Clouds

He lay outside    on the cellar door    one day
Lazy    gazing at the sky
A child    a dutiful child
Before he knew clouds move    or why
Those scattered billows    grey fringed    hung high
It was late afternoon    with ghostly moon
The lively honey bees    some suspended    sip    then buzzzzzzz    zip!
He's heard    from experienced    older folk
The earth    years from the sun    goes round
Dreamy    following    eyes go round and round
On carousel    astride mind's steed    he's off the ground
Gently rocking    lifting    on that waving sea
This quite a vital sort of primal ecstasy
Clouds and festivals    Picassoette    surreal
That music in the air    nature's breath    infects the skin    the veins
Ah    those few moments    so rare    so hauntingly spare........

When the screen door creaks open he shivers!
                                     then
Mother calls him in to dinner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 10/17/2014 10:32:00 AM
Knock, knock! The password? "Andrea sent me". She new I would love this one and she was right. This one speaks to me. I see it all I feel it all. All my senses are stimulated by this poem. Definitely adding this one to my favs. Thank You Daver.
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Date: 10/15/2014 12:16:00 AM
I hope Maurice comes to visit this one, Daver. WEll, I am off to bed now. It was nice seeing you tonight.
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Date: 10/16/2014 10:18:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea for posting this old poem. I'd forgotten about it. The situation is right out of my childhood. Love, daver
Date: 9/6/2012 4:42:00 PM
Daydreams, must be like contemplation, Daver. "those few moments so rare", these times one feels that rude awakenings, are just disturbingly rude. I watched some clouds today (love having the window behind the computer:), looked like the two eyes of a forgotten Greek god. Wide nose, almond eyes, a wide but low forhead with slightly curled. hair. I drew him, but his eyes are dark and eerie.:( Take care, love you, Mikki
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Date: 5/2/2010 9:42:00 AM
Awesome, Dave. It reminds me of the same boy you wrote about in that poem you say is your best writing.Where the boy is always in the cornfield looking at someting, and the mom never "gets it" Glad I found this one. Thanks for mentioning "Of Love Perverse" I have so many poems to post here (all in good time) Waiting for a contest about things Perverse for that one. heehee. LUv andrea
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Date: 5/26/2009 3:41:00 PM
Like the sea i love the clouds, and i would spend hours trying to make out shapes to draw in my mind, lovely poem - took me back, James
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Date: 5/1/2009 4:55:00 PM
To lay upon the grass, gazing at the clouds finding shapes and fantasies in the billows of white. This poem is so descriptive and imaginative. Very well done.
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Date: 4/28/2009 2:25:00 PM
A great visual I get from this pleasant read.
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Date: 4/28/2009 1:19:00 AM
Daver,*********Very nice *********Ernilando
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Date: 4/25/2009 6:51:00 AM
Wow! You surprised me with the ending. Good use of imagery and an interesting format. Nice one! Karen
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Date: 4/24/2009 3:03:00 PM
Such childhood activities and dreams are so captivating, Daver. I have been transported to a better place and time. Well done! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/24/2009 5:45:00 AM
Such a nice poem Daver. So visual yet the feelings elicited in him - and in us - shine through. I like "Picassoette" :-D
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Date: 4/22/2009 1:01:00 PM
heavenly descriptions! a fascinating dreamy lilt to the flow of this poem, cool!!! great ending! Daver! am really digging your work! Jim
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Date: 4/21/2009 1:59:00 PM
Glorious! This is the perfect poem to be read at an avid cloud watching convention! Wonderful glimpse into child's mind. I am a fan! Thanks!
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Date: 4/20/2009 4:28:00 AM
Boy do I miss the screen door creak and then the wooden slap of the wood and then of course mom's scream "Don't Slam The Door." A poem written with so many sweet memories. A simple thing as being called home to dinner is such an act of love. Smiles Daver
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Date: 4/19/2009 5:01:00 PM
Howdy Daver. I'm with Kristin, sure wish I knew you in person. Your writing is so down to earth it just makes us float above with those clouds. You're so real. You are the memory of all innocence and imaginative and wondrous. You recall with awesome detail, and the sharing within your writing, I think sort of flips us out. Yeah, you make us remember. Way to go! Love it. Love, Shar
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Date: 4/19/2009 4:42:00 PM
So amazingly visual and full of life your writing is, Daver! I sure wish I knew you in person, I'll bet your a great Grandpa. :) Excllent poem, I could see it all. love, Kristin
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Date: 4/19/2009 1:36:00 PM
this reminds me of my childhood days,i used to look at the sky and imagine shapes made of clouds,my friends would all say what they see,we all saw different shapes-lovely,very nice indeed-cheers----charma;-)
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Date: 4/19/2009 11:41:00 AM
Oh how lovely those quiet days of gazing at the clouds and dreaming about animal shapes. Thanks for bringing back sweet memories. This is a wonderful poem. Thank you for your comment on my poetry. Keep Writing. God Bless you and have a wonderful day. Love, Dane
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Date: 4/19/2009 10:15:00 AM
Wow, Daver....your poems are so darn good! I am so charmed by this nostalgic write....I see this boy, cow-lick in his hair, perhaps? ...watching the clouds...and hearing that squeaky screen door and his mother's voice, so so good ....so charming!
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Date: 4/19/2009 9:20:00 AM
this took me back to when i was a kid and i used to sit in my grandmas lap and point out the different cloud creatures in the sky. i haven't thought about those days in a long time. thanks
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