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Cityscape Sundown

The tired sun sets over an everbustling city Blinding dazed commuters heading west Their cars in single file attempt to scatter I hear a sound of hush descend over the cityscape While towers scraping as high as they can reach Just crave to punch their card and call it a day Hoping to wind down before they close their eyes The buildings gently exhale and bid adieu while A setting sun ablaze at the end of each long day Lights on cue the downtown garden of glass towers Submitted on February 5, 2020 for contest WRITING PROMPT - TAKE THE DAGGER OUT sponsored by DEAR HEART - RANKED 3RD and January 16, 2020 for contest CITYSCAPE sponsored by JULIA WARD

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Constance La France

Date: 2/22/2020 6:07:00 PM

Line, wonderful write and congratulations on your win in my contest _Constance

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/22/2020 6:36:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. Most appreciated.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/19/2020 10:31:00 PM

Hi Line, Love the metaphor in this poem and the movement of the poem from sundown into twilight! Congratulations!

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2020 1:18:00 AM

Thanks for your lovely visit and compliment, Sam.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 1/17/2020 6:35:00 PM

Hello Line … you have created a verse that describes almost every city in the western world - thank you Line - Lindsay

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 7:09:00 PM

Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Lindsay.

Running Wolves

Date: 1/17/2020 3:56:00 PM

Ahhhh...yes after 20 years I'm still scraping the big city residue off my shoes... Give me the quiet small towns ever more...

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 7:09:00 PM

I hear you, Running Wolves.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/17/2020 12:08:00 PM

Wow! Awesome cityscape, Line! Love how you've personified the skyscrapers so humanely. Superb entry for the contest. Warm wishes, Gershon

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:53:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gershon. Most appreciated.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 1/17/2020 8:20:00 AM

This is REALLY creatively composed--especially the personification of the buildings, Line! Janice

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:54:00 PM

Thanks, Janice. Most appreciated.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/17/2020 4:47:00 AM

Well written Line, left the city 25 years ago, don't miss it though. They are ugly and at the same time beautiful. Hope your new year going well. Good luck. Tom

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:54:00 PM

I agree. Nothing beats nature, Tom.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/16/2020 11:53:00 PM

A wonderful feeling of "city" in this cityscape, Line.

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:42:00 AM

Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Caren.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 1/16/2020 11:23:00 PM

Line, through your eloquence, one can sense the fatigue of, not only the workers heading home, but also the fatigue of the sun after a long day! Very nice!

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM

Thanks for your lovely visit and compliment, Evelyn.

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/16/2020 8:56:00 PM

lovely line....your imagery brings it to life :) hugs

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM

Thanks, Sandra. Much appreciated.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2020 8:31:00 PM

very cool imagery in your cityscape, Line!! Good luck in the contest. Soupmail.

Line Gauthier
Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. Most appreciated.