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Cinder Morn

The clouds hanging low 
muffled the maple-covered mountain.
Fog from the saturated earth
weakly, wet the newborn breeze.
Mist maintained the rainy connection
between earth and eternity.
A gray day lay upon 
the weary weakened eye of morning.
Soon the breeze blossomed to wind
wiping the cinders from the sun.

Copyright © Debbie Guzzi | Year Posted 2011

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 3/2/2012 10:17:00 PM I'm not usually fond of a rainy morning but you have made it something special. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Rhonda Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/2/2012 9:08:00 PM DEBBIE... CONGRATULATIONS ..ON YOUR WONDERFUL WIN~ Have yourself a very nice night ;-)*always..pd Login to Reply

Kim Merryman Date: 2/29/2012 2:54:00 PM Beautiful imagery, Debbie. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim Login to Reply

Sashi Prabhu Date: 2/29/2012 3:15:00 AM well sculpted imagery.... congrats on the win~sashi Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 2/29/2012 12:57:00 AM Very nice imagery here Debi.Congratulations on your win. Login to Reply

Ralph Taylor Date: 2/28/2012 5:44:00 PM Congrats, Deb. Outstanding, well written piece. Nice going. luv Ralph Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 2/28/2012 10:51:00 AM Congratulations on your placement in Brian's "Short Verse" contest Debbie. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 9/13/2011 9:11:00 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of John, Debbie Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/12/2011 11:29:00 PM like the cinder effect.. loads of smiling cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 9/12/2011 9:01:00 PM beautiful alliterative imagery in this one of yours Debbie. Great going and congratulations. certainly well deserved Login to Reply

Lori Lucas Mcclure Date: 9/12/2011 6:08:00 PM Congratulations on your amazing win!!---Lori Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/12/2011 3:17:00 PM Congrats on your great work being in the winners' circle..Sara Login to Reply

Kim Merryman Date: 9/12/2011 12:13:00 PM Congrats on your win, Debbie! Kim Login to Reply

Olusegun Arowolo Date: 9/12/2011 11:13:00 AM AWESOME!!!Congrats on your well deserved win,Debbie.Thanks for going through my poems.......YOU are the best...Love Olusegun.. Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 9/12/2011 10:18:00 AM Oh my.....(the most gorgeous poem of all those I've read here).... not forced alliteration...just flows with loveliness! :) Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 9/12/2011 8:32:00 AM Congratulations on your top win In Moses' "Alliteration Poem Please" contest Debbie. Love, Carol Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 9/12/2011 6:31:00 AM A Nice combination alliteration, Debbie. Congratulations on your first place. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 9/12/2011 3:55:00 AM Debbie congrats on your win..David Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 9/12/2011 1:17:00 AM Great Debbie. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 9/12/2011 1:06:00 AM Congrats Debbie on first place win with this great Alliteration poetry luv.. Login to Reply

Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/12/2011 12:25:00 AM A 1st place congratulations Debbie for your placement in John Freeman's Alliteration Poems Please contest. CR Login to Reply

Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/10/2011 3:36:00 PM I really like this line..."A gray day lay upon the weary weakened eye of morning" CR Login to Reply Debbie Guzzi Date: 9/12/2011 8:55:00 AM Thanks Caryl..what you feel is the PULL of internal rhyme..though the verse has no end rhyme and I believe it to be Free Verse..a wee smattering of internal rhyme was used for emphasis of the concluding thought..