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Crepuscular cumbersome clouds above, Curdled and coal-black, heavy with cold rain. Silence reigned below like a brooding dove. Peace lost seem it would not be found again To the discomfort of old ones in pain, With all the chill of winter, they complain. City fraught with fear, although no wind blew, Incessant rain starts, with no respite found Birds made their quick escape, away they flew To safer places where covers abound In cosy nooks, far from loud booming sound Of thunder and bright flash that hearts so wound. Raining without respite for eight long hours, Felt as if all life, had left normal time. Wind surging enough to show its powers, Nature decreed all had made a bad crime, Men feared their city was not worth a dime. As cold rain increased mingling all with slime. Morning came, relief winds blew clouds away, Men rose to clean the slime without delay.

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Date: 6/29/2021 2:49:00 PM
Wow, what an amazing write! ~Anna
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Date: 6/23/2021 12:12:00 PM
Agree with Andrea, love the alliteration. We could use coal black clouds heavy with cold rain here in California. Great poem.
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Date: 6/23/2021 11:53:00 AM
The dark clouds they bring on doom and gloom, a wonderful free verse Victor, thank goodness “Morning came, relief winds blew clouds away”… Hugs, Belle
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Date: 6/22/2021 12:40:00 PM
This is an exquisite write, your poems if ever possible are getting to be totally unbelievable - I applaud your talent and creativity. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 6/21/2021 11:16:00 PM
Rough in the water and weather. Roper use to tell stories when the weather was rough out at sea. Great rhyme and imagery. Love it ... Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/21/2021 12:33:00 PM
very interesting rhyme scheme and I loved the use of alliteration in your opening lines, Victor
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Date: 6/21/2021 11:48:00 AM
Nature can certainly be scary at times, as shown in your vividly realistic portrayal. Marvelous writing!
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Date: 6/21/2021 7:12:00 AM
Wow! Great and creepy imagery! Love it!
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Date: 6/21/2021 5:12:00 AM
I felt the reign of nature you so brilliantly described, Victor. Thank goodness, we can count on another day to return us to normal.
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Date: 6/21/2021 4:33:00 AM
Everything you said about the devastating rainstorm was utterly right, Victor. There was cleaning to be done afterward and personnel trying to assess the wreckage; blessings, and regards.
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Date: 6/21/2021 2:45:00 AM
You described the horrendous storm well Victor and the aftermath of clearing up afterwards as people survey the devastation it has caused. Tom
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