Contrails Haiku

abandoned orchard pink buds adorn weathered branch contrails across sky

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Gert W. Knop

Date: 2/22/2011 4:35:00 AM

Enjoyed the read of this Haiku, Barbara! What a picture, an abandoned garden and above a blue sky with the white contrails of planes....Nice one...Gert

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/20/2011 12:58:00 AM

this is gonna sound stupid, but I don't know what contrails means! anyway, it sounds splendid!! Is it just like lines across the sky? If so, what a wonderful picture this makes.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/18/2011 4:34:00 PM

excellent haiku! ---abandoned orchard title..no need for another line ;) Light & Love

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/17/2011 11:27:00 AM

I like the thought of the "buds bursting in air," like the contrails of the rockets in our national anthem. Still, there is sadness that this orchard has been abandoned and there is no one around to appreciate the beauty. Excellent haiku, dear LNC. Love, Carolyn

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/15/2011 3:35:00 PM

This haiku appears to be describing an orchard of peach trees. It is written well.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/15/2011 6:19:00 AM

Sounds like a morning that says spring will soon be here...Sara