Colorless, Naked and Numb

this cooler air seems to mottle the trees
spinning leaves like my thoughts in winded dance
befalling trails of tears on crimson breeze
as they fall grounded beneath the oak's stance

i hear the crumble of death beneath me
as i shiver within its strident gasp
chaotic roots reach out beneath its quay
piquing me with tones of your final rasp

dubious mind much like bare branches snaps
within the disdain utter from dead lips
as it echoes remorse in lifeless slaps
freeing only my body from its grips

my soul stands colorless, naked and numb
mirroring the trees in this autumn glum


December 27, 2019
Entered into Best Sonnet of 2019 Contest
Sponsored by John Hamilton



September 30, 2019

*Quay is pronounced as Ke
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Radhakrishna Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 7:43 AM
Congrats on your win!!Beautiful as always!!
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 7:47 AM
Thank you so very much Krish.... hugs
Hawkens Avatar
January 3, 2020 at 9:33 AM
Congrats on your win. As always. You've painted this canvas beautifully with your words.
Adams Avatar
January 3, 2020 at 11:19 AM
Thank you so much JC for your kind words... hugs :)
Roper Avatar
January 2, 2020 at 11:11 PM
Congratulations on your win in John Hamilton, Best Sonnet Contest. Hugs Eve
Adams Avatar
January 3, 2020 at 11:18 AM
Thank you so much Eve... hugs :)
Green Avatar
January 2, 2020 at 12:00 PM
Congratulation my friend on your top finish in this contest. I loved this poem the first time I read it and again just now. Amazing Sandy.
Adams Avatar
January 2, 2020 at 5:02 PM
Thank you so very much Chris.... i think this is my best sonnet... well regular one... they are much easier than the italian ones... hugs :)
Ligon Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 8:10 PM
You preformed this form gorgeously! Poetic hugs and congrats!
Adams Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 8:33 PM
Thank you so much... trying to work on these forms...i still struggle in some of them... hugs
Scars Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 1:54 PM
great sonnet sweet Sandy! I am so happy for you :) Happy New Year to yo and yours. Hugs from across the miles...x:-)-luloo
Adams Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 7:58 PM
Thank you so much my friend... Happy New Year to you...hugs :)
Hamilton Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 1:12 PM
You know how much I love this poem, congrats Sandy worthy of a shared best sonnet 2019!
Adams Avatar
January 1, 2020 at 7:57 PM
Thank you so much John... I didn't have many sonnets to choose from...and this is my best to date... :) Happy New Year.... hugs
Green Avatar
October 9, 2019 at 9:10 AM
I knew this one would be at the top. Beautifully done my friend. Congrats on your first place win
Adams Avatar
October 9, 2019 at 9:31 AM
Thank you so much for your kind words..I appreciate you my friend :) hugs
Rodgers Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 7:52 AM
Congrats on your win! A very cold view of autumn with wonderful images and as required no colour celebration.
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 9:19 AM
Thank you so much DW, i dislike autumn, it brings death to the trees and grass, and everything is colorless and bare...then the winter bite comes....
Cornish Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 7:12 AM
Your mind works magical analogies and your pen brings them to life.
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 9:18 AM
Thank you so much Craig...my mind never stops churning thoughts...as a child when i was hurting, the beauty of nature was my comfort...i think i learned how to make emotions blend into the beauty at an early age... hugs :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 12:45 AM
This is fabulous and so unique Sandra. Congratulations on your wonderful deserving first placement! xxoo
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 9:16 AM
Thank you so much my friend :) hugs
Mcintosh Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 9:02 PM
Yay... You won... Congratulations and love to you, Gina
Adams Avatar
October 7, 2019 at 9:21 AM
Thank you so much my friend...hugs and blessings :)
Sands Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 2:28 PM
Congratulations for your top win Sandra! :)
Adams Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 4:14 PM
Thank you so much Heidi :) hugs
Hamilton Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 1:34 PM
Another amazing write Sandy, you made it to the top again, you know what I like!
Adams Avatar
October 6, 2019 at 1:56 PM
wow thank you John, I am honored to be on the podium with talent like Greg... thank you so much for hosting another wonderful contest and a great win....your topics always speak to me, and you write melancholy like me, i think we could do a great collaboration too... hugs :)
Pandit Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 6:42 AM
Excellent my friend--emotive at its best --enjoyed the read..this has to win at the TOP.
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 9:32 AM
Thank you Vijay, your vote of confidence and kind comments always brighten the day... hugs :)
Bangalee Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 3:36 AM
dubious mind like bare branches snaps/ within the disdain utter from dead lips/// beautiful poetic expression
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 9:31 AM
Thank you so much Mahtab :)
Mcintosh Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 10:37 PM
Wonderful writing... Love it. God Bless you and I hope you win
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 9:30 AM
Thank you Regina, what a sweet thing to say... God bless you :) hugs
There Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 10:28 PM
Lifeless limbs on both of you... you depicted that so well ~ hugs
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 9:23 AM
Thank you so much HT...i struggle with forms like this one :) hugs
Green Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 5:18 PM
Perfect. The somber feelings your poem expressed flow sadly like the dark dreary days of autumn. This poem reads in slow motion, it's cadence is smooth and easy but it's thought languish in the shadows of that old oak losing it's dressing for the rest of the year. If this was suppose to have us longing for springtime, it surely did the trick. Beautifully done my friend. Best wishes in the contest
Adams Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 6:36 PM
Thank you my friend, your words lifted my spirits...though october is my time of birth, this time of year to me signifies death...the flowers, trees and grass will all be colorless and bare...i am already longing for spring... hugs :)
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