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'collapsing Walls'

He walked away with a smile on his face The only sign of the break up were her tears He had it all planned at his pace It was the realism of her biggest fear The only sign of the break up were her tears Piece by piece the wall collapsed It was the realism of her biggest fear Once again her heart enclosed Piece by piece the wall collapsed He had it all planned at his pace Once again her heart enclosed; He walked away with a smile on his face *my first time trying a Pantoum after being challenged.. Hopefully it is up to standard :D* Thanks for the gauntlet Taz :) 070920112025

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Date: 11/29/2011 1:56:00 AM
Great ending. Really enjoyed : )
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Date: 9/27/2011 9:53:00 AM
I am stopping by your wonderful poetry today to thank you for your kind comments on my writing Wilma. Hope you have an inspiration filled week. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/9/2011 2:26:00 PM
Like what you did here with your first time try. As for the collaspsing walls I think that guy deserves a piece of his own medicine. ha ha. love phyl
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Date: 9/8/2011 12:56:00 AM
so did Taz challenge you to this. that was cool of him becuase he inspired this nice pantoum from you then. I like it, Wilma. And the way you show the contrast between the man and woman in this pantoum.
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Date: 9/7/2011 7:19:00 PM
I'd love to smack that smile right off his face. Funny how a verse can conjure up so much emotion in the reader. You did a good one my dear!
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Date: 9/7/2011 5:46:00 PM
I love how took this form and made it your own... Sensational piece of poetry... Love Michael
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Date: 9/7/2011 4:32:00 PM
oh the emotion Wilma..and the Pantoum form seems to emphasize the depth of the emotion in every line repeated luv..Taz is an inspiration on PS.. glad he has returned my friend..lovely one..where is my hanky?
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Date: 9/7/2011 3:38:00 PM
YEEAHHHH!!!You have done it Wilma.Love it!This is your 1st one and this is great....kash......oh yes...lfde.
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