Cityscape Sundown

The tired sun sets over an everbustling city
Blinding dazed commuters heading west
Their cars in single file attempt to scatter
I hear a sound of hush descend over the cityscape
While towers scraping as high as they can reach
Just crave to punch their card and call it a day
Hoping to wind down before they close their eyes
The buildings gently exhale and bid adieu while
A setting sun ablaze at the end of each long day
Lights on cue the downtown garden of glass towers



Submitted on February 5, 2020 for contest WRITING PROMPT - TAKE THE DAGGER OUT sponsored by DEAR HEART  -  RANKED 3RD

Posted on January 16, 2020

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Date: 2/22/2020 6:07:00 PM
Line, wonderful write and congratulations on your win in my contest _Constance
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Date: 2/22/2020 6:36:00 PM
Thank you, Constance. Most appreciated.
Date: 2/19/2020 10:31:00 PM
Hi Line, Love the metaphor in this poem and the movement of the poem from sundown into twilight! Congratulations!
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2020 1:18:00 AM
Thanks for your lovely visit and compliment, Sam.
Date: 1/17/2020 6:35:00 PM
Hello Line … you have created a verse that describes almost every city in the western world - thank you Line - Lindsay
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Date: 1/17/2020 7:09:00 PM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Lindsay.
Date: 1/17/2020 3:56:00 PM
Ahhhh...yes after 20 years I'm still scraping the big city residue off my shoes... Give me the quiet small towns ever more...
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Date: 1/17/2020 7:09:00 PM
I hear you, Running Wolves.
Date: 1/17/2020 12:08:00 PM
Wow! Awesome cityscape, Line! Love how you've personified the skyscrapers so humanely. Superb entry for the contest. Warm wishes, Gershon
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Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:53:00 PM
Thank you so much, Gershon. Most appreciated.
Date: 1/17/2020 8:20:00 AM
This is REALLY creatively composed--especially the personification of the buildings, Line! Janice
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Line Gauthier
Date: 1/17/2020 1:54:00 PM
Thanks, Janice. Most appreciated.
Date: 1/17/2020 4:47:00 AM
Well written Line, left the city 25 years ago, don't miss it though. They are ugly and at the same time beautiful. Hope your new year going well. Good luck. Tom
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Date: 1/17/2020 1:54:00 PM
I agree. Nothing beats nature, Tom.
Date: 1/16/2020 11:53:00 PM
A wonderful feeling of "city" in this cityscape, Line.
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Date: 1/17/2020 1:42:00 AM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Caren.
Date: 1/16/2020 11:23:00 PM
Line, through your eloquence, one can sense the fatigue of, not only the workers heading home, but also the fatigue of the sun after a long day! Very nice!
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Line Gauthier
Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM
Thanks for your lovely visit and compliment, Evelyn.
Date: 1/16/2020 8:56:00 PM
lovely line....your imagery brings it to life :) hugs
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Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra. Much appreciated.
Date: 1/16/2020 8:31:00 PM
very cool imagery in your cityscape, Line!! Good luck in the contest. Soupmail.
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Date: 1/16/2020 11:42:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea. Most appreciated.
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