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Voices bottled up, far away…out of reach I still hear them, echoing in my brain I try not to believe the fear—the disdain So long I have avoided their gaze, But here they are again, at a distance— All ablaze! I toughened my shell that night, From the amplified words drenched in my hands I cried so many tears for no words came Unionized by grief and frustration, How could I ever embrace such abandon? I thought I could recognize by the fruits As they were right before my eyes But within their very cores, Tears blur the rotten cries The very words and deeds unspoken—untold The very truth you tamper and mold As fists clench—as confused youth look on! He fashioned you with gold! I hear gleeful harsh warnings—poetry—of the collateral damage of my brothers Running up and down the streets—rampant to get at others I try to see the beauty in every single shade But now, all I can do is pray Voices bottled up, far away…out of reach I still hear them, echoing in my brain I try not to believe the fear—the distain So long I have avoided their gaze, But here they are again, at a distance— All ablaze! All I can do I can do is pray All I must do is pray As the fumes of the anger light up today Destroying all trapped inside Splitting the atoms of our faith I promise you will fall!!! How gleeful you all are! I promise the unity is all a dream Nothing’s like it seems Inside, I feel blood boiling, but I cringe Refusing to add to the chaos My voice box bludgeoned by their fears Replaced with stranger’s tears Too long have I avoided my gaze In the mirror showing nothing but the hardened Unable to recognize the rot within I stay…I pray Until true words heal and answers free And the rest I leave in the hands that see Here they are again Within me, around me Surrounding me Frozen—cold… unfeeling, BOLD. He fashioned us with gold He fashioned us with gold

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/10/2014 12:47:00 PM
The images you have put together are poetically and insanely explosive. I specifically like the lines Too long have I avoided my gaze In the mirror showing nothing but the hardened Unable to recognize the rot within".
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Date: 3/1/2014 11:01:00 AM
So brilliant I am speechless. One of my favorites.
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Date: 2/28/2014 7:49:00 PM
I miss your words on here, Laura. This was utterly astounding, w/that touch of poignant destruction. Damn brilliant job!
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Date: 2/28/2014 12:26:00 PM
An obvious master of metaphor and simile. Excellent use of imagery and diction. Bravo, Poet!
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Date: 2/28/2014 11:17:00 AM
Absolutely brilliant. Thanks for making my day. I have found it pleasurable to always begin the weekend with Poetrysoup because poets like you and poems like this do not disappoint. Have a lovely weekend
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Date: 2/24/2014 7:11:00 PM
Laura...Love your use of metaphors, very well written..kudos..kj
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Date: 2/18/2014 8:50:00 AM
Metaphorical magnificence! This was quite the ride.
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Date: 2/17/2014 1:36:00 AM
A wild message hete Laura, replete with emotiona l contrasts. I can really get into that expression and all its character,"Frozen cold, unfeeling bold...spliting atoms of faith...he fashioned us with gold..." reminds me confused and used love. J.A.B.
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Date: 2/16/2014 4:39:00 PM
A gaze into the mirror is like looking into the future and the past all at the same time. Scary and emboldening. I love this one. Your amazing as always! ~Kilmer
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Date: 2/14/2014 6:36:00 PM
Nice descriptive write which was long, but worth the read. Just correct the misspelled word in your third line: What you have as "distain" is correctly spelled "disdain".
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/15/2014 7:29:00 PM
Thanks for catching that, Robert! ~Laura
Date: 2/11/2014 1:59:00 AM
Wow Laura! No words! You do angst very well. I love your word association - fruits, rotten tears, the hands that see. Avoidance is a form of copping mechanism so I heard - but I think the person who can look at their image and recognize their reflection is one who shows immense strength - very often we only see the mirror image, distorted and peripheral. Excellently penned!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/13/2014 4:16:00 PM
Vicky, thank you so much for your thorough review. I very much appreciate all that you say and thank you for visiting. I agree wholeheartedly with you. ~Laura

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