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Recently, I was chasing moonbeams in a dream It's just a typical, whimsical childhood scheme but this time a veil was lifted from my eyes and what I saw had me gasping with sighs. I felt chilled when I realized I was all alone on some distant planet that wasn't my own. There were rings and moons circling around Could this be Saturn? That would be profound! The landscape here was far beyond Earth's realm and I was feeling more than a little overwhelmed. Then, I felt rather than saw something draw near. I didn't sense danger, nor did I see anything to fear. As an earthling, I questioned if other life existed in the universe, but my thoughts were oddly twisted. For I found that I was an alien and about to freeze, Should I say, "Hello. Take me to your leader, please?" I was greeted with a signal that I didn't understand but offered what looked like a perfectly normal hand. I was taken inside a colossal sized geodesic dome where people moved around as if it was their home. Humans! They looked peaceful and devoid of stress compared to Earth, that I'd left in a terrible mess. I was fed and given warm clothes before taken out to learn what Saturn's rings are really all about. The shimmering rings were kept glimmering like jewels And when skated upon they became sensory tools. Saturnaliens, if that's a word... used the icy track here to protect the planet from intruders near the atmosphere. I gave it a go, but keeping my balance was a bit tricky On thin edges of skate blades, I needed something sticky but with a bit of help I got the hang of it and was relieved. Round and round I skated on this Saturn I had conceived. Skaters were performing jumps and spins within my sight. There were no signs of animosity. Life was a pure delight. Everyone interacted with humility. There were no kings. I longed to live my life here and skate upon Saturn's rings.

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Date: 2/25/2025 10:46:00 AM
Lin, funny how our protagonist becomes an alien. It's all interesting to think about. I think you're looking and for and dreaming about a place of peace. What a wonderful wish. Wouldn't it be funny if visitors from outer space came and took the prez and his cabinet away. They could say, "You have one more chance to fix this or else." Too funny really, but we'll have to clean this all up ourselves if we can.
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/25/2025 11:44:00 AM
LOL Duke. I seriously doubt aliens would think T-rump worthy of abducting except to drop him off on some uninhabited place... perhaps into a black hole, his 'choice' cabinet picks, and ol' Vlad, too. Unbelievable, what he's condoning.
Date: 2/24/2025 10:36:00 AM
- This is certainly what the sponsor wants (even in rhyme) - I had no plans to enter this contest... a picture popped up... and grandma came ... (a silly poem:))) - Good luck in the contest, Lin :) - hugs
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/24/2025 11:43:00 AM
That's exactly the way I feel. lol Hugs, sweet friend.
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 2/24/2025 11:41:00 AM
- No, absolutely not... if it did,I wouldn't have posted it... :) - hugs
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/24/2025 11:17:00 AM
ah, Anne-Lise. Here's a question for you... Do you care what one person really thinks about what you write? I really don't but I do enjoy the challenge. Your grandma poem may have been silly, but it made me smile and I think that's more important than any list of "winning" poems.
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 2/24/2025 10:50:00 AM
(She didn't like either your or my suggestion:)))
Date: 2/23/2025 8:52:00 PM
Brilliant writing Lin, I enjoyed your astronomical journey. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/23/2025 10:28:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. It’s kind of an off the wall take but it’s all I had.

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