Debbie Guzzi Poet Alliteration

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Cinder Morn

The clouds hanging low 
muffled the maple-covered mountain.
Fog from the saturated earth
weakly, wet the newborn breeze.
Mist maintained the rainy connection
between earth and eternity.
A gray day lay upon 
the weary weakened eye of morning.
Soon the breeze blossomed to wind
wiping the cinders from the sun.

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 2, 2012 at 10:17 PM I'm not usually fond of a rainy morning but you have made it something special. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Rhonda

Poet Destroyer A March 2, 2012 at 9:08 PM DEBBIE... CONGRATULATIONS ..ON YOUR WONDERFUL WIN~ Have yourself a very nice night ;-)*always..pd

Kim Merryman February 29, 2012 at 2:54 PM Beautiful imagery, Debbie. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim

Sashi Prabhu February 29, 2012 at 3:15 AM well sculpted imagery.... congrats on the win~sashi

Kash Poet February 29, 2012 at 12:57 AM Very nice imagery here Debi.Congratulations on your win.

Ralph Taylor February 28, 2012 at 5:44 PM Congrats, Deb. Outstanding, well written piece. Nice going. luv Ralph

Carol Sunshine Brown February 28, 2012 at 10:51 AM Congratulations on your placement in Brian's "Short Verse" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta September 13, 2011 at 9:11 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of John, Debbie

Nette Onclaud September 12, 2011 at 11:29 PM like the cinder effect.. loads of smiling cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs

Robert A. Dufresne September 12, 2011 at 9:01 PM beautiful alliterative imagery in this one of yours Debbie. Great going and congratulations. certainly well deserved

Lori Lucas Mcclure September 12, 2011 at 6:08 PM Congratulations on your amazing win!!---Lori

Sara Kendrick September 12, 2011 at 3:17 PM Congrats on your great work being in the winners' circle..Sara

Kim Merryman September 12, 2011 at 12:13 PM Congrats on your win, Debbie! Kim

Olusegun Arowolo September 12, 2011 at 11:13 AM AWESOME!!!Congrats on your well deserved win,Debbie.Thanks for going through my poems.......YOU are the best...Love Olusegun..

Carrie Richards September 12, 2011 at 10:18 AM Oh my.....(the most gorgeous poem of all those I've read here).... not forced alliteration...just flows with loveliness! :)

Carol Sunshine Brown September 12, 2011 at 8:32 AM Congratulations on your top win In Moses' "Alliteration Poem Please" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

John Freeman September 12, 2011 at 6:31 AM A Nice combination alliteration, Debbie. Congratulations on your first place. Agape, Moses

David Williams September 12, 2011 at 3:55 AM Debbie congrats on your win..David

Joyce Johnson September 12, 2011 at 1:17 AM Great Debbie. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 12, 2011 at 1:06 AM Congrats Debbie on first place win with this great Alliteration poetry luv..

Caryl Ramsdale September 12, 2011 at 12:25 AM A 1st place congratulations Debbie for your placement in John Freeman's Alliteration Poems Please contest. CR

Caryl Ramsdale September 10, 2011 at 3:36 PM I really like this line..."A gray day lay upon the weary weakened eye of morning" CR Debbie Guzzi September 12, 2011 at 8:55 AM Thanks Caryl..what you feel is the PULL of internal rhyme..though the verse has no end rhyme and I believe it to be Free Verse..a wee smattering of internal rhyme was used for emphasis of the concluding thought..