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Clouds Haiku

zephyr winds blowing
clouds kiss gently when they meet
romance in the air

Contest: Poetry Writing#1
Sponsor Broken Wings
Jan Allison
12th December 2015


I had never written a haiku before joining poetry soup in February 2014. I love the traditional format of 5, 7, 5 syllables and the fact so few words can create such wonderful images in your mind.

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/4/2016 4:59:00 PM

Hi Jan, well i don't need to tell you that i Love Haiku. I still don't know what it is but they do pull me in. This is an excellent Haiku, tightly tied together in the true form of 5,7,5. It gives the whole vision. The Haiku that sings Love. A seven and a fave. Your pen still flows gold Jan....Vladislav.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/4/2016 5:06:00 PM

Thanks Vlad I have such a smile on my face seeing you back 'home' hugs jan xx

Kelli White

Date: 12/30/2015 8:37:00 AM

Love it. Clouds kissing

Jan Allison
Date: 12/30/2015 12:09:00 PM

Thanks Kelli I wrote this about 4 months ago was waiting for a suitable contest to enter it into:-) hugs JN XX

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 12/20/2015 6:19:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan, excellent haiku. Love the zephyr image used with romance.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/20/2015 7:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Reason:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 12/19/2015 5:36:00 AM

Jan this is lovely and majestic. Congratulations on your well deserved win!!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/20/2015 7:31:00 AM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/18/2015 10:20:00 PM

Wow great take with this lovely form Jan.. I myself entered into contest with a haiku..i adore this form.. Congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/20/2015 7:31:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma I wrote this about August time have been waiting for a suitable contest to enter it in:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 12/18/2015 9:31:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your sweet win Luv **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 9:32:00 PM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/18/2015 9:16:00 PM

Jan, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN.... LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 9:18:00 PM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 12/18/2015 9:15:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 9:18:00 PM

Thanks Jospeh:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/18/2015 9:06:00 PM

A very lovely Haiku, Jan. You have mastered this form here and in many of your poem. Congrats on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 9:08:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I have learned so much from wonderful people like you on the site who freely give their help and advice and encourage me to write to the best of my ability:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/18/2015 4:16:00 PM

awesome picture to go with this little gem, Jan. Big congrats to you. (love the word play in final line)

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 4:18:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea I really value your opinion on this as I never know if I have actually written a proper haiku:-) hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/18/2015 3:09:00 PM

As one who is NOT good with this form, I appreciate a good haiku--know one when I see one. This one's good. Congratulations--Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 3:12:00 PM

Thanks Janice:-) I wrote this about 3 months ago and have been waiting for the right contest to enter it into:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars

Date: 12/18/2015 3:03:00 PM

You always write the best Haiku's!! Congrats!-*smiles*

Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2015 3:08:00 PM

aww Laura I never know if I have actually written a proper haiku or not - I have had three published in haiku journals. I set a challenge to our 6th form creative writing group with 5 7 5 syllables but called the form 'three line poetry' as I struggle to know if what I have written is correct:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 12/14/2015 5:49:00 PM

Zephyr has a hand in instigating romance among the clouds...he has taken over Cupid's job! A delightful three liner, Jan. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 12/15/2015 1:04:00 AM

Thanks Paul I wrote this some months ago been waiting for a suitable time to post it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 12/13/2015 4:16:00 PM

jan, no matter what you write....it is always a delight....your words are Beautiful and sweet....plus your style is so unique....and that's why I am proudly your fan....and from what is in your heart, I am sure you have a happy man....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 12/13/2015 4:22:00 PM

Oh Eric that is such a sweet comment - I try and write in various styles I have learned so much since I started writing and posting here in Feb 2014:-) Celebrate our Silver Anniversary next year so I hope he is happy:-) hugs Jan xx

Adithya Yogesh

Date: 12/13/2015 12:21:00 PM

A mix of art and writing resulting in an exceptional piece...Congrats Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/13/2015 12:25:00 PM

Thanks for the delightful comment Adithya:-) hugs Jan xx