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fluttering lashes soon part cheek touching toward heaven through their weave the stars appear pin pricks on black batten night Contest: Hammock in the Sky - Tanaga Poet: Debbie Guzzi Date: 9/5/12 *Cheeky /saucy, audacious, bold.

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Date: 9/15/2012 11:11:00 PM
Debbie, a nice sweet Congratulations with your excellent win in Nette;s " HAMMOCK OF SKY IN TANAGA " beautiful contest. ~ :-) take care* PD
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Date: 9/15/2012 6:05:00 PM
Congrats on your win..Enjoyed reading again..Sara
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Date: 9/15/2012 10:28:00 AM
Very cool tanaga you wrote. Glad I am seeing it now while I go thru the winners' list. Great imagery as you always do, Debs. Congrats on the win.
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Date: 9/15/2012 10:28:00 AM
such a cute title for this one too.
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Date: 9/14/2012 3:10:00 AM
Many congrats debbie for this cheeky win.
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Date: 9/13/2012 12:49:00 PM
Love this verse Debi.Congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/12/2012 9:41:00 PM
A lovely view, Debbie, and so different from the others on the list...love it! Big congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 9/12/2012 12:04:00 PM
Debbie, I like the view through your hammock, great title, enjoyed this. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/12/2012 1:22:00 PM
oh you were seeing the veiw through my lashes as I lay on my hammock ;)
Date: 9/12/2012 10:14:00 AM
starry-eyed in own piece of heaven, debbie... classic!..sweet congrats on your win in my contest!..:)huggs
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Date: 9/12/2012 9:32:00 AM
Well this is a different take on the theme...I like it !! Well done and congrats !!
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Date: 9/12/2012 7:08:00 AM
Scoot over, Debs! Make some room for me on your hammock!! Senses alive with this one...I really liked the playful interaction between your face and the sky with a clever scripted title too! Now where did u say this hammock was hanging?.............................
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Date: 9/12/2012 6:16:00 AM
congratulations :) great poem!! great imagery
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Date: 9/12/2012 6:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Debbie, this winners list is full of my fave poets, not all I admit but most of them .. xx
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Date: 9/12/2012 5:33:00 AM
Finishing up packing for my vacation and thought I would take a break and congratulate the winners of the "Hammock" contest. Congratulations Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/12/2012 5:14:00 AM
congrats Debbie on a great win for this super title and poem featuring theme .. luv it ..
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Date: 9/12/2012 4:34:00 AM
Very unique Deb. I can see why it was a favorite and a winner. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/9/2012 6:40:00 AM
clever way to approach this contest. love your title, very english indeed!
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Date: 9/6/2012 9:50:00 PM
Hey hon, I love this, especially the word batten... heft to it, longevity, purpose. Batten is meant to last, as lovely and fragile as it might seem. Oh, waxing on. I'm wiped off to bed. Last night was awful. Today was ideal &d I am working on self soothing. She seemed happier tonight, going to sleep. I must get to bed, just in case. I had 4 hours sleep last night. I'm crumbling. Now, heads up re Soup newsletter. READ Asante Indira and Kelly Greer. Free Versers so good they should teach it.xoxDEE
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Date: 9/6/2012 11:37:00 AM
Mother used to speak of that batten lace..Great descriptive lines..Sara
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Date: 9/6/2012 11:29:00 AM
You is one of my fav'rite people here on the Soup, my dear Debbie! Love everything I've read of yours... this one is no exception! Love and big hugs, Jack
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Date: 9/5/2012 3:49:00 PM
Love the last line. Thank you so much for your generous words on my lyric. :) Cindy
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Date: 9/5/2012 2:51:00 PM
This is an interesting for. You have written a good example of it for the contest. I feel drawn to these shorties.
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Date: 9/5/2012 2:48:00 PM
Not a lot of words, but they collectively convey a great deal of descriptiveness.
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Date: 9/5/2012 2:43:00 PM
beautiful xD
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