Cheeky

fluttering lashes soon part
cheek touching toward heaven
through their weave the stars appear
pin pricks on black batten night


Contest: Hammock in the Sky - Tanaga
Poet: Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/5/12

*Cheeky /saucy, audacious, bold.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/15/2012 11:11:00 PM

Debbie, a nice sweet Congratulations with your excellent win in Nette;s " HAMMOCK OF SKY IN TANAGA " beautiful contest. ~ :-) take care* PD

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/15/2012 6:05:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Enjoyed reading again..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2012 10:28:00 AM

Very cool tanaga you wrote. Glad I am seeing it now while I go thru the winners' list. Great imagery as you always do, Debs. Congrats on the win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2012 10:28:00 AM

such a cute title for this one too.

Tahera Mannan

Date: 9/14/2012 3:10:00 AM

Many congrats debbie for this cheeky win.

Kash Poet

Date: 9/13/2012 12:49:00 PM

Love this verse Debi.Congrats on your win!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 9/12/2012 9:41:00 PM

A lovely view, Debbie, and so different from the others on the list...love it! Big congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 9/12/2012 12:04:00 PM

Debbie, I like the view through your hammock, great title, enjoyed this. Congratulations on your win!

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/12/2012 1:22:00 PM

oh you were seeing the veiw through my lashes as I lay on my hammock ;)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/12/2012 10:14:00 AM

starry-eyed in own piece of heaven, debbie... classic!..sweet congrats on your win in my contest!..:)huggs

Debra Squyres

Date: 9/12/2012 9:32:00 AM

Well this is a different take on the theme...I like it !! Well done and congrats !!

Gwendolen Song

Date: 9/12/2012 7:08:00 AM

Scoot over, Debs! Make some room for me on your hammock!! Senses alive with this one...I really liked the playful interaction between your face and the sky with a clever scripted title too! Now where did u say this hammock was hanging?.............................

Apoorva Patrikar

Date: 9/12/2012 6:16:00 AM

congratulations :) great poem!! great imagery

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 9/12/2012 6:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Debbie, this winners list is full of my fave poets, not all I admit but most of them .. xx

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/12/2012 5:33:00 AM

Finishing up packing for my vacation and thought I would take a break and congratulate the winners of the "Hammock" contest. Congratulations Debbie. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/12/2012 5:14:00 AM

congrats Debbie on a great win for this super title and poem featuring theme .. luv it ..

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/12/2012 4:34:00 AM

Very unique Deb. I can see why it was a favorite and a winner. Congratulations!

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/9/2012 6:40:00 AM

clever way to approach this contest. love your title, very english indeed!

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/6/2012 9:50:00 PM

Hey hon, I love this, especially the word batten... heft to it, longevity, purpose. Batten is meant to last, as lovely and fragile as it might seem. Oh, waxing on. I'm wiped off to bed. Last night was awful. Today was ideal &d I am working on self soothing. She seemed happier tonight, going to sleep. I must get to bed, just in case. I had 4 hours sleep last night. I'm crumbling. Now, heads up re Soup newsletter. READ Asante Indira and Kelly Greer. Free Versers so good they should teach it.xoxDEE

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/6/2012 11:37:00 AM

Mother used to speak of that batten lace..Great descriptive lines..Sara

Jack Ellison

Date: 9/6/2012 11:29:00 AM

You is one of my fav'rite people here on the Soup, my dear Debbie! Love everything I've read of yours... this one is no exception! Love and big hugs, Jack