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Even the pang that duskfall leaves me is a slow fire in itself that burns like oil on my pores till the falling of another night, when once again aloneness steals the luster in the sky to burn within my heart like a treacherous destiny, burying me from adventurous trails. I should have known... there is no real dream between fate's seemingly empty promises and the runaway moon's brief goodbyes: With this damn thought; life is a play, a flavor bitter as an aftertaste on my tongue when a groan washes tears away... never shading me from this coal of isolation that I am gone, done unto dusk's remains. -------------- Contest of Edward Ibeh: Misery 01/01/2019

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Heidi Sands

Date: 1/5/2019 8:18:00 PM

Congratulations for your win Nette! :)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 1/5/2019 8:17:00 PM

Thanks for taking part in my contest, Nette!:-) Congratulations on your win! Very well-written!

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/5/2019 6:53:00 PM

Congrats on your win, nette. Well penned.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/2/2019 5:35:00 PM

Brilliant writing Nette! I hope this awesome poem gets high honors! Blessings for a wonderful new year my friend! : ) xxoo

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/1/2019 6:35:00 PM

Your introspection of such sadness and angst is expressed so beautifully in dark dramatic fashion, Nette. Your imagery of misery is compelling and profound. Best wishes for a win and my warmest wishes to you for a happy new year.. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 1/1/2019 1:14:00 PM

I have a sweet aftertaste of your exquisite write! Such a deep pain emanates from a profound perception.. Such a meticulous description and impressive imagery rendered by a masterful pen, a diver into poetry beauty! A great joy to read despite the tone of bitterness and ache.. A FAV and a win! Happy New Year and blessings dear nette.

Joseph May

Date: 1/1/2019 12:54:00 PM

Well written Nette...I especially liked the 2nd stanza...Happy 2019!..

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 1/1/2019 11:08:00 AM

Thick with gloom, and very compelling. Poetry at its finest.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/1/2019 10:33:00 AM

A brilliant write Nette, dark and sombre. Good luck, I'm sure this will place well. Tom.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/1/2019 9:51:00 AM

This is great writing Nette, look like another winner to me!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/1/2019 9:40:00 AM

A superb write as always, Nette. These lines say it all: there is no real dream between fate's seemingly empty promises and the runaway moon's brief goodbyes. A winning poem you wrote my friend.

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/1/2019 9:29:00 AM

Wow! Well written and excellent submission for the contest. Happy New Year Nette ! :)

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2019 9:23:00 AM

Damn... now this poem is emotively sad right from the first line... Excellent entry for the contest..