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City Street

Street
pulsates
under sky
scrapers, listen
To the city breathe 
blowing, huffing, puffing
hurry, push, eyes blankly stare
SCREAMS echoing in the alley 
go ignored in the sidewalk shuffle  
stench of urine, decay and APATHY


By Rhonda Johnson-Saunders, February 9, 2012
First place in Suit Yourself contest max 16 (Brian Strand)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 2/20/2012 11:05:00 AM
Congratulations on the super win in ~Brian's~ "Suit Yourself" contest Rhonda. Love, Carol
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/21/2012 1:35:00 PM
Thank you, Carol!
Date: 2/18/2012 5:57:00 PM
What an astute observation your last line brings to mind and how appropriate that your poem took top honors with such stiff competition. Congratulations!
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/18/2012 8:15:00 PM
Thank you, Connie! I appreciate the kind words. Blessings, Rhonda
Date: 2/17/2012 9:45:00 PM
Really a wonderful poem Rhonda...enjoyed much.
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/18/2012 8:16:00 PM
Thanks, Jonas!! Blessings, Rhonda
Date: 2/17/2012 6:32:00 PM
Fantastic win Rhonda! Great write. I enjoyed reading this work very much...Jon
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/18/2012 8:16:00 PM
Thank you, Jon!!
Date: 2/17/2012 5:48:00 PM
Congrats Rhonda on a great first place win.. so great to see poets recycle entries for other contests.. good idea..way to go..luv..
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/17/2012 7:42:00 PM
Thanks, Linda-Marie. I wasn't sure if it was right for your contest from the beginning. I even mentioned that to you. But I still liked it and didn't want to change it. My poem is descriptive, yes, but not the beauty you were looking for. LOL. Blessings and hugs, Rhonda
Date: 2/17/2012 1:50:00 PM
Rhonda, awesome etheree. Very insightful and well worded. well done. Congrats on winning 1st place in Brian's contest..........S.Ronthorpe
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/17/2012 2:33:00 PM
Thanks so much, Samuel!
Date: 2/17/2012 1:31:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win Rhonda, love Elizabeth
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/17/2012 2:32:00 PM
Thank you, Elizabeth!
Date: 2/17/2012 11:46:00 AM
Nice write,Rhonda.Congratulations on your super win with this entry......Keep flying....
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/17/2012 12:53:00 PM
Thank you, olusegun!
Date: 2/9/2012 10:45:00 PM
wow, this is a GREAT etheree. I just love this form, Rhonda. One of my chapbooks is devoted entirely to etheree, and I can see YOU really know how to write them.
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/9/2012 11:25:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea. My first time writing one. I wasn't sure if I got it right. I'm feeling better about now thanks to you.
Date: 2/9/2012 3:11:00 PM
This etheree appears to be describing the streets of Paris very well. I remember those public urinals out on the streets. Good write.
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/9/2012 5:49:00 PM
Thanks, Robert! I have not been to Paris, but I have heard about the urinals. It's amazing all the places we can go in our reading and writing. I do hope to see Paris someday. Blessings, Rhonda
Date: 2/9/2012 7:06:00 AM
you sure do paint a picture here, a very truthful one as well. like this thoughtful poem, speaks volumes about a caring poet that wrote it. love this. harry
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/9/2012 5:51:00 PM
Thank you, Harry. Your comments are very kind. I appreciate you reading my work. Blessings, Rhonda
Date: 2/9/2012 6:36:00 AM
WOW! Well done! I can see this right up at the top of the winner's list. The word apathy speaks volumns and you masterfully placed the word last... so that it echoes, sticks... sidewalk shuffle, great description. I wrote something horrible last night. The fear still prickles. Thanks for all your lovely comments. It is so nice to meet a mom who can identify with my days. Looking forward to reading more of your work. I spend to much time writing, not enough reading, commenting... HUGS Cyndi
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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders
Date: 2/9/2012 4:39:00 PM
Thank you for commenting! I understand the time constraints. I have enough trouble finding the time to write. I want to go back and congratulate all the contest winners. I'm having trouble just thanking everyone who comments on mine. I am going to read your fear entry. I doubt it's horrible. Thanks for taking the time to read my poem today. Blessings, Rhonda