretation by the enigma so derived

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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L Milton Hankins June 7, 2022 at 5:36 PM Frankly, this makes no sense to me whatsoever. I suppose "to each his own" but this is simply not for me. L Milton Hankins June 7, 2022 at 7:07 PM I respect your opinion, Lasaad, but it is meaningless drivel to me. That's all I'll say at this point. "Organic form" - exactly what do you mean by this? Educate me. Sotto Poet June 7, 2022 at 6:39 PM Milt, I respect your opinion, but I think you should try it. It's the most revolutionary poetry style, and it's enjoyable to create. We don't consider the reader's reaction whether writing in rhyme or free poetry; we just convey our sentiments. We intend to keep the reader interested and thinking about a solution in this organic form; for further technical help, you might refer to the poet: Brian Strand. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

Caren Krutsinger May 16, 2022 at 12:51 AM Congrats on your top win! Very well done!

David Kavanagh May 14, 2022 at 2:28 PM Congratulations on your top win Lasaad, you really can turn your metacarpus to any poetry form, I’m a bit like Valsa a lot of this form goes over my head, I will leave it to the experts, and your the main man in this field, cheers David

Valsa George May 13, 2022 at 8:44 PM Back with Congratulations on your top win dear friend ! This esoteric write contains within it gems of thought!

William Kelii Kekaula May 13, 2022 at 1:40 PM Confessedly challenging, albeit, intriguing, Lasaad, as the verse solidly cascades as you've noted. My compliments on your top win my friend, Aloha~William

Valsa George May 11, 2022 at 9:01 AM This sounds complicated and too high for my grasp ! My simple brain cannot comprehend it ! Sotto Poet May 11, 2022 at 9:09 AM It's not as complicated as you think, Valsa. It's actually like subdividing the poem into shards of metaphors. You mention a part of the image and let the reader grasp and imagine what's behind it.

Demetrios Trifiatis May 11, 2022 at 8:25 AM Interesting, my friend, Lasaad but... new to me! Blessings!

Victor Buhagiar May 11, 2022 at 3:21 AM Personally I prefer punctuations. But to each his own.